Ginny Weasley and Draco Malfoy have always been enemies. What will happen when they end up in a place where no one knows of their family rivalry?Category: Long and Completed
I love how Pansy treats him like an idiot. She really doesn't have to be a complete ass simply because Hermione thinks she is. Hermione is highly prejudiced.
Author's Response: Ha ha, I try. I just think it\'s about time Draco had someone who put him in his place.
This is interesting. I'm having a little bit of trouble with the fact that the timelines are way off, but I'm getting over it and this could certainly lead to an interesting place. I look forward to more. Keep on writing. What you're coming out with is good stuff.
Author's Response: Thank you!
::laughs:: This is great. Keep working. I can't wait for the next thing out. The only thing I have an issue with here is your names. They all are a little too exotic for most of the names at Hogwarts, so it seems like they'd really stand out. And, sorry, I know it's a WOT loyalty and all, but who in this world, or any one close to it, would name their child Isendre. Oh, and why would Dumbledore make her sexy? I can't quite decide if that's a him thing to do or not.
Well, good luck.
Author's Response: I like exotic names, and I guess I never thought about it. Crapper. . . Probably the same people who\'d name their daughters Narcissa and Bellatrix? In all seriousness, I\'d probably name my daughter Isendre, but I\'m weird, so maybe I don\'t count. Dumbledore was trying to make sure no one connected her to Haleigh, but I guess I never noticed how big a thing it was until everyone here mentioned it. Thanks for the review! :D
Wow. I always actually sad Ginny as having a Slytherin side, but to that point, I imagine she'd also kill Draco for that. And I can't wait to see that happen.
Besides the fact that the timelines are unbelievably screwy, and that this is a little too coincidental, I really like it. And that song made me laugh. And made me want to sing it; I imagine it would be quite fun.
Author's Response: I know, I\'m kind of a \'coincidence\' writer. I don\'t necessarily try to be, but I have these ideas in my head, and I want to stick them all in the fic, soo. . . yeah. Anyway, thanks for reviewing!
Okay, so is this a fantasy!Draco, or do we have a good explanation for that amazingly romantic letter. Because we had better, don't you think. I mean, I know Draco likes her, but that doesn't quite seem like his style. I dunno.
Good work anyway. This is really fun.
Author's Response: . . . did you not get that Narcissa and Bellatrix are coaxing him along and telling him what to say? Because otherwise, yeah, that would be TOTALLY un-Draco. Thanks for reviewing :D
That was a little too sudden for my liking. What happened to Ginny's backbone? She wouldn't give in that easily, and I don't think she would admit to Draco she was in love with him at this point, if she's even admit it to herself. I would have played her unsure what to say. This scene may need to happen, in a way, but this is not the right way. It happened too soon. I shouldn't have to say that this far into a story, but the way this has been playing, that's the truth.
Sorry if I'm ruining your birthday. I've really liked the rest of this story, and I think you deserve to know what I think of this. That's why I review. So, despite this scene, I'm going to keep up faith that there may still be something good to come. Please pull Ginny back together - if she's not there, this isn't D/G and shouldn't be posted here, right?
Author's Response: Meh, I\'ve told you before: I like your reviews because they\'re blunt.
And no, I don\'t think there\'s any chance you could\'ve ruined my birthday ;)
This was somewhat of an improvement on the last chapter, but it still has the shadow of the discusting things that happened on it. I did like the present from Narcissa and Ginny's reaction to it. But, to elaborate on what I said before, I would have prefered that we kept Ginny in character in relation to Draco. I mean, she would like the presents, yes, but I kind of expected either a little more embaressment about them, or a scolding for thinking too much about money. The whole "this is too much" thing fit but it would have been said by anyone. Ginny is someone special and she deserves to react as such.
Author's Response: Gah, there\'s no pleasing you! ;) Just kidding. I know, I really do need to keep Ginny more in character. I just always want to make her react the way I would, but that\'s bad, you\'re right. Keep on me about it; something might just sink in.
