Thanks for that lovely chunk of writing. I think "As Long As You're Mine" fit in wonderfully there, but I'm biased. I've been listening to Wicked all day and so as I can't seem to get it out of my mind properly, it might as well be plastered everywhere.

The Christmas gifts were cute, and I liked the summoning rings. I did not, however, like the fact that Draco's and Ginny's letters said the same thing, and in the same way. They may think quite alike (depending on your interpretation of them), but they don't neccessarily express themselves in the same manner. And even if they did, I didn't want to read it again. Sorry, but no. They might have both belivably writen those letters, but the conisidence of them being there at the same time makes me sit back and go, oh yeah, this is a story writen by someone who writes online because they can't write professionally. I don't mean that as an insult; I'm the same way. But there's no need to remind your audience of that.

Thanks again for the amount of actual story you had in this chapter. I really enjoyed that.

Author's Response: Thanks! I happen to LOVE Wicked (actually, the sequel to this fic is Wicked), so I couldn't resist putting it in there.

Very fun! I love presents! ;)

Author's Response: Ha ha, yeah, presents are the best!

wonderful as always. I love the song you picked for this chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks! I try ;)

That was much improbed from the last chapters. It was short, but much more substantial than the last few chapters. I would urge you to, even as much as I'm sure you like to, not take on any more fic than you can handle. If you have to, just update less. Personally, I only update when I feel like writing, and no more than that. I'm slow and I don't get as much praise as some do, but I'm writing for myself and only post because I appriciate people's thought through opinions as it can help me improve. But really that's your buisness and if you write for the reviews (Though I don't sense that you do) that's your choice.

Blaise is so hilarious. I'm not competely sure if he's in character, but that's because I don't really know his character, not because I can point out anything speicfically wrong. You're writing him much like he's writen in many fics.

Ginny is a little bit more mellow in this fic, more mature maybe. I'd really like to see that continue. If you can recal for me what she did when Ron got angry at her for snogging in the corridors you'll realize that she has more than a little bit of a temper. Here she displays more sense. It would be very interesting if you could play with this in such a way that when most of the time she doesn't try to upset the Trio, but then occationally her bubble pops and out slips her temper which is quite amazing, as I see it.

Well, good luck, and keep writing.



Author's Response: Thanks :D I pretty much wrote this fic before HBP came out, and so all we knew was his name. I'm just cool like that ;) Thanks for the review! The only thing I'm worried about is you losing interest in reading the fic once you run out of things to critique :D

very cute convo! I can actually see the bemused look on Hermione's face.:)

Author's Response: Ha ha, thanks! :D

Woo! Great update! i love this story, so update again soooon =]...please!!

Author's Response: Thanks! I try ;)

“She keeps glancing over here as she talks, and she’s shooting us somewhat. . . mischievous glances.” LOL Isn't Draco aware that she's planning his downfall? Great chapter can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Ha ha, you'd think so, but he IS a guy; they're not known for being overly full in the head. ;)

I just had to comment on "Captain Obvious called; he wants his cape back" Very very funny! ;)

Author's Response: Thanks! I try :D

There was a little more interaction there, and thank you for that, but you're still streching it. If you want to stop getting review like mine and flame_kitty's you should probably post this specifically as a songfic. Yes, I know you think the title is enough, but let me tell you, it isn't. For example, I was just reading Rhapsody by distempered. It has a very distinctly music title, and a lot of music reference, singing, and whatnot. Yet, very rarely does she put in actual lyrics.

There's no problem with a couple of lyrics, or lyrics in one chapter, or whatever in a non-songfic, but what you're doing is outsteping even the boundaries of most song fics in the way that you're using the lyrics so that you don't have to tell the story yourself, explain the emotions yourself. You're a good writer, and I hate to see you cheating yourself out of actually writing by using other people's work.

Please don't respond defensively to this. Rememeber that even though, yes, this is your fic and you understand what you're trying to do with it more than anyone else, us readers are the one's your trying to get to (or else, why in the world do you bother posting online?). And every once in a while, we might even have something worthwhile to say.

I'm sorry if I've offended you, as that really isn't my goal. I write real reviews because I hope that fanfiction writers are actually trying to improve their writing and I want to do all I can to help them with that. I really do hope you continue to write and improve your writing, just as every other good author. Good luck!


Author's Response: Okay, I've got to say something real quick here. Please don't feel like you're offending me, and PLEASE don't hold back at all (I don't know if you have been or not). I really don't mind getting reviews like yours; I actually really LIKE it. Don't get me wrong, I love reviews like "OMG that wuz sssooooo good," but yours actually have substance. Alright, rant over ;) Maybe it's the fact that I'm both extremely lazy, and extremely stupid to write more than 1 fanfic at a time, but I do, and it's too much for me. I write a chapter for one of them, and by the time I get to the other one, I have to force myself to write. So yeah, I'm probably shirking off with the song lyrics. But I really do like them, and I think having them in there is necessary. But yeah, that's my little reply. Talk to you next chapter, I'm sure ;)

Hmmm..never heard that one before. The chapter seemed really short, but i was happy to read it :D hope to read more soon.

Author's Response: Are you, by any chance, from somewhere besides the United States? Because Kelly Clarkson is the American Idol from Season 1, so it would stand to reason that you hadn't heard her songs.

This was good. And I love your fic but the chapters are a bit short. They are mostly made up of songlyrics. Update asap.

Author's Response: Thanks :)

I like the idea of this, but I'd like you to go back and look at how much of that chapter you can actually claim to own. It amounts to something like 10 or 11 paragraphs. I don't even mind the lyrics in there, though personally, I skip them. We're here for the story and I'd really like to see that moving on. Don't imagine that just because it's longer, it's ready to post. I personally would have added this chapter to whatever comes next because this chapter just doesn't have enough happen for us to get back into the story. Also, I'm sorry, but I don't see this happening. They were both in complete denial (well, at least to each other) just a moment ago, I don't think what Blaise did is really enough to justify why these two rather closed up people are so ready to open up in front of such an audience.

I hope you don't let my critisims get to you too much. Keep on writing, this storyline is intriguing, and I really can't wait to read more.

Author's Response: See, the comment on this chapter are really weird to me. The other two places I've posted this previously, people got sore whenever the chapter DIDN'T have lyrics in them, so you have to understand that this is very foreign stuff to me. Thanks for reviewing.