Name: slitherhither reviewed Chapter 2 on Jan 20, 2010 02:52 am
Wow. That was delightful, funny, and, while about cheese, decidedly (okay, I can't stop myself; I have to say it) not cheesy.

Author's Response: Haha, thank you. Exactly what I was going for - although, would you believe it, that pun never occured to me in the process of writing it?
Name: Incognito reviewed Chapter 2 on Nov 02, 2009 01:27 pm
I must say, again, that I think you did a truly wonderful and creative job here. Your narrative is truly unique and original.

Needless to say, Vicky, you have a gift.

~Lia

Author's Response:

You are way too kind.

As if I care though, you can keep the compliments coming all you want. ;)

Thanks.

Name: Flipinpenname reviewed Chapter 2 on Oct 25, 2009 11:55 am
good story, interestingly written, but i enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Thanks.
Name: shaded reviewed Chapter 2 on Oct 24, 2009 04:40 pm
Yay, I love that you've carried on with this narrator. I had thought you were going to stop after the first chapter and go to "normal" prose. This is much more fun. :D

I look forward to reading more of the story.

Author's Response:

I thought it was way more fun too. ;P After writing the first part like that, it would have been so boring to go back to a normal voice. I just couldn't do it.

I'm sorry, but this is it. The story is now complete. I don't know where you got the impression that there would be any more, but I've got nothing more to give you.

Name: shaded reviewed Chapter 1 on Oct 24, 2009 04:29 pm
I love the style of writing. So often I find that writers can only keep up the level of cheeky narrative for only so long, but you managed it masterfully and led into the main story with a great anticipatory ending. :)

Author's Response:

Guess I answered your second review first, huh? Whoops.

Well, anyway, thanks for this one too!

Name: twiddlekinks reviewed Chapter 2 on Oct 23, 2009 11:16 pm
Very cute, in a whiling-beguiling-smiling sort of way. Tongue-in-cheek (as in... what's in this cheek?), too. hehe Great job! :)

Author's Response: Hahaha, just what I was going for. Thank you!
Name: Jack Tamara reviewed Chapter 1 on Oct 22, 2009 08:16 pm
what a nice refreshing voice and plot. please update.

Author's Response: Thank you! This fic is only a twoshot and already completed. I'm attempting to load the second chapter right this instance, so it shouldn't be too long before it goes up.
Name: Incognito reviewed Chapter 1 on Oct 22, 2009 04:49 pm
I really liked this story in the challenge. I found it to be very original and followed scuba's prompt brilliantly. I, personally, found both yours and Robyn's to be the most creative fics.

I love Ginny as Ms. Resentful and Draco as the spoiled brat: "Draco loved cheese more than anything else in the world; and being a selfish, uncaring brat, that extended to people as well." -- Heheh

The formatting is a little wonky. You might want to look into tweaking it as it is a tad distracting from your lovely tale that you are weaving.

Other than that, this is a refreshing non-clichéd piece (not too many serf-Master pieces out there that I know of).

Well done. Now bring it home.

~Lia

Author's Response:

Oooh, thank you.

I had so much fun being the narrator in this; the introductory chapter especially just flew out, and I even giggled as I wrote it. :)

Thanks for the note. I have since edited that.

Thanks! One reason for that is, I think, because no one wants to make their fics totally AU - they want to change events in the storyline, not use the characters to make a new storyline altogether. And Master-serf fics would generally have to be more AU than people prefer to write. That's my on-the-spot theory, anyway.

Next chapter's submitted, so I shall indeed be "bringing it home" soon. ;)

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