reviewed Ancient Magic
on May 21, 2017 08:56 am
Wow... what an intense chapter! I think I do remember the differences between this one and the last version, and this is better. The issues of consent are so complex here... I think there's as much as there could possibly be, but Voldy forces the issue so that everyone involved has zero freedom to make better choices. Ginny's fear is almost a palpable thing. There's a good chance that Voldy was bluffing when he threatened that gang rape waited just outside the door-- he needed her to become pregnant by Draco and nobody else-- but there's also a decent chance that it was real, because the Dark Lord isn't exactly sane. Ginny did what she had to do, and it's fascinating that in a way, the D/G roles are reversed from the original. I don't think it can be said that Draco was exactly unwilling, or that he didn't want what Ginny offered, although I don't think it was a choice he would have made at that moment if, well, he'd HAD any choice. But he didn't, and neither did she, so both of them did what they could in an impossible situation. Anyway... looking forward to the next chapter and everyone's reactions to what's happened.
Author's Response: You're absolutely right that the issues of consent are pretty complex here. There was no getting around that, because neither would have chosen to have sex had they had any real choice (and not just because Voldemort was pushing for it). It was not a good situation for either of them. The fact they ended up enjoying being with each other - at least while the sex lasted - doesn't change that.
Anyway, glad you are approving of the changes I am making. I really just want to put Draco and Ginny on a more level playing field in many ways. I am apparently cursed with my word choice though; I keep running into forbidden words. *cries*
reviewed Ancient Magic
on May 20, 2017 10:10 pm
I wonder why Laura is so invested in the whole pregnancy debacle? Another prophecy?
Author's Response: If you've read the original (but I don't recommend), you should have an idea of Lara's intentions. Either way, all shall become clear!
on May 07, 2017 12:17 pm
GREAT great chapter! I'm not going to say that I remember every single last detail of exactly how every sentence of the previous version went. But I really think this chapter revision works better than the one I remember. Draco isn't just pure unadulterated evil; Ginny isn't the the passive victim. She's really resisting, not just making gestures. It's not that Draco has somehow become a "good" character, not at all, but that he has so much more complexity. The fact that Ginny gets to him in some way, that she isn't just his victim,
means that the relationship between them has the potential to be much more intriguing.
(Is there a certain Reylo-like vibe here? ;) Anyway... looking forward to more!
Author's Response: I'm glad you feel this revision works better. I really wanted to create a better dynamic for Draco and Ginny. She was just so weak and wishy washy last time, and it really killed my liking for her. Same goes for Draco. He really was an awful person - far too uncaring and cruel. This Draco is not "good", but I don't think anyone would say he is "evil". He has a lot of complicated feelings and motivations going on, and that will become clearer with each chapter.
Thanks for the review!
reviewed The Raid
on Apr 28, 2017 03:03 pm
Yay for the fic being posted here! :) And yay, too, for the revision. I HAVEN'T read it on ffn... I know, I know, I need to read some fics on that platform, because some of them are ONLY posted there... but it's a Pavlovian reflex by this point... I can't stop thinking of all of my fics they've ever gotten rid of. :P I'm so glad to see that you're working on this one again, and I agree with your point about the characterizations. That was, honestly, the one thing I was never completely happy about in the last version (slightly wishy-washy Ginny, extremely nasty Draco.) Looking forward to more, and remember, if you have problems posting here, PLEASE let me know and we WILL find a way to make it work.
Author's Response: FFN does have its downsides, that is for sure. Alas, FIA just seems to want to obstruct me all the time. I can't publish Team Mates here because of a "forbidden" word in the first chapter. Goodness knows what that even is.
Anyway, I'm glad you agree with my feeling about the old characterisations of Draco and Ginny. I honestly just cringe when I look at a lot of my older stuff - especially my "dark" stuff because of how awful the power dynamic is. This Ginny will be made of much stronger stuff, which is absolutely necessary when pitted against a darker version of Draco. Not that this Draco is in any shape or form as nasty as Grey's. Pandora's Draco is still very complicated (as you will see in the next chapter), but he is definitely more sympathetic. There will be lots more changes as well, as you will see as I get into the story more. :)
reviewed The Raid
on Apr 23, 2017 06:57 pm
I've been keeping up with this revamp on ffnet, but I like seeing it here now too to refresh my memory.
One of the things I really appreciate about this version is Draco's character. He's still not terribly likeable, but he's not as terrifying as in the Different Shades.
Author's Response: Yes, one of the biggest reasons I started the revamp was to fix Draco and Ginny's characterization. Ginny was far too wishy-washy and weak, while Draco really was too "dark". I don't enjoy writing that kind of dynamic anymore. Plus, it was getting in the way of my planned ending.
Anyway, I'm glad you're liking this version better!
reviewed The Raid
on Apr 22, 2017 01:21 pm
This story is on my favorite list on FFN. I'm glad you've started to post it here!
Author's Response: To be honest, I find FIA has a lot of technical difficulties. Half the time I can't even access the site, and sometimes it won't let me post stuff straight out because of "forbidden" words. If something like that happens for a Pandora, I am unlikely to try figure out what word is hindering the chapter. Just following me on FFN is safer in that sense, but I will try to post things here.