Name: kellbell930 reviewed
Chapter Ten on Feb 28, 2007 08:58 am
*sigh* Draco, Draco, Draco. oh dear. Brilliant story so far though! I love your characterization of him even though sometimes I just want to smack him silly. I agree Ginny is slightly too immature but I'm sure its all in good reason. Cant wait to keep reading!
Name: pingpong0601 reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Three on Feb 25, 2007 02:25 pm
This story was so intense. I don't know why it took me so long to actually read it but I finally did and it was amazing. I can't wait to read the rest of it. Only two things bothered me throughout: Ginny's profound naivety and Blaise's penchant for crying. It just seems so out of character for both of them but in the end I think it worked out. Ginny is no longer as naive, I'm sure the next part of the story will show that. I see that it was the awakening for her. I hope Blaise finds the salvation he seeks in Dumbledore. This is a very intriguing story. I've decided that sacrificing my paper for AP European History is worth it. You are a wonderful writer and I'm glad you are continuing with this.
Name: felicitas reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Three on Feb 20, 2007 04:33 am
I haven´t been able to stop thinking about your fanfic since I started reading it!!! First I was overwhelmed by all the beauty of it (don´t get me wrong, I still believe it´s amazing) but there are some things that are starting to make no sense in me. First, every single Ministry of magic has been an older man, so why Draco? He´s still too young, I know he´s a natural born leader, but still, isn´t really anyone else out there? I still don´t know how everyone else will feel with a Slitherin with so much power. Second, when Draco fell during the Quidditch game, he told Dumbledore he wanted Ginny at the end, not as his wife but he wanted her. So, why does he have doubts when he leaves her? Third, there are some plots that seemed to be important and then they just didn´t come along.Right now, I just remember the mirror thing, I hope that it will play an important role in Book 2.
For once, I get your Ginny, she´s a fiercy Weasley when it comes to defending the man she loves. But like you said, she´s a 16 year-old girl, and deep inside she believed she could make Draco change his mind about their relationship. Aren´t we women always like that?
But I got to tell you, what got most into me was your care for the details, specially those that made Draco the Draco we know he is. The cleansing spell?? Wonderful!!! It seemed to be nothing at all, but that only gesture made him so slitherinesque (is that a comprehensible word?) that the image makes me sick to my stomach. Someone said that Pansy was wonderful. I totally agree!!! She made me want to smack her pug face all over the place!!!
So what I´ve been trying to tell you is that you made me feel so many things that I really thank you for this amazing fanfic!!! I´m addicted to it!!! I can´t wait to see what Book 2 brings ahead and sorry if my english is not that polish but spanish is my mother tongue... Thank you!!!
Name: felicitas reviewed
Prologue on Feb 17, 2007 04:22 am
I had to force myself into leaving your story for a bit and have a life!!! Love your writing and the plot... So far you are the only one who has convinced me that D/G could really happen...
Name: LorienStarlight reviewed
Chapter Five on Dec 22, 2006 09:44 am
Hi. So far, I love your story, and I wasn't going to comment at first, but there's just one little thing that really bothers me about it. Your speech is too formal. I know it doesn't seem like a big deal, and it works in Lord of the Rings because that's how the characters in LOTR talk, but in Harry Potter it just makes the fic that much less real. The characters just don't talk like that. Really, the only things that I would change is don't use "lest" or "for" (as in lest this happen, or for in the sense of because). It'll really improve your stories if you just try to minimize those two words. They got a little distracting as I was reading. I'll let you know how I like your story when I'm done reading it. Thanks,
- Lorien
Name: CCC reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Three on Dec 16, 2006 11:44 am
Oh my god! There had better be a sequel! I can't believe this is the end. This was truly amazing. I got thoroughly caught up in your world. I am going to be so pissed (angry not drunk) if there isn't more.
Name: blvroffth reviewed
Chapter Thirteen on Nov 28, 2006 05:44 pm
So I'm nowhere near finished with the fic, but I just *had* to comment on this chapter. This is my fave chapter so far just because of the scene with Arthur and Ginny. She's daddy's little girl, but he knows when to let her make her own decisions and I love that. And you made it even better when Bill did the same thing.
And then the scene Gred and Forge. I love those two and you captured them so well.
Name: Amanda Mancini (not signed in) reviewed
Prologue on Nov 26, 2006 01:49 pm
I just finished reading THE WHOLE fic all afternoon while I should have been writing a paper. This may have been the 2nd time I do that with this fic, and possibly the 2nd review I leave with these words: It is a fantastic. wonderful story and deserves a continuation if you have one planne. I hope you are still writing 'The Storm'- if you need a beta or someone to flatter and encourage you as you go along, please email me.
Name: WhiffleBird reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Three on Nov 22, 2006 09:17 pm
wow. that was an absolutely incredible ending and story
Name: ak reviewed
Chapter Twelve on Nov 17, 2006 06:15 pm
i love the plot of your story, and i've been enjoying it.
There is one slighth thing, that i have to mention. I read your AN before about Ginny being young and in love, and i could understand, some of the descions you made in portraying her.