The Draco outbreak showed us some good insite into his life. You're doing well with this, even though your ground (with the screwy timelines and the rather perfectly worked out time travel, oh and that kiss, which still frightens me) is not the firmest here. Anyway, keep this kind of stuff coming and you should do find.
Author's Response: Well, thanks for the partially good review. I think it\'s the best I\'ve come to expect from you, so I can deal ;)
Ooh. I liked that twist. Keep it up.
By the way, does Ginny know. I mean, did Harry tell her (or Hermione, I guess)? I never really thought about that, but I guess that she probably knows.
Author's Response: Thanks! Yay, I got Kisou\'s approval!!!!!! ;) I\'m sure that Ginny knows about Remus being a werewolf from after Snape let it \'slip\' to the whole Slythie table in her 2nd year, but I\'m also assuming that Harry or Sirius or Remus or SOMEONE told her about the Marauders, then she puzzled it out. :D
Okay, yes it's sappy, but I like it just fine. It is much better than the chapter outside the ball that I complained about. And the etching made me laugh.
I've really quite enjoyed this story. I would like to give one suggestion though. I started reading this story because I like the way you formatted it at first with the little snippets switching between Ginny's POV and Draco's POV. I would have liked to see that continued throughout the story. It gave the story an interesting dynamic and alowed you to understand both parties without your going through events twice or confusing the reader. It made me think more about who was talking and what changed with the change of perspective. Anyway, good job. I hope you keep writing.
Author's Response: I\'m glad you liked the separate POVs. When I first did this story on fanfiction.net, I went through all the events twice and everyone hated it, so I figured I\'d do a little editting for this repost :D
"The Phantom of the Opera" has come to Hogwarts, and Ginny's been dreaming of a mysterious masked teacher.Category: Long and Completed
Okay, explain to me exactly how this is possible. It's going to need a lot of explanation. A lot.
Author's Response: How what is possible, exactly?
Please read this whole review before getting angry or defensive. Wait it out.
I find this completely implausible. Hogwarts does not put on muggle musicals. Ginny, Hermione, and Draco don't sing. Not one of them. (Well, I guess Draco could, but I doubt it, as his father certainly wouldn't indulge it, especially in public.) And even if Ginny could sing, she couldn't reach that C and sound good. Let’s be realistic for a moment. When has she been having all these lessons? I mean, I do voice and especially the last year I've focused in on it, and I have a pretty high range, but I don't sound good on that note. Ginny is no super woman.
But, not only do I love the Phantom of the Opera, on principal. I also can see the reason why you might want to bend things so far. It's not like Phantom of the Opera is all that plausible either, except that in its own way it is. I think you can get away with this extreme fall away from cannon if you keep one thing in tact: the characters and their characterization as done by J.K. Rowling. I think it's not only possible, it's necessary. So, with that to think on I encourage you to keep up what you're doing, but remember that you're treading on fine ground; you don't want to jump so far off that what you're writing no longer relates to Harry Potter enough to be called fanfiction, really, but that it can't be called anything else as it's a story about two magical characters named Draco and Ginny who go to a school called Hogwarts, etc.
I wrote what was before this in the review after reading the first two chapters. I'd just like to say that you're doing a good job of characterization though your Ginny is slightly cliché, she's also quite believable. I had to laugh when she said why she loved music, because it's the same answer I myself have given many times before. So, don’t give up because of raunchy reviewers like myself who haven’t the tact to figure out how to coat what they think of your story with sugar. Do know this, I don’t tell people I like their story when I don’t just as I don’t hold back telling people what I think are their weak points. So, when I say I see a strange sense of much skewed promise here, believe me. I’m giving your story a chance even though it’s subject matter is something I’d usually deem completely ridiculous, and, therefore, not worth reading or review. So, have hope in that fact and continue to write this holding on to what you can of the cannon and knowing that you can discard what must be discarded for the sake of the musical, and the romance. Keep it up, whatever you’re doing. You’re doing a better job than I think I myself could do with this plot. You’re really quite brave. You see, I’d never in my wildest dreams attempt to write something like this. I wouldn’t even give it the chance.
