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on May 07, 2022 09:54 am
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arloscin reviewed Chapter 1
on Nov 22, 2021 06:13 pm
reviewed Chapter 11
on Nov 19, 2021 03:37 pm
i am a sucker for Tom still caring about Gin in his own creeptastic ways and the kronos parallels are spicy!!! amazing work given it’s your first fanfic, so interested in seeing what that clever brain comes up with as your writing style progresses.
in hopes of helping your writer’s inspiration: i would love to have more detail about the ancient magicks Tom is invoking here (obviously more nuanced than “foolish wand-waving & silly incantations”) and their origins. i think it would also round out your characters to have flashbacks or other snippets detailing exactly how the darkness within ginny affected her during her school years. what exactly was going through her mind as she looked in the mirror? what became of the Healers’ predictions that she would attract Dark magic? what will be the final straw that forces Draco to realize the influence of darkness in his life is incomparable to her own? there is so much about your characters that is left to the imagination, i’d love to see what your imagination could come up with.
all in all, a lovely fic with fascinating themes that I feel you could readily expand on if you felt so inclined. i would be interested in reading this again, rewritten with more complexities & details, to be twice as long or longer! there are many themes you touched on that i would welcome you to really dig into. the more detail, the more the story envelops the reader.
thank you for sharing and welcome to the archive! looking forward to the sequel already.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review! I am definitely a sucker for creepy Tom Riddle... I just love it when he is thrown into the mix! Also I just really wish the relationship between him and Ginny was explored more in canon because I find the whole situation fascinating. I think a lot of your questions and insights will be addressed in the sequel... though some themes I have only scratched the surface on and have been intentionally vague. The story originally wasn't intended to include a sequel but due to the time constraints of the fic fest I really wanted to give the upcoming content and plot points the attention they deserved. I'm actually much more satisfied with the sequel so far and it has been very fun to write! Cheers!
mircomm reviewed Chapter 1
on Oct 26, 2021 12:25 am
Thank you for your sharing,That's pretty cool.
Author's Response: Thank you for reading! Sequel should be up soon!