However i think your doing a sore injustice not only to the character , but to all girls. I knwo that sounds a bit melodramatic, but the end of this chapter, left me feeling particularly betrayed. Gin has transended beyond, being young and in love, you;ve made her out to be flighty, emotionally unstable , and at times painfully unaware, as to leave readers wondering, where she was when common sense was being give out.
And dear me, shes crying in every other paragraph. I haevn't finished the other chapters, and so this is a biased veiw as it is based only on the first 12.
i don't expect you to write it over, but i do hope you'll take my comments to heart, and not take offense, i look forward to reading your next story, and hopes that your characters are, better developed
xx
Author's Response: I'm most likely being oversensitive, and the truth is its 5am and I've had no sleep and I'm very grouchy, but...
I hear your opinion, but I must disagree. Many people have disliked Ginny's personality and her conceived weaknesses, and let me know, which I respect. But I feel it's unjustified to call her flighty, emotionally unstable, painfully unaware and crying in every other paragraph. She does cry a lot, but if I were to generalize, every teenage girl I know does, at least at some time or other. I wouldn't have been so offended if it hadn't been for your final comment, that about hoping my characters are better developed during my next story. Considering that you only got to chapter twelve, it isn't fair to say they're not developed. The story isn't over. They can't turn on a dime and become somebody else merely because its wanted. As far as I'm concerned, your review wasn't very constructive, it was just criticism. I'm not offended, but I'm weary. Phew! End rant!
Name: Linds reviewed
Prologue on Nov 16, 2006 11:14 am
wonderful!
Name: die Loreley reviewed
Chapter One on Oct 15, 2006 06:42 am
I love that Cathy quote! Although I *do* wish you'd kept on going. It's such a sad book, Wuthering Heights.
I love how you haven't changed Draco much. And how there's a ton of animosity between him and the Weasleys (especially Ron) even though they've helped him so much. That's the self-centred prat of a Draco I know. I wonder how much help living with the Weasleys will do him?
I can't believe he hasn't cracked and done something to express his emotions yet. But I guess Malfoys don't cry, do they?
I like it so far -- and if I didn't have to go to bed, I'd keep on reading. Maybe tomorrow.
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter Six on Oct 08, 2006 08:52 am
Oh no... Not again! And don't tell me that harry is going to start liking ginny either. 'you don't know what you got till its gone...'
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter Five on Oct 08, 2006 08:33 am
haahhaha! Draco is so affected, there BOTH affected!! why deny it i say. forget harry and go make out!!!!! :P
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter Four on Oct 08, 2006 08:14 am
*sigh* wow... Draco is... *sigh*
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter Three on Oct 08, 2006 07:56 am
omg
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter Two on Oct 08, 2006 07:32 am
Ahh! Naughty little Ginevra after the mean old slytherin. ohh, I love this! :)
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Chapter One on Oct 08, 2006 06:48 am
eek! that was great!
Name: bridgetmalfoy reviewed
Prologue on Oct 08, 2006 06:17 am
This first chapter was full of suspense. Brillaint.
Name: musingvenus reviewed
Chapter Twelve on Oct 05, 2006 12:33 pm
Well, I've reached the midpoint of the story, or thereabouts. I had some doubts, because you've ensured that Draco really is a right bastard, and I had such difficulty empathizing with him.
However!
Permit me to offer my congratulations; I've really enjoyed this story so far.
Keep writing!
Name: sinistrascoven reviewed
Chapter Two on Oct 01, 2006 06:58 pm
Love the ending quote. Shocked as hell that Ginny initiated the first kiss! That NEVER happens.
Name: shortlilangel73 reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Three on Sep 28, 2006 11:50 am
GREAT story!!
the ending is really good, and a bit sad--but it doesn't seem like the ending! I'm wanting more!
The End, Book One--does that mean there will be a second? *crosses fingers* I hope so!
Name: Padfootedmoony reviewed
Author's Notes on Sep 24, 2006 07:08 pm
Awesome fic so far. Keep up the great work.
Name: LuneS reviewed
Chapter Twenty-Two on Sep 22, 2006 02:43 pm
this is so much like this song called unfaithful by rihanna except the guys lying.
Name: Kimi reviewed
Chapter One on Sep 20, 2006 02:50 am
Hi!...till now, I think your fic is plain Fabulous. But I have to tell you some of the things I have noticed. I know you have already finished writing this and it doesn't matter anymore, but still, I hope you are ok if I tell you some of my views. You know, the red colour of the Weasley's hair somehow signifies the fieryness of Griffindor's bravery and boldness. The way you are portraying the Weasleys makes one feel more like as though they are from Hufflepuff, not Griffindor. If you have already read OOTP & HBP, then you must know, Ginny isn't really like that!...She is quite bold, straightforward, and would never be so soft with a Malfoy if he's being a jerk. And she know's she is pretty. Here, it seems as though she herself is thinking Draco is her superior. Please don't curse me, but I felt I had to be honest with you (it's a review after all). Other then these, your writing style is SOOO good! You should be a real writer and publish your work! You wrote Draco PERFECTLY. I really like it till now. Hopw you'll give some thought to what I have said.
Take care,adios.