Reviews For Silence
Name: Anise reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 06:46 pm
Amazing! The rest is in email.

Author's Response: Thanks :)
Name: Swanne reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 03:05 pm
so cute the way they grew to each other :)

Author's Response: :)
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 11:41 am
oh emotional pregnant women. haha. i'm glad they "appreciate" each other. haha.

Author's Response: me too :)
Name: Almicene reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 04:34 am
Ok I reread this chapter too. I can't help it, the writing is fabulous. I feel like everything has come together here. Characterization, dialogue, descriptions, etc. I'm seeing other parts of this chapter I didn't appreciate the first time. I love how Draco really understands Ginny, that when she's yelling at him for not coming to her room, he doesn't react in an upset manner. He realizes that something is wrong. And it's an understanding that has grown over the course of the story, i.e. beautiful character development.

I really should get back to homework now :p. But seriously! fabulous!
Name: Almicene reviewed Chapter 1 on Oct 09, 2011 04:26 am
I reread the first chapter cause it popped me back to here after leaving the last review.

Favorite part: His office chair is comfy. I only leave it when I think he might be home soon.

One of my favorite things about your stories is that you show their feelings for each other, and they don't even know it. It's really a credit to your talent, and Ginny's perfectly in character in this chapter. Angry, and feisty. The rose was a nice touch.

Oh and things I'd like to see - actually probably this same story and certain parts fleshed out from Draco's POV. I'd be really interested to see how you did that. And if you didn't want to do the whole story, how about just the last chapter you wrote from Draco's POV? I'm curious to see if you can keep him in character as much as you do now, and how you handle a man's perspective. No pressure either way. I would just love you forever if you did that :p.
Name: Almicene reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 04:21 am
I was absolutely spellbound by this chapter. Sorry for keeping at you about the ending - I just read through the reviews and it seemed like you were of two minds - that not every ending is happy, and then that you liked happy endings. I really love your D/G here so it was like an investment of emotions on my part. I tend not to read tragedies cause I usually hate feeling so sad afterwards.

Anyways, so the flow was perfect here. I'm curious whether the dates you put in here are necessary - like perhaps there is a point/reason you're putting them in there. I can't decide whether I like them or not :P. The POV was perfect, and the pacing also perfect, especially in regards to how they revealed their feelings for each other.

I think the only thing I'm surprised about is Draco not having marched up to his wife when she was with Harry. Again I can't decide whether that would have been in character or out of character for your Draco. You've written him as very cool and collected, but he clearly has his bursts of anger/temper. I would have liked to see more of the scene of them realizing their feelings for each other. That part could have been fleshed out a bit.

Also can't decide whether 'Christ's sake' would be appropriate here. I always found it a little strange when muggle-borns just used 'Merlin's sake'/etc, but Harry's grown up in the Wizarding world.

Also, major props for not feeling the need to change the tags for all your dialogue. Most people feel like they have to write 'she said' (which is good) but then every line is 'she breathed' 'she huffed' 'she smirked.' I liked that you weren't afraid to use "tell" "said" and actions linked to some of the dialogue. I could really picture the scene in my mind and feel the personality of the characters. It was absolutely perfect so don't change it.

This was my favorite chapter up to date. Mixed feelings about a sequel! Could either mean you're going to do a baby story sequel which most authors don't really do well, or leaving this on a cliffhanger. I have faith in you though so don't take this as me pushing you either way.
Name: billarayne reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 03:27 am
I thought this chapter was good, then you drop the bombshell about a possible sequel! I love this story so much. It just all comes together so perfectly, I adore your writing.

Author's Response: Thank you! :)
Name: Cara reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 12:33 am
I'm very happy for them. However I don't think there won't be any drama anymore. Looking forward to the next chapter! And yay for th sequel!
Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 09, 2011 12:13 am
I love this chapter! It's darling! More moremore!

Author's Response: :)
Name: twitched reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 08, 2011 07:59 pm
more please! Let them have a lovely pink haired baby and Draco should stop being a pansy and just admit he's completely smitten with her.

Author's Response: lol, I've never really understood what is meant by pink hair. But I'll see what I can do.
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed Chapter 5 on Oct 08, 2011 07:15 pm
First of all, "Order of Moron, First Class" is the funniest thing I've read in a while. Just had to get that out.

