Wow. That was delightful, funny, and, while about cheese, decidedly (okay, I can't stop myself; I have to say it) not cheesy.
Author's Response: Haha, thank you. Exactly what I was going for - although, would you believe it, that pun never occured to me in the process of writing it?
I must say, again, that I think you did a truly wonderful and creative job here. Your narrative is truly unique and original.
Needless to say, Vicky, you have a gift.
~Lia
Author's Response:You are way too kind.
As if I care though, you can keep the compliments coming all you want. ;)
Thanks.
good story, interestingly written, but i enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks.
Yay, I love that you've carried on with this narrator. I had thought you were going to stop after the first chapter and go to "normal" prose. This is much more fun. :D
I look forward to reading more of the story.
Author's Response:I thought it was way more fun too. ;P After writing the first part like that, it would have been so boring to go back to a normal voice. I just couldn't do it.
I'm sorry, but this is it. The story is now complete. I don't know where you got the impression that there would be any more, but I've got nothing more to give you.
I love the style of writing. So often I find that writers can only keep up the level of cheeky narrative for only so long, but you managed it masterfully and led into the main story with a great anticipatory ending. :)
Author's Response:Guess I answered your second review first, huh? Whoops.
Well, anyway, thanks for this one too!
Very cute, in a whiling-beguiling-smiling sort of way. Tongue-in-cheek (as in... what's in this cheek?), too. hehe Great job! :)
Author's Response: Hahaha, just what I was going for. Thank you!
what a nice refreshing voice and plot. please update.
Author's Response: Thank you! This fic is only a twoshot and already completed. I'm attempting to load the second chapter right this instance, so it shouldn't be too long before it goes up.
I really liked this story in the challenge. I found it to be very original and followed scuba's prompt brilliantly. I, personally, found both yours and Robyn's to be the most creative fics.
I love Ginny as Ms. Resentful and Draco as the spoiled brat: "Draco loved cheese more than anything else in the world; and being a selfish, uncaring brat, that extended to people as well." -- Heheh
The formatting is a little wonky. You might want to look into tweaking it as it is a tad distracting from your lovely tale that you are weaving.
Other than that, this is a refreshing non-clichéd piece (not too many serf-Master pieces out there that I know of).
Well done. Now bring it home.
~Lia
Author's Response:Oooh, thank you.
I had so much fun being the narrator in this; the introductory chapter especially just flew out, and I even giggled as I wrote it. :)
Thanks for the note. I have since edited that.
Thanks! One reason for that is, I think, because no one wants to make their fics totally AU - they want to change events in the storyline, not use the characters to make a new storyline altogether. And Master-serf fics would generally have to be more AU than people prefer to write. That's my on-the-spot theory, anyway.
Next chapter's submitted, so I shall indeed be "bringing it home" soon. ;)