Author's Response: It IS completely impluasible, I\'m not going to lie. I\'m not good at writing canon, never have been, so I write non-canon. Regarding Ginny, I wouldn\'t be so sure about that. I can hit a \'C\' just fine, and that was before I started voice lessons.
Oddly enough, I find it really amusing that you think my characterization is good, because that\'s what I\'ve gotten the most complaints about, namely for my portrayal of Harry in this last chapter. But, quite honestly, I\'ll ALWAYS prefer you not to sugarcoat it; reviews that say something besides \'OMG, post more soon!\' are what make my fics worth something.
Thank you for a VERY good review, and I\'m glad that you\'re reading it.
And just out of curiosity, what are you taking voice lessons for? I mean, what do you hope to do with it? I myself am planning to take Broadway by storm (at least, I hope so ;)).
You're very lucky to have a range like that. I have a good range, but I have to work to make it sound decent. As for what I want to do with voice well, if I actually could 'take Broadway by storm' there's nothing in the world I would like to do more. But I have a lot of other ambitions (I want to become a neuroscientist) so I don't know how plausible that's really going to be. Really, I sing because I love singing.
And I like how Blaise is Raoul. You see, I've always liked Christine with Phantom better than Christine with Raoul. I guess I just go for the 'bad' guys, especially the ones that aren't really all that bad.
And I read the reviews complaining about Harry's reaction and don't remember thinking of it as really annoying or off. I think Harry is much more pigheaded than we think of him as. The fact is that the books are all from his perspective and so we don't really see the reasons people wouldn't like him so much. People are rarely unlikable when you're in their heads. Though, when I was talking about the characterization that I liked, I was thinking particularly of Ginny and Draco. The skirt incident in this chapter was a wonderful addition to Ginny's character and it built on one of the characteristics of your Ginny that is more original: her easy self consciousness about her body, or her want to be more modest, whichever way you want to interpret her actions.
Author's Response: Ooh, no, you should do Broadway. Then we could take it by storm together (or fail miserably, but I prefer to think optimistically ;))! Hee hee, thanks. I just really wanted to put Blaise in the story. Aw, thanks. Yeah, I was getting really sick of people making Ginny into a slut or a whore or whatever, so I put my own assumptions on her.
Wasn't that romantic. ;P
No, actually, I think this is going along quite well, for all it's inability to be realistic. But, you know, it's a very good thing you update so often, because these chapters are little snippets. Not that that's not okay, just keep up the pace, so we don't have to keep on wondering longer than might be healthy how this is all going to turn out. Well, good luck, and, like I said, keep it up. I'll keep my eyes out for your next chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! Ha, I love \"for all it\'s inability to be realistic.\" :D
How sweet.
Ahh...I think I just missed about three updates. (I have a strange feeling that the email alerts are only kind of fixed.)
Well, for all of my qualms about the reality of this story, I think I've gotten over them due to my incurable addiction to musicals and music in general. And Blaise, who, whe portrayed this way, is one of my favorite people. He always seems to make me laugh.
Keep it up. I can't wait for the next chapter.
Author's Response: Yay for addictions to musicals! I\'m with you there :D
I like the idea of this, but I'd like you to go back and look at how much of that chapter you can actually claim to own. It amounts to something like 10 or 11 paragraphs. I don't even mind the lyrics in there, though personally, I skip them. We're here for the story and I'd really like to see that moving on. Don't imagine that just because it's longer, it's ready to post. I personally would have added this chapter to whatever comes next because this chapter just doesn't have enough happen for us to get back into the story. Also, I'm sorry, but I don't see this happening. They were both in complete denial (well, at least to each other) just a moment ago, I don't think what Blaise did is really enough to justify why these two rather closed up people are so ready to open up in front of such an audience.
I hope you don't let my critisims get to you too much. Keep on writing, this storyline is intriguing, and I really can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: See, the comment on this chapter are really weird to me. The other two places I\'ve posted this previously, people got sore whenever the chapter DIDN\'T have lyrics in them, so you have to understand that this is very foreign stuff to me. Thanks for reviewing.
