Reviews For The Family Man
Name: b1elliot reviewed Chapter 4 on Dec 30, 2016 08:39 am
I enjoyed how you incorporated this scene from the movie!

Author's Response: Thank you :) I didn't want to copy it straight through as it has bits I don't like so I'm glad you enjoyed my (almost copied) take on it. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: idreamofdraco reviewed Chapter 4 on Dec 25, 2016 07:59 pm
(I'm really sorry about the site going wonky messing up your update schedule! I can't wait to read more when submissions open up again!)

I love that Draco doesn't join in with his bowling buddies complaining about all their wives. This was a good opportunity for him to see that what he and Ginny have is special. Not that he should be comparing his marriage to his friends' marriages, but considering this Draco is an outsider in this life, he can't help but compare. And of course he's pleased that everyone envies him because of Ginny. Maybe that will let him see her in a different and less annoyed light now. ;)

The chase around the house with the cake was adorable!! Evie has the WORST timing ever (the best timing for Draco, though ;D).

As ALWAYS your dialogue is phenomenal. Your characters feel so real because they speak like real people. It doesn't feel scripted or for a purpose. There's always tons of personality when your characters speak that makes reading your stories a joy!

Author's Response: The site has continued to be a bit mean to me :( - but I'm back! Draco here is definitely into the fact that other people want what he has, if nothing else. He's a right twit still ;) Evie knew exactly what she was doing, she's a daddy's girl. She has no concept of time but she knows when her dad is in trouble! Still ecstatic you like reading my dialogue as that's what comes to me the easiest. I just like having them sass around in my head!
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