wow! i loved it! is there a book two? pls tell me what the title is and where it can be found (mtrinidad@altayer.com)
Author's Response: There is no book two as of yet, but if one comes into being, you can find it right here, okay?
WOW !! This story is absolutely amazing, i want wait until book two come's up. Is it gonna taken long before the first chapter ?
Greetz, Jessica
Author's Response: I'm not really sure. I've only written two chapters thus far... It's coming rather shamefully slow...
This is a really wonderful story, it's a classic. Keep up the good work, I'm looking forward to the sequal.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Bloody Brilliant! That's what this story is and that is what you are. I've been reading this story slowly, chapter by chapter, for the past 3 weeks. While some like one-shots and short stories (and I admit I like them too), this one captivated me right from the beginning and I was hypnotized. Each chapter was better than the last, building the story up, until it crescendoed with the last chapter. It's intense, and might overwhelm some, but I loved it! It wasn't drawn out either because each chapter allowed you to understand and feel. You gave us great insight to each character, allowing us to feel and think as they do. Amazing! While I'm certain that your sequel will be great, I'm perfectly content to where this story ended. I hope you write more, as I know you are, and I hope you keep the D/G spirit alive!
Author's Response: Thank you very, very much... And I certainly hope you can be content with it as is, because that sequel is having a hard time coming into being. Thank you again. It means a lot to me that you took the time to review.
I've been reading this story slowly, chapter by chapter, for the past 5 nights. However, after the first chapter, I didn't want to stop reading. I could stay up all night and all day reading until the end, but I want to savor this story, like a fine wine or a great piece of chocolate. It is truly that good. You have an amazing gift of writing. Each chapter is better than the last, slowly building up the story and the characters. I absolutely love where this story is going and I can't wait to keep on reading! Ginny and Draco's characters are written so well and spot on. One more chapter for tonight...trying not to skip and read ahead beacuse I'm dying to know how this ends.
Author's Response: Thanks... Comparing my fic to fine wine and chocolate is just... wow! I love them both, and know the art of savoring well, so I appreciate the comment. Don't skip!!
"I love you," she said tightly, beginning to cry, and Draco dragged her to him impulsively, burying his face in her hair and holding her painfully close. In the darkness, his voice was lost and hollow.
"I will never love you."
These two lines are phenomonal - I'm speechless.
Author's Response: That was probably my favorite part in the story, and a very, very pivotal moment. I sat back after writing and said to myself 'Oh my gosh... Why do I make everything so sad??'
Another excellant chapter - (patly due to the fact you had Draco's birthday as the same date as mine :).) Once again the potrayal of charachters in this was ver realistic.I especially liked Ron's development: his ferocious protectivness of Ginny is partly genuine concern and partly due to his intense disliking towards Draco. It's intresting to see Draco's persona wavering slightly: its very subtly and tactfully approached while on the outside he retains his Malfoy superiority, small things such as his "pulse quickening" and whatnot are very effective. In short Great Story!!
Author's Response: Thanks! Slow and steady wins the race and all that!
An enthralling entry, that is for certain. You have a wonderful talent – I can’t wait to see what happens next. Draco was very much in character especially when he “sneered ungratefully before slipping into unconsciousness”. However, you have also incorporated basic human emotions (like panic and pain at the thought of his father’s death) which bring him back down to Earth and make his character a lot more realistic.
Author's Response: Thank you. I tried to keep in mind that, though he has a larger then life personality, he is after all, human.
i just finished reading this whole story and i have to tell you that it is among the most beautifully crafted work i've ever read, on the internet or on paper. and this is really saying something, i'd like to think. and the way you portrayed draco was so in character and ginny was perfect too *sighs*. the character development was phenomenal and everything was just excellent! please, please, please tell me that there will be a sequel to this!
Author's Response: Thank you... I *am* trying to write that sequel. It's just not flowing right. :(
I'm only on the second chapter so far, but your story is awesome. One of the things that irks me about some D/G fics is that they don't always take the time to set up the relationship, or the characters are OOC, but you've done an excellent job of writing them IC and setting everything up.