There was a little more interaction there, and thank you for that, but you're still streching it. If you want to stop getting review like mine and flame_kitty's you should probably post this specifically as a songfic. Yes, I know you think the title is enough, but let me tell you, it isn't. For example, I was just reading Rhapsody by distempered. It has a very distinctly music title, and a lot of music reference, singing, and whatnot. Yet, very rarely does she put in actual lyrics.
There's no problem with a couple of lyrics, or lyrics in one chapter, or whatever in a non-songfic, but what you're doing is outsteping even the boundaries of most song fics in the way that you're using the lyrics so that you don't have to tell the story yourself, explain the emotions yourself. You're a good writer, and I hate to see you cheating yourself out of actually writing by using other people's work.
Please don't respond defensively to this. Rememeber that even though, yes, this is your fic and you understand what you're trying to do with it more than anyone else, us readers are the one's your trying to get to (or else, why in the world do you bother posting online?). And every once in a while, we might even have something worthwhile to say.
I'm sorry if I've offended you, as that really isn't my goal. I write real reviews because I hope that fanfiction writers are actually trying to improve their writing and I want to do all I can to help them with that. I really do hope you continue to write and improve your writing, just as every other good author. Good luck!
Author's Response: Okay, I\'ve got to say something real quick here. Please don\'t feel like you\'re offending me, and PLEASE don\'t hold back at all (I don\'t know if you have been or not). I really don\'t mind getting reviews like yours; I actually really LIKE it. Don\'t get me wrong, I love reviews like \"OMG that wuz sssooooo good,\" but yours actually have substance. Alright, rant over ;)
Maybe it\'s the fact that I\'m both extremely lazy, and extremely stupid to write more than 1 fanfic at a time, but I do, and it\'s too much for me. I write a chapter for one of them, and by the time I get to the other one, I have to force myself to write. So yeah, I\'m probably shirking off with the song lyrics. But I really do like them, and I think having them in there is necessary.
But yeah, that\'s my little reply. Talk to you next chapter, I\'m sure ;)
That was much improbed from the last chapters. It was short, but much more substantial than the last few chapters. I would urge you to, even as much as I'm sure you like to, not take on any more fic than you can handle. If you have to, just update less. Personally, I only update when I feel like writing, and no more than that. I'm slow and I don't get as much praise as some do, but I'm writing for myself and only post because I appriciate people's thought through opinions as it can help me improve. But really that's your buisness and if you write for the reviews (Though I don't sense that you do) that's your choice.
Blaise is so hilarious. I'm not competely sure if he's in character, but that's because I don't really know his character, not because I can point out anything speicfically wrong. You're writing him much like he's writen in many fics.
Ginny is a little bit more mellow in this fic, more mature maybe. I'd really like to see that continue. If you can recal for me what she did when Ron got angry at her for snogging in the corridors you'll realize that she has more than a little bit of a temper. Here she displays more sense. It would be very interesting if you could play with this in such a way that when most of the time she doesn't try to upset the Trio, but then occationally her bubble pops and out slips her temper which is quite amazing, as I see it.
Well, good luck, and keep writing.
Author's Response: Thanks :D I pretty much wrote this fic before HBP came out, and so all we knew was his name. I\'m just cool like that ;) Thanks for the review! The only thing I\'m worried about is you losing interest in reading the fic once you run out of things to critique :D
Thanks for that lovely chunk of writing. I think "As Long As You're Mine" fit in wonderfully there, but I'm biased. I've been listening to Wicked all day and so as I can't seem to get it out of my mind properly, it might as well be plastered everywhere.
The Christmas gifts were cute, and I liked the summoning rings. I did not, however, like the fact that Draco's and Ginny's letters said the same thing, and in the same way. They may think quite alike (depending on your interpretation of them), but they don't neccessarily express themselves in the same manner. And even if they did, I didn't want to read it again. Sorry, but no. They might have both belivably writen those letters, but the conisidence of them being there at the same time makes me sit back and go, oh yeah, this is a story writen by someone who writes online because they can't write professionally. I don't mean that as an insult; I'm the same way. But there's no need to remind your audience of that.
