Name: Desertisle reviewed
1 on Feb 04, 2016 10:48 am
Profound! Thanks for writing it.
Name: Boogum reviewed
1 on Oct 07, 2010 03:57 pm
This was lovely.
Name: ini reviewed
1 on Aug 28, 2008 09:05 am
i really like the story and one day, i want to go to paris, too! =)
i just noticed another tiny mistake: i think it should be "où SONT les peintures" and not "où est les peintures"
but i still love the story, especially that it plays in france
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
1 on Mar 13, 2008 11:38 am
i love this story. mad good!
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
1 on Feb 05, 2008 09:25 am
i liked this.
Name: magicalme716 reviewed
1 on Aug 28, 2006 12:48 pm
okay I liked your story but your french is a bit off...
First:
"Le troisième étage” he replied in a gruff voice."
then you say she got off at the thrid floor but actually it would be the fourth because in france the first floor is the "rez-de-chaussée" then the second floor is the "premier étage"
third floor is acutally the "deuxième étage" and then the fourth is the "troisième étage"
Second: when you say "Excusez-moi, oú est les peintures de Marie Dubois?” you're asking where is the painting of Marie Dubois not by her. You should us "par" instead of de.
And third: When she orders in the cafe, in France you wouldn't be served if you just demanded something. You have to use "Je voudrais"
And again, all french mistakes aside, I rly did like the story.
-lainie
Name: flame_kitty reviewed
1 on Mar 25, 2006 01:54 pm
A great story although the only two stories you've written seem to be sad ones (even though this one ends quite happily ^_^). I'd love to see more from you if you post it!
Author's Response: I like a bit of sadness every now and then, lol. I don't intend things to be sad! They only come out that way.
Thanks for reading and reviewing :D
Name: Incognito reviewed
1 on Mar 16, 2006 06:49 pm
Short, sweet and pleasantly surreal. I especially love your introduction: She sleeps, surrounded by people, because she cannot sleep alone.
“Why do you paint the flowers? And then these dark, terrible scenes, Draco?” she whispered.
Reminds me of Aerith selling flowers on the street corner when Cloud found her. It's an indelible scene.
Author's Response: Final Fantasy VII!! Heh! Thanks so much for your reply!
Name: ser reviewed
1 on Jan 25, 2006 06:25 am
It's rare for me to find a story that touches me like this. Not only have you written a story that is beautifully done but you've done it in a simple and elegant way without too many words and ideas bogging it down.
I look forward to reading more of your writing!
Author's Response: Thanks very much for your review :D
Name: Bosco reviewed
1 on Jan 20, 2006 07:56 am
Le troisieme etage is actually the fourth floor, because you enter on le rez!
Author's Response: Ahhhh, I thought I would screw the ground floor over. Thanks so much for that!
Name: Mollie reviewed
1 on Jan 14, 2006 03:15 pm
Very good story. I am impressed. I do wish that it had gone on some more, though, and had a bit more interaction between Ginny and Draco.
Author's Response: I really did try to make it longer, but I couldn't. I didn't want to force any more conversation/interaction, so I left it at that.
Name: Alexandria Malfoy reviewed
1 on Jan 14, 2006 04:00 am
Nice story. I enjoyed reading it. xoxox
Author's Response: Thankles! :D