The one thing I would point out is that your second chapter is a Giant Blob of Text [TM]. I'm sure this isn't intentional, and probably a result of a computer eating your formatting, so I tought I'd bring it to your attention.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I believe that's been corrected now.
I really like the story and it is great how you have kept Draco so very in character. Sorry, but I think you should check your lay out for this chapter, cos as I am reading it, it is just a block of text...
Author's Response: I think that's been corrected now. Sorry for the mishap!
when do you think you will have a sequel. this is such a great story. at times i was a little annoyed by ginny, but it still worked well and didnt make me like the story any less. draco was exactly as he should be, its always annoying when writers make him suddenly this perfect hero who can do no wrong and is always thoughtful of others and crying over every little thing. you did perfect.
Author's Response: Thank you very much.
i had to stop reading because of the huge paragraphs which are hard to read. could you please separate the dialogue lines, and make smaller paragraphs.
Author's Response: Actually, that isn't me. I noticed that with the new site updates, the first two, I believe, chapters have formatting problems. It fixes itself when you change skins.
Your story is wonderful! At the end there were tears streaming down my face!!! Are you going to write a sequel? PLEASE DO! You are an amazing author and I hope to see even more storied of yours in the future!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm writing the sequel, and I hope to get it done... Time will tell.
I thoroughly enjoyed reading this fic. The only criticism I make is how incredibly meek Ginny is. At times it seemed that Draco and Ginny’s relationship bordered on abusive. i.e incident with blaise in the corridor and she was scared of his reaction. She was just a bit too saccharine for my tastes I thought it should have been brought down a notch.Having said that I loved the way you split the golden trio up and thought that your portrayal of Draco was flawless as with Harry and Dumbledore. I loved Hermione and Ginny being at odds and the ease by which Ron and Hermione forgave each other. Overall a great piece of fanfiction. Accolades *salutes*
Author's Response: Thank you very much, Kat. A few readers have said the same thing about Ginny, and I've taken it into consideration for the sequel. Everyone has to grow up sometime, right? Ginny's time has come. Yes, it did seem a tad abusive, but perhaps dysfunctional is a better term? She wasn't afraid of getting beaten, or abused in any way. She was afraid that he would think less of her, or would break up with her. I wanted her to be a young girl in love, not a powerhouse. Thank you very much for your time!
Oh wow. Words will do this story injustice, but I hate to at least try and explain how great it is. The description you never fail to include is beautiful, and I am addicted to it. I honestly can't express how much I love this story - it is so uplifting, but at the same time so depressing. I guess it's only depressing because I know Draco's not real...but still. I don't cry easily at all - but I did shed quite a few tears in that last chapter. I really hope there will be a sequel? Thankyou so so much for writing this - it was so unbelievably real and fantastic.
Author's Response: Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I worked very hard on this story, and it's nice to see it is well received.
While the story itself was fairly well-written, your characterizations were off. I know I'm being rather blunt, but I honestly couldn't stand the way you portrayed anyone. The pitiable weakness and gullible pliability of Ginny was a travesty at best. The overly adult and contemptable depravity of Draco was vomit inducing. To put young teens into the role of an angsty romance is a perversion of J.K.R.'s once fantastical world. Perhaps I'm a canon purist, but please write your own sordid romance tales and leave another's characters out of them!
Author's Response: With all due respect, I think you're an utter fool. What on earth are you doing reading fanfiction if you're a so called 'canon purist' you're utterly stupid for reading a ship that's not at all canon. In case you missed the title of the website when you stumbled in, its www.dracoandginny.com. I appreciate your candor, but your comments are needlessly cruel. If you didn't like the story, then why did you bother reading it? I can accept criticism, but I find your review contemptable. Your condescending attitude is a flame, not criticism. I'd greatly enjoy seeing something you've written for comparison. I find your attitude, to quote 'vomit inducing' and I'm happy to say, I've heard of very few readers who agree with you. Thank you for your time, but kindly shut up. It's fanon, not canon, and I'll use Rowling's characters as I damn well please, as everyone else on this fanfiction site does.
