Keep it up. I love stories where Voldemort is in power. I don't know, there's something so much more original about them. Well, keep it up. I love the muggles. That's a wonderfully original idea as well.

I'm just wondering, have you got a beta reader. If you don't you might want to. You haven't got any really bad errors, but there are a few minor ones that could be taken care of so easily.