Kinda sad that it's ending, but happy that your muse is suggesting a sequel. Yay! :D

This chapter is lovely. I love Draco's jealousy towards Harry. I love how 'appreciate' represents love in their arranged marriage. It's like, what more can an arranged marriage ask for than appreciation. Lovely.

I look forward to the final chapter and the *fingers crossed* *whispers* sequel.

Author's Response: Yes, well, if the sequel pans out, it won't be posted in several months, I write slowly. And it's going to be *angsty*. Thank you for the review. :)
Name: MistyLane reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 06, 2011 10:34 pm
Enchanting. :)
Name: mollusque reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 04, 2011 01:19 am
Very nice story. Keep going!
Can't wait your up date.

Author's Response: It's coming any day now. Thanks. :)
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 02, 2011 06:00 pm
i really like how you're writing this story. its different and it jumps back and forth between "present" and "past" which is a tad confusing at first but it works. haha. great job. hope you update soon!

Author's Response: Thank you very much! :)
Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 02, 2011 09:54 am
Ahhh, finally. The start of something lovely, I hope? I don't like seeing them so far apart. I want to see them in love!

Author's Response: Oh, you romantic, you!
Name: Mungihead reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 01, 2011 02:30 pm
Oh, I'm so excited for the next chapter, especially after reading that last bit! Draco and Ginny have finally put their issues forward in the open-thank God. So hopefully there will be sparks and fluff? :) I'm glad Harry found someone-I hate it when he comes back and ruins relationships.

Can't wait for more, you're doing a fantastic job!!

xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo,
M :)

Author's Response: Sparks are already there, but fluff? In real life, there's really not much of it. There might be some in my story though, but not promises. Thank you so much for your review!
Name: silvertatooine reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 01, 2011 02:26 pm
I really like this so far, and can't wait to see how Gin and Draco's relationship progresses from here.

Author's Response: Me neither! :) Thanks!
Name: justwish reviewed Chapter 2 on Oct 01, 2011 09:03 am
The part about stroking her hair when she thinks she is a sleep makes me want to try- if I did such things! ;)

Author's Response: :)
Name: justwish reviewed Chapter 4 on Oct 01, 2011 08:59 am
What a nice chapter! You can see that Draco is feeling something for Ginny because he is jealous of Harry and their past. I like the idea of the presents- the flying and the ice skating. I like how you throw in the time before the marriage. "All my brothers have pink room"- ha ha!

Author's Response: Yes, it took me some time to dream those presents up. ;) Thank you for the review.
Name: Anise reviewed Chapter 4 on Sep 30, 2011 09:41 pm
(hands Serinah a large slice of chocolate cake with chocolate ice cream)

Or if you don't like chocolate, I saw a nice fruit tart. :)

I hope that you keep this fic as unusual and striking as it is. There are so many aspects that work exactly the way they're presented-- particularly the way you've chosen to reveal the subtle emotional growth of both Draco and Ginny in their relationship through a non-sequential narration of events. This is not easy to pull off (there's a reason why there was only one *Pulp Fiction*, and it's now almost twenty years later), but you're doing it very well. By its very nature, this type of writing style does not utilize transitions. I could go on and on in this vein, but trust me, this is a good fic... and I think I'll email you some of my other comments. However, I will add one more thing: I really do not see how you are under an obligation of any kind to reveal the ending of your story before you have finished it. You have placed this fic in the Angst category, which certainly should clarify its nature sufficiently.

Author's Response: I absolutely LOVE chocolate! Thank you!
Name: msm_2011simonebb reviewed Chapter 4 on Sep 30, 2011 08:58 pm
love the reading info before draco & ginny were married.. update soon !

Author's Response: Thanks. :) Will try.
Name: msm_2011simonebb reviewed Chapter 1 on Sep 30, 2011 08:44 pm
love the ginny.. will draco acting a block of ice, ever change?

Author's Response: read on to find out. :) by now you probably already have.
Name: Almicene reviewed Chapter 1 on Sep 30, 2011 01:11 pm
Gr wish you could edit reviews. I wanted to clarify about the time jump parts after I reread what I wrote to you.