Author's Response: I'm not going to delete my previous comment, but I am going to apologize for being rather angry about it. I just found the comments you wrote needlessly abusive, which isn't what the review system is for. I stand by what I said about my confusion as to why you are reading fanfiction if you feel so strongly about canon purity, but the manner in which I spoke was rather rude. Also, I think if you believe that the romance between young teens (and sixteen to seventeen is not very young) is all hearts and roses and not angsty or adult, then you're not in touch with a lot of teens. I'm nineteen, and I've experienced my own share of drama and sadness, as well as witnessed it around me. Everyone has different views, and I've expressed mine in my story. I'm not the only one. This is a fanfiction site, after all.
it took me pretty much all day to read this, as i was supposed to be working, but it was worth it. the story line is amazing, not cliche and overused like some (even good) fanfics tend to be. your words flow like poetry onto the page, i swear. the language and descriptions are amazing and original, and you have the most incredible use of metaphors (can you tell i'm an english major?). this was so sad and unbelievably beautiful. thank you so much.
Author's Response: Forgive me if I make little sense. I'm very sleepy right now. Thank you, first off. An english major? That's so cool! I'm glad you're satisfied, and liked the plot. It just sort of came to me.
My God, I'm torn between throwing a fit at you and giving you a million hugs and kisses for making this story enticing enough for me to read through until 3 am...when I have a class at 8! :O Goodness. There were so many tender moments, humorous moments, adorable moments, but most importantly, heart-wrenching moments. Although I know this is not the end of the line, the ending made me sob in a way I've never reacted to another piece of work before. My God, my God, you've gone and done it now...you've made me a canon D/G believer! I realize the constant incoherencies of this review...but one thing is for sure: I'll be reccing this fic on Sugar'n Spice like no other! This is one of the best D/G tales ever weaved in fandom, that I'm certain -- I cannot even believe I never came upon it until tonight! *Is still shocked and emotional*
Author's Response: I get hugs and kisses? Sweet! I'm so happy to have converted you! I'm a canon D/G believer to! I'm glad for any recommendation you send my way. It's flattering!
I really loved this story! I actually think it should be advertised a lot more than it is too. Is your website by chance up yet? I'd love to check it out! Actually, I'd much rather see the next chapter out for 'book two' of the story. (I did see that right didn't I?) Anyhow, marvelous job and I hope to see a sequel (book two) out soon! ~Aya
Author's Response: My website isn't up yet. I'm poor! I don't know how to advertise it though. Any suggestions?
And here I thought I was blown away from your KOTOR vignettes. (MIght I say the last lines of the Atton and Carth character studies brought constricted my heart?) It was sheer joy to discover you write D/G as well. I've just spent an entire span of six hours reading of this heartbreakingly beautiful story. Wonderful carefully crafted character development. You carry the emotions of each character so well, I've identified with most of them through their tumultuous emotions. I love the way Pansy ceases to love Draco romantically and binds herself to him for power. I've been seeing hints of Ron/Pansy pairing, and I'm glad of the slow build up in attraction between them. I wonder in the sequel how will this affect Dumbledore's plans, especially with Draco and Ginny's relationship. I love the way Draco is written. He's lovesick but not a complete fool. Love does not change him; his personality is more or less the same. The only thing that has really changed about him is that he is in love. I feel he's written much more mature and darker than he is in canon, but his personality suits the flow of the story well. Ginny, well, she's hopelessly naive and foolish. It's frightening how easily Draco can dominate her. She's too weak at times but I understand it's a plot device. Can I expect some more fire from her in the sequel? Or will she be too heartbroken over Draco? I feel that Hermione is a bit too harsh, but I do adore the scene where Snape tells her to grow up. I like how you handled Blaise at the end, with Dumbledore intervering. I really didn't expect that one. Plotwise, I must commend you with coming up with the idea of Dumbledore installing Draco as a minister. It's completely unique and brilliant. This was a wonderful read, making me teary eyed and utterly entranced with the story. I truly will look forward to the sequel. Thank you for your beautiful writting.
