When Ginny Weasley becomes Draco Malfoy's wife, he suspects neither her true identity nor her dangerous motives. But when all Hell breaks lose and their relationship takes unexpected turns, there is more at stake than preserving their marriage--namely, preserving their lives.Category: Long and Completed
Let me begin by saying I did like the story overall.
However, it was littered with grammatical errors and inconsistencies and at times seemed unbelievable. She fell for him awfully fast, didn't she? Considering how little time they seemed to spend together.
At times, the story was tedious and somewhat repetitive. There were about four chapters I had to force myself to read, unable to absorb myself into the story.
Also, you used some words that seemed like you looked them up just for the story. Someone once told me, don't use words you're unfamiliar with when writing, because the readers can tell. If those words were already in your vocabulary, then my humblest apologies.
In regards to the pregnancy with the twins. It was somewhat unbelievable with some of the things she was doing, being as big as she would have been and off balance that pregnancy brings.
Anyway, I'm sorry if you take this review badly, it was not intended that way. Hopefully everything will be fixed with the rewrite you spoke about. Good luck on future stories!
P.S. Perhaps you should look into another beta whose strong point is grammar :)
Author's Response: I'm glad that you enjoyed it overall. My story was betaed by two people, so if you have any grammatical suggestions, please feel free to make them. Implying that I may not have known the meaning of the words I use is hardly justified or polite. Occasionally I do use words whose original meaning has evolved in recent years or that are rarely used in the contexts in which I use them, but I assure you that I usually check before leaving such words in the story. Lastly, please note that this is a 400+ pages story, written over the course of several years; inconsistencies are bound to have arisen, and I do apologize for them. I simply do not have the time to go back and correct them all.
Draco and Pansy like to play games. What happens when a Polyjuice Plan goes wrong?Category: Works in Progress
Mmmm, sounds yummy... More?
Author's Response: thank you, more is on it\'s way.
Mmm, yummy... More?
Author's Response: thank you, more is on it\'s way.
Naughty naughty Ginny...
Author's Response: Don\'t you just love a GInny that can stop a Malfoy in his tracks.
Rotfl, I loved that last line!
Author's Response: Thank you. I thought it was funny too. Good to know I\'m not laughing by myself.
Rotfl, my favorite line! (The last one, that is!)
Author's Response: Thank you. I\'m glad you liked it.
*snicker* Maybe...
Author's Response: Thank you :)
Draco wants an ideal arrangement. Ginny wants a happily ever after. What they get is each other.Category: Long and Completed
Oh, no fair, that's all?
Author's Response: Yes.
She had won. She had finally won. She was sure of it. He would not be pleased. And this thought made her smile.Category: Completed Short Stories
Lmao at the 'you will be punished'!!! Oh, that was the greatest line, ever!
A silly drabble about what would inevitably happen if Harry and Ginny ever got (God forbid) married. Anyone expecting intricate plotting or vast character development will be disappointed, but leather pants are involved, however tangentially.Category: Completed Short Stories
Rofl... That's all that need to be said...
Ginny and Draco are assigned to be partners in a cooking class. When they spill a pan full of chocolate cake batter, interesting things ensue.Category: Long and Completed
Draco and Ginny in a dark, post-War romance. Draco stumbles around. Ginny catches him, sort of.Category: Completed Short Stories
Valentine's Day brings a surprise, but not the one Ginny was hoping for.Category: Works in Progress
Haha, this was hilarious! Can't wait for the next chapter!
"It's not better to have loved and lost, Weasley. No matter what they tell you."Category: Completed Short Stories
Haha, loved it! More, please!
A parody of Taylor Swift's "Love Story."Category: Poetry
LMAO at the 'I talked to your dad, he punched me out cold' bit!
Lost and wandering the dungeons, Ginny stumbles upon Draco. They share a moment that could grow into a lifetime. How far will Draco go to have her and how much will Ginny give up to be with him?Category: Works in Progress
Where is the interlude? :"(
Married for wealth, Draco regrets his decision to leave behind his love and allow her to marry second best. Now years later, lust and envy fill the air as they fight the passion and want to be together.Category: Long and Completed
Lol, I didn't know you were on here, too! It's me, peter-pan-equals-luv, on fanfiction.net. :D Small world, lol
Sometimes, Ginny just wanted to break mirrors so she'd be certain to live for another seven years. She wondered if seeing her face splinter like