Thanks again for the amount of actual story you had in this chapter. I really enjoyed that.
Author's Response: Thanks! I happen to LOVE Wicked (actually, the sequel to this fic is Wicked), so I couldn\'t resist putting it in there.
Two updates in a day. Impressive.
I have to admit that I really didn't like the "Ginny was nosing- pun totally intended- through the perfumes." But I'm not into what is generally thought of as pop humor or anything of that sort, and I've had rather too many puns lately, perhaps. Even with me not liking puns though, I would note that that is an in story AN which is generally a good fanfiction no-no. Sorry I'm such an ass about things. ^_^
Good job otherwise. Keep it up.
Author's Response: I was home sick, so I really had nothing better to do than update.
. . . I\'m trying to decided why I like you, when you ARE- to quote you- an ass about things. I don\'t know. . . maybe I like your reviews BECAUSE you\'re an ass about things. Whatever. Thanks for reviewing.
I liked the first of this, espeically Blaise (I have a thing for him. I think, if I were at Hogwarts, I'd have to crush on him, even more than Draco.) And the song was good though, need I say it, long. Love you too. ^_^
Author's Response: I\'d totally be in love with Blaise, too, so I\'m with you there. Yeah, I knew before I even wrote it that you wouldn\'t like the song, but I really like it, so. . . ;)
Oh. I wanted to cry. And the song didn't help. I love Wicked, and I actually read the whole song. How depressing. This story is getting deeper than I would have guessed with how it started out.
Author's Response: Oh my gosh, I think I\'m going to faint. You actually wrote me an entire review with no cricisms. . . thanks! ;) I\'m glad you liked it (or were totally depressed by it, whichever).
Thank you for the code. This is one of my favorite parts of Phatom, so I won't even scold you for the lyrics. Now I'll just cry for more words. XD
Author's Response: Ha ha, you\'re welcome. And yeah, I knew you\'d want more words, but I\'m in love with that part, too. Fine, for the next chapter (which I think is the last) I promise to give you lots of words ;)
I won't hurt you for it, don't worry. I'm on holiday, so I'm not quite as much the bitch. ^＿^
Well, I am still in awe of the fact that, through all my complaining, I read this entire fic. Shows you how much of a musical freak I am, I guess. And, with all my problems, you're D/G story was put together quite well. I felt the emotional journey was quite believable, even if the physical one didn't seem that way. So, cheers for daring to write that and cheers for not doing a half-assed job of it. I hope you keep writing.
Author's Response: Ha ha, well thank you for that. Don\'t you feel special being mentioned in the author\'s note?
I\'m pretty in awe of that, too, yeah. Thank you so much! I\'m definitely going to keep writing, and the sequel (Wicked) is up now, if you\'re interested. If not, then thank you for the very helpful reviews all the way through!
Author's Response: Never mind, I just went and read your profile, and I\'m somehow thinking that you\'re definitely going to be interested in \'Wicked\' ;) Ha ha, the sequel that I have planned for after Wicked was \'RENT\' until yesterday, but you might be able to persuade me to change back.
A thought turns into a whisper turns into a rumor and soon everyone knew that Ginny Weasley had an eating disorder. She had no one to turn to except the one who understood her the most. Her enemy, Draco Malfoy. He had always known and despite that he wasn't disgusted. He let her lose herself in him.Category: Works in Progress
I really like that you're address this issue, because it really is a serious one and it's more widespread than some would like to think. (Like the trio, obviously.)
I did see one slight inconsistency in the first paragraph. She says something about the small imperfections, the fact that she needed to be smaller. But then again, that could just be an internal conflict thing. People with eating disorders do, to some extent, realize that they are skinny, and like it, but at the same time, it the "but if only I lost 5 more pounds". So that could, very easily, be realistic. Just realize what you're doing, because then you can use it later on to shape her.
Author's Response: Hi there! Thank you so much for the review! Ginny is waaay insecure about her body but she does love the fact that she has gotten as skinny as she has. She thinks Harry would notice her as a girlfriend if she was smaller!