reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Jul 25, 2010 07:30 am
For this chapter the only thing i would say is you spent allot of time saying how much she wanted to be apart of the meeting and know what is going on. In my opinion just get it down effectively then keep the story moving.
meagan reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Jun 27, 2007 10:27 pm
more more more!!! this is great! their chemistry is on fire! keep it up!
patricia reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Apr 08, 2006 01:05 pm
its a really good start i cant wait for what's going to happen next.
undercoverqt reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Jan 04, 2006 11:02 pm
Very nice plot and well-written story! I love it! :)
KLime reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Jan 19, 2005 11:49 pm
little review cause not much time, to say that so far I like what you do, so if you could continue, I'd be happy!!
tudorrose1533 reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Jan 16, 2005 07:55 pm
I love the little details, like the bindimun and Harry going "What girlfriend?" The whole thing was exquisite, and worth the wait. Draco's actions are certainly interesting, and I look forward to whatever comes next!
CuteElf14 reviewed Futile Attempts at Civility
on Jan 16, 2005 06:19 pm
MORE! it's very good!
on Jan 16, 2005 04:37 pm
Very nice. Is Snape actually....fond of Ginny? That's awesome. It would be even more awesome if she got into an advanced potions class. I always see her as being rather talented in potions, although I've no idea why.
on Jan 07, 2005 12:29 pm
*waves from LJ*
Very nice story so far. I actually like how they're fighting; it adds to the tension between them. And yay for a story where Draco's magically converted to the side of the light (I'm allowed to criticize them; I wrote one myself a while back).
And it seems that Ginny's carrying a little hate of her own...ah, the fun that is love/hate relationships.
Andrastre reviewed Confrontations
on Jan 07, 2005 06:54 am
Hey, I really love this! I enjoy arguments, and the insults they're throwing are really well thought out. I especially like when he grabs the front of her shirt- like there's already physical contact between them, even though they're arguing. And the double entendre when he says he doesn't respect her is great, although maybe just a figment of my imagination? Anyway, please update soon!
on Jan 02, 2005 02:08 pm
I think I already reviewed your story somewhere else (don't remember where), but so what, I'll just do it again. It's a great story so far, can't wait for more.
on Jan 01, 2005 05:08 pm
This is excellent! I love it. You do a wonderful job of portraying both Draco and Ginny. Nicely written. I can't wait to see what happens next!
SomethingsWicked reviewed Confrontations
on Dec 31, 2004 07:49 pm
Love it! The fighting was excellent and not forced at all. :) You're definately a natural at writing. You're very good. ;) Adding to my favorites. :D Update soon!
CuteElf14 reviewed Confrontations
on Dec 31, 2004 07:15 am
Author's Response: I'm working on that... :)
on Dec 30, 2004 09:40 pm
squeee! this was quite a good setting-the-stage chapter; you've characterized both Draco and Ginny very well -- good luck w/ the rest of the story! :)
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm trying very hard to keep Draco and Ginny in character. :)
Lovely Lioness reviewed Confrontations
on Dec 30, 2004 09:20 am
Hey - I was just reading Tiff's review and I had to respond. Personally that wasn't a pointless chapter, because while nothing truly vital to the plot line occured, it got Draco and Ginny talking (well, arguing, anyways) and mapped out their views of each other; now we know what the two are going to be up against to come to terms with each other. It also left Draco food for thought; a nice chunk of Ginny to chew on. So I view it as a transition chapter. Now we've got the ball rolling, all we have to do is wait for our lovely author to update! :) -Red (Tiffany&Co - No offense meant at all - Just wanted to say that I didn't think it was a pointless chapter, but it seems a little bit. . .stronger? than i'd meant it to. Sorry I was so vehement it saying my piece).
Author's Response: Thanks for the back-up...that's exactly what I had in mind for the purpose of this chapter to be! I don't think you came across as too offensive, personally. :)
And again: I can't thank you enough for being my beta!
Tiffany&Co reviewed Confrontations
on Dec 30, 2004 07:56 am
Hehe, I can never get enough of those two fighting. It's always so much more interesting than, say, Draco and the Trio, in which case their conversation is as follows: "Death Eater!" "Scarhead!" "Death eater!" "Dirt poor Weasel!" "Death eater!" "Mudblood!" "ARRRGGGH!" And then they jump on each other... yeah, so anyway, that's why I liked your little bit of argument, there. To tell you the truth, though, it wasn't a very substantial chapter. Nothing got accomplished besides yelling, especially not if Draco won't even consider what anyone said. It's a good point, by the way, that his beliefs are too deeply ingrained to be reconsidered, even when someone gives him a very logical argument against them. Chapter seemed a little pointless, but funny and well-written. Draco doesn't seem to be doing much so far besides looking cold and angry, but the bit about his beliefs are really, really nice, and good job setting up the tension as far as why he's there and the relationship between him, his father, and Death Eaters.
