Name: jessica k malfoy reviewed
Playing Games on Jul 23, 2005 06:18 pm
your draco is hot. i want to shag him, i swear. he's very canon, and i think if d & g ever did get together in canon (oh don't i wish) it'd be something like this.
Author's Response: Well, really, what do we know about Draco? Before book 6 just that he's a bigot and a git. In book 6 we learn that he has so many more dementions (I mean, he cries!).
So how do you write someone 'in canon' when you don't know in depth about them? I want to make sure I keep him being mean and rude, but with some sort of depth and soul as well. So far so good. I'm glad you think he's in character. I don't like fics where he's 'nice.' Draco is just not a nice guy.
Ohh, I want to shag Draco too... three times a day... every day... for the rest of my life...
Name: blondie07 reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jul 11, 2005 06:02 pm
im reading kinda late right now and normally i dont review when its late cause im too lazy too but i couldnt help but mention how cute that part at the end was with the miseltoe.by the way i dont think i spelled miseltoe right but perhaps i did.
Name: Mione23 reviewed
Secret Kisses on Jul 11, 2005 12:37 pm
I LOVED IT!! I liked the ending conversation:
'Your eyes looked depressed.'
'My eyes look depressed?' Malfoy repeated.
'Yeah.'
'Well, your eyes are the colour of shit.'
'And chocolate.'
Malfoy snorted. 'Yeah, and chocolate.'
Then, he kissed her.
I thought that, that was very funny. UPDATE SOON!!!
Author's Response: Ohh thanks, I'm glad you liked it. Yeah, Draco is an ass in the story, but sometimes a good part of him slips through.
Name: Cara reviewed
Secret Kisses on Jul 11, 2005 08:24 am
'Ginny, shut up.' Oh, that was such a melt-worthy comment. He called her Ginny, so cute. Brilliant fic. Waiting for your updates has been torture.
Author's Response: Ah. Yeah. I wonder if he realised he called her Ginny, though...
Name: imelda reviewed
Secret Kisses on Jul 10, 2005 05:52 pm
Boy does a girl need high self-esteem to survive as Malfoy's girlfriend. I am loving this fic, you do such a good job of expressing things so clearly and yet leaving in all the confusion the characters are feeling. I'm very sorry there isn't another chapter up...
Name: imelda reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jul 10, 2005 05:16 pm
Squeeee!! Aside from how excited I am that they kissed, this chapter was great because of the way they're TALKING to each other. It's fascinating.
Name: imelda reviewed
A Most Unlikely Detention on Jul 10, 2005 04:49 pm
A deLIGHTful first chapter! It was very funny; their insults and banter were quite amusing. And your Malfoy is the perfect little worm he is in canon, but I like the way Ginny's words got to him. Can't wait to read more...
Name: Mione23 reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 05, 2005 05:45 pm
AWW!! Who did her detention?? I bet u it WAS Malfoy!! I'm ready for some Draco/Ginny moments! You know what I like about your story. You can tell that its going to be Draco/Ginny and Ron/Hermione. Harry and Hermione stories make me sick. Don't like them. A question are you the same kjcp from checkmated.com??
Author's Response: Hi. Yeah, I'm the same one. I'm going to post the story at CM after HBP comes out with any necessary changes that need to be made (such as, if one of the characters in canon dies that's in my story). So you can look for it there when the queue reopens.
Name: Ginerva reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 03, 2005 03:13 pm
This story is too cute! The chocolate and fire reference was good, i've heard them used seprately but they sound much better togehter! I'm glad you aren't just like "Oh hello mortal enemy let's shag and hide it from the world" like so many others are, this ones seems to be more realistic then others. Great job!
Name: Rae reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 03, 2005 12:15 am
Well written! I like the bit where Ginny starts to cry and Draco has no idea what to do. Heh, heh.
Name: jessica k malfoy reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 02, 2005 09:53 am
this is really good & quite interesting. i can't wait for more updates, and i love the fact that you have long chapters. i'm dying to see what happens with draco & ginny. i really like the fact that it's not "oh we have detention, lets shag" like so many stories are. good job!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'm not a fan of having a D/G relationship move too quickly.
Name: Funnykido reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 02, 2005 07:24 am
Totally agree with Anise. At first, I thought this would be an OOC fluff story, you know? Cute but nothing special. But now, like Anise said, I'm seeing some complexity. The Daphne Greengrass thing (I liked, by the way, how you wrote Draco as still liking Daphne, just not going back to her because of pride, instead of 'losing all sight of other girls because of Ginny' or some rubbish like that), also the death eaters, and Draco's pride. I like it! The characters are well developed, although Snape may be just a BIT over the top. Because I think we have to remember, now that the fifth book is out, and we know he's a member of the order, I imagine him as not being QUITE so evil. But you never know. He was to Harry. But that's just my oppinion. But great job so far!
Author's Response: Ohh, well thank you! I'm trying to have some of Snape's scene be a bit of comic relief (like when he came into the dungeon when Ginny and Draco were doing their detention).
I'm trying really hard not have Draco be out of character. It's hard b/c all we really see of him is being a whinging brat and arrogant. So, trying to give him more depth and not have him be ooc is hard.