Author's Response: I do love a long review! A lot of people think Ginny is too weak, but (at the risk of offending people) I think that Rowling's Ginny is too strong. I wanted to write Ginny as a sixteen year old girl first, and a Weasley second. However, there will be more Weasley fire to her in the sequel. Hermione... A few people had trouble with her, which was unexpected. I wrote her as I saw her in canon, and I have to stand by my interpretation. Funnily enough, when I think about the Hermione scene you mentioned, with Snape telling her to grow up, I'm reminded of the scene in the GOF movie where Snape smacks Ron and Harry on the back of the head. Dumbledore's interference with Blaise was sudden for me, to! I realized, after a heartfelt e-mail from a dedicated reviewer, that the way I had finished Blaise's story didn't justify him enough. He deserved more, so I gave it to him. I'm glad you enjoyed my story!
This story was absolutely fantastic. I could not stop reading it and it is by far my favorite fanfiction i have ever read. You have such an amazing talent, the story is so beautifully happy, sad, angry... simply amazing. One thing I especially loved was your capability to keep Draco in character so well. Most stories turn him into this sappy lovesick fool, but you did not. You showed his true colors and did it very well. I hope to see a second book to this stoy in the near future.
Author's Response: Wow, I realize I've gotten behind on my review replies! Karen, thank you very much. Your thoughts are appreciated, and I'm glad I managed to give you a good read.
Oh My God!! That was mind blowing. At time I wanted to kick Draco in the head, for being so heartless!! But Luna said it all (along the lines of) he is strong and loves her enough to break his own heart!! Ginny at times was to needy, but it just fits. I am sure that she will grow if there is a second story. This was BEAUTIFUL! It took me 3 days to read this, it was well worth my time. I hope that there is a book two. Thanks, Trish
Author's Response: She will grow. I promise it. How could she not? She's just a girl here. Thank you very much.
This is the second time i've read this story, and it still made me cry in the end. You need to write a sequel soon! On my second read though, I noted quite a few errors for a story that is beta read. "your" instead of "you're" etc. And the use of apostrophe. If you fix those, it would truly be a masterpiece! Avidly waiting for the sequel. Do try to make it happy please!
Author's Response: My poor beta! She had to work through so much story, at the same time she went to school. You'll have to forgive me, for the mistakes are mine. I'll take the time to go over and correct what I can find as soon as possible.
This was a very pleasing story and a welcome back for me from a long nap away from D/G fiction. The story was entertaining and kept me away from my poor, besotted boyfriend for about a day. I also think that you deserve a nice long review since I've spent so much time reading this. I like that you kept Draco very dark. Crits: Unfortunately, I have several critiques, so I hope you don't mind if I unload them on you. Your use of ephitets is a bit overdone and confusing. Too many 'the silver-haired boy' and 'the Gryffindor' . . . This is my main gripe with everyone, though, so you can ignore that if you'd like. You're wonderfully descriptive of the environment, but I think it was a little overdone. However, you did succeed in creating a lovely, gothic tragedy and good description was a large part of that. You may want to work on your dialogue flow. Draco in the books is lofty but not *that* lofty. Some use of contractions would be a good start. Remember, they're all still just people. And I would, finally, recommend you get a better beta reader. Small things like using 'then' for 'than', 'ma' for 'mum' are things a good beta should pick up. You learn when you write in this fandom, and it's good for you to get feedback, so I hope you're not offended by this old swot. You've got a good storytelling ability, so you should use it. Sing
Author's Response: I don't mind critiques at all. They just improve the writing process. Do I get to defend myself though? I'll definitely take the comment about too much description into consideration, though I think descriptive writing is my strength. However, I purposely made Draco speak extremely properly. It was a device to show how cold and arrogant he is, and how he is a world apart from the Weasley's. His lack of humanity was intentional because I mean, come on, *nobody* talks like that! My beta had to read a lot of chapters, so a few errors here and there are understandable. Chances are, she corrected them and I missed! She's really good. Thank you very much for taking the time to leave a review. I'll keep your words in mind when I write the sequel.