Author's Response: Heh, yeah, Draco and Ginny had loads of fun biting each others' heads off. I know this chapter was mostly arguing, but like Red mentions in her review, it was kind of a transition chapter. I had to just let them at it, and in the process I think they actually did say some rather substantial things and put a lot of information out on the table, especially when it comes to their beliefs.
Thanks for the nice, long review...and constructive criticism is always welcome!
emvee reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 06:05 pm
i like this a lot. i especially like your canon references. for me, they add to the realism. i think you nailed ginny's character real well. i'm looking forward to reading what you will do for draco. please update soon
Author's Response: Thanks! Compliments on characterization really mean a lot to me, seeing as I'm really trying to stay true to that and canon.
Hope you enjoy chapter 2!
Jenna reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 03:59 pm
that was awesome. I am really starting to like this. I would have never have thought that Malfoy would be in the headquarters like that!
keep me updated with this story. my e-mail is firstname.lastname@example.org.
thanks and happy New Year!
Author's Response: Thank you! There's much more in store, just wait!
Yes, Malfoy in the Order's HQ. It has all kinds of possibilities...
Happy New Year to you, too!
Lovely Lioness reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 02:24 pm
I can't stop smiling! I'm loving this! Oh, and I beta, and would LOVE to beta for you. My address is email@example.com if you decide to take me up on my offer. Can't wait to see how Gin handles Draco on his 'tour'! - The Lovely Lioness
Author's Response: Thanks for offering to beta for me! :) I've just finished chapter 2, so I'll send it to you right now. Thanks again!
Tiffany&Co reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 10:08 am
Really good job, I especially like Ginny's character, completely the opposite of bland. I enjoyed her temper tantrum, which was interesting and kind of funny (considering she was complaining about being treated like a little kid) but seemed a pretty logical (if not practical) reaction. Draco Malfoy seems pretty interesting too. I'd say I'd be your beta, but I haven't been one before, and I'm not sure I'm very good at Britpicking, considering that I'm not British...^-~
Author's Response: Thanks! I've tried very hard to make Ginny's character entirely un-bland...she's no shy little girl, that's for sure. I enjoyed writing her temper tantrum, which yeah, was kind of ironic, but I think it was pretty justified under the circumstances. And Draco...of course he's interesting, he's always interesting!
tweedledee reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 06:10 am
this looks good. I don't know what you have brewing for parts one and two but as far as I'm concerned being thrown in the middle seems more fun. Poor Malfoy with the modified memory looming.
Author's Response: Thanks! Oh, I've got plenty brewing, don't worry...
And yes, poor Malfoy indeed...although the looming modified memory might not be the worst thing in store for him. And it's only looming, not definite. But then again, maybe it will be the worst thing in store for him. But either way, poor Malfoy, indeed. *cackles*
reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 29, 2004 03:40 am
This is good, I would offer to be like a beta or whatever, but not so good when it comes to writing I'm afraid. I wouldn't be very good at it, I can only spell, and that's what dictionary's are for. Anyway, Please update again soon!!
Author's Response: Thanks! It's alright about betaing...got one now! :) I AM a terrible speller, though...lol. My trusty spell check has gotten me out of many a jam. I've updated already, which is quite soon, I think...hope you like chapter 2!
wcoast_girl reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 28, 2004 06:54 pm
Great start! I like the contrast between ginny that she's being treated like a child and then acting like one. We get a real sense of her character through her snit fit. And you've set things up nicely for a relationship to develop with Draco. Cool!
Author's Response: Thanks! Yeah, it is kind of ironic that Ginny's complaining about being babied and then she goes off and pitches a childish fit about it...but hey, when reasoning calmly won't get you anywhere...
reviewed From Bad to Worse
on Dec 28, 2004 06:37 pm
Fabulous start! I really look forward to seeing more. Ginny's impotent rage and instant recognition of the similarity between her position and Draco's were excellently done. It seems like you could end up with either teen convincing the other to switch sides, or to say forget it and just take off - and that I can't predict which way you're going to go just makes me all the more eager.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you like this so far! I had quite a bit of fun writing Ginny's little tantrum...I thought it did turn out pretty well. :)