I imagine that Draco wouldn't go back to Daphne like you said b/c of pride. He never admitted to her that he fancied her in the first place b/c I think it's important for him not to appear weak.
Keep on the look out, I try to update as frequently as possible.
Name: Anise reviewed
Fire and Chocolate on Jul 02, 2005 07:15 am
I have to say that this fic is really starting to impress me. It seems as if it could turn out to have some real complexity, which is the quality that a lot of D/G fic (unfortunately) is missing. I especially like the way you've resisted the temptation (and it is tempting!) to get Draco and Ginny together too soon. As much as that can be to read, it's just not realistic, given what we know about them from canon. So... I look forward to seeing where this goes!
Author's Response: Aw, wow, thank you! I have an outline, so *I* know where this story is going, lol. I like my fluff and romance, don't get me wrong, but I have a hard time keeping interest in stories that don't have a plot, so I'm trying to add in plot... which there will be more of one later on, so keep on reading.
I don't think that Ginny and Draco would get together right away. They're supposed to hate each other and I don't think they would forget they're on opposite sides of a war so easily.
Name: Julez reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jul 02, 2005 12:18 am
Great story!
My mind's screaming MORE now, really, you can't leave me like this! =O
x
Name: Melissa reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jul 01, 2005 10:45 pm
I love your story. At the end of that chapter I was just like "Wow Ginny. Real smooth." Anyway, your writing is awesome. Can't wait to see what happens next. Do you know when your next update might be?
Author's Response: Very soon. Like, I submitted the new chapter a few hours ago.
Name: bigreader reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jul 01, 2005 07:49 pm
Lovely story! I just have one thing thats bothering me. You don't use qoutation marks. " = qoutation mark. ' = I forgot what it was called but authors generally use that for thoughts. Just thought I would suggest it to you. I love your story and I'm anxiously awaiting the next chapter! UPDATE SOON!
Author's Response: I don't know why authors would use single quotation marks for thoughts? Americans use double quotation marks for dialogue, but British grammar is just one like ' that.
Name: Rita reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jun 30, 2005 05:44 pm
One quick note. Three Slytherin Chasers? Every Quidditch team has two Chasers. Was it a typo? Your Ginny is a wonderful character. Why does everyone feel the need to bash Pansy in order to make Ginny appear more appealing to Draco?
Author's Response: No, your mistake. There are 7 players on a Quidditch team. 2 Beaters, 3 Chasers, 1 Keeper, and 1 Seeker. Katie, Alicia, and Angelina are Chasers for Gryffindor. Fred and George are the 2 Beaters. Then there's Wood or Ron for Keeper and Harry for Seeker. That's 7 team members.
I'm glad you like my characterisation of Ginny. I bash Pansy because I find her annoying in the books. She's described as having an annoying laugh and has a pug-face. But Draco doesn't really like anyone in his house, so they're all some-what bashed in upcoming chapters.
Name: nikita reviewed
A Most Unlikely Detention on Jun 30, 2005 04:16 am
hey there!!!!!! your 2nd chapter was awesome as well....its ok if u can't notify me i'll keep in check!! i understand you must be quite busy with the baby and all. anyways in the 2nd chapter the christmas seen when draco had to sit with ginny was really cute and ofcourse even the misteloe one was really cute!! anyways keep up the good work
P.S i'll review with the name of hotgal_14 from next time.
Name: Jen reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jun 29, 2005 05:35 pm
CUTE!!!! Keep writing!
Name: kc reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jun 29, 2005 06:57 am
ahhhh I really really like this story! Update soon! I'm excited for it.
Name: Nikita reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jun 29, 2005 04:23 am
Great story so far. Can't wait for it to be updated. Update asap
Name: Serpentina reviewed
Happy Christmas Indeed on Jun 29, 2005 03:54 am
I absolutely love this fic! you write really long chapters which is great considering a lot happens in the story. keep up the good work!
Name: nikita reviewed
A Most Unlikely Detention on Jun 29, 2005 12:05 am
hey there!!!!! well....i don't think you remembered to notify me but its ok i still will keep in check. its just that i asked you to cause ur story is great. and i didn't want to miss any chapter of it. i am so glad you write long chapters. i still have to read your 2nd chapter i just got it. your first chapter was awesome. the scenes you wrote between draco and ginny were great too...extremely. anyways keep up the great work. i'll keep in check but if you remember then please send me a mail. thanks sooooo mcuh!!!!!!
Author's Response: Well, I work 2 jobs, go to school, and have a baby, so I don't always remember to send out emails to people. I'm doing well just to get out chapters as frequently as I do. Thanks for reading, though, I'm glad you enjoyed the first chapter.
Name: Pam reviewed
A Most Unlikely Detention on Jun 28, 2005 06:25 pm
This was really good. I like how you portray everyone and you write the scenes between Draco and Ginny really well. I can't wait to see what happens next. And I hope we see more of Blaise because I heart him! lol.
Name: blondie90 reviewed
A Most Unlikely Detention on Jun 28, 2005 04:59 pm
this is an interesting story and i like all the things that ginny has to say. im excited for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks. I think the next chapter should be up really soon.