So first off, I like them in your story. I really like seeing how they got together with where they are now. The idea is great. The part I should say could use a slight improvement is perhaps the transition - where you put them or how you put them. Cause sometimes I feel like I'm reading the present then WHAM back into the past without warning. So just a little smoother transition would be less jarring.

So keep them! but see if you can make them work a little bit better. That's all I meant to say :p.

Author's Response: Got it, thanks. :) I'll employ the transition better in my next fiction. Promise!
Name: Almicene reviewed Chapter 4 on Sep 30, 2011 01:04 pm
I like that you've kept with the narrator tone. It's a little bit jarring with the jump back and forth in time - perhaps work on the transition a little? I can see what you're trying to do and I feel it's almost there, but not quite perfect yet.

Oddly enough, I think my favorite line was Draco very in character - I'll promise you nothing til you make up your mind. It surprised me because I was expecting him to concede since it's apparent he's developing feelings for Ginny, but that's definitely something a defensive Draco would say. And I was surprised because it was unexpected yet perfectly in character when I thought about it. I like that he's somewhat ruthless, and he has his reasons for doing things, yet he has a soft spot for Ginny. I also really liked he pointed out the trap in answering her question, because it fits with how clever he is. And I especially loved his response when she demands that he answer. It's vague (Draco-like) and fits perfectly with a politician - answering the question without actually answering it.

I probably didn't like how bipolar Ginny was in this chapter - groping him one second and slapping him the next then lusting after him again then angry and comforting.

I'm never a fan of Ginny being some dim-witted, like having no idea that Draco likes her, because he pretty much clearly stated it here. So that would be another portion I didn't like about the chapter. If he was more vague then I'd understand, but in my mind (but perhaps not in your story) she's pretty sharp and would pick up on these clues. The only time she wouldn't is if she were super distracted and interested in someone else, or perhaps Draco being very subtle about it.

Probably favorite part of the chapter was from 'I havent touched you because you've..' to the end. That I felt was very real, and heartwarming and yet kept with the right pace of the story. Don't get me wrong I definitely want to see some D/G action, but pacing wise it was perfect for where you're at even if I'm going mad with impatience :P.

So I would say overall mixed feelings about the chapter:
-minus on Ginny's character/reactions here and the jumps in between past and present (I do like seeing the history, but it doesn't flow really well in your story right now)
-big plus on Draco's character/response. You've got that nailed here. Better than the other chapters.

I'm still keeping my fingers crossed for a happy ending, esp with the way it's going. But please if it's going to be a tragedy would you put that in the warnings/genre or something for the story, cause I don't want to read an unhappy ending, esp with the optimism/way it's going now?

Author's Response: Ha! You deleted your review! I saw, i saw! :P No matter, you expressed yourself very well in the first one. I do understand what you mean by different timeline scenes jarring each other. I actually spent unreasonable time copy-pasting them back and forth, being unhappy about the result no matter what, but until you pointed it out I had no idea what the problem was. Thanks! Sometimes you just need another brain to pick these thing out. I won't be rewriting it any more of corse, it would take a major rewrite which I'm not really interested any more, but as I'm sure I will be using the same format in the future, I'll know what to pay atention to. And I will take a look at the problem in the last two chapters. I thank you on complementing my Draco. To tell you the truth, I'm pretty sure that cann Draco is not so smart, but yo never know, maybe the war really did wisen him up, most canon we see him as a child. About Ginny, I totally agree - she's not a dimwitted idiot and I hope that I will explain why she isn't seeing his affection for her. And if not, then keep im mind that she really is a bit drunk in that scene - can you imagine anyone acting like that unless they weren't? At least I hope that's the only time she's being really dim-witted. Because you know, in my mind Draco really is that outwardly unmovable block of ice that is almost clinically unable to let other people in or express his real feelings. I've answered the question about the happy endings a hundred times it feels like. OK, only three I guess, but still. Well, I'm not oing to put out any warnings. I hate spoiling fictions. But you can check my other stories for clues. They are not as good though. I'm afraid this one will be my swan-song and I'll never write anything so good in my life. *whimper*
Name: lily_malfoy reviewed Chapter 1 on Sep 30, 2011 11:27 am
very interesting! feels very ...real
please keep writing this!
:)

Author's Response: thanks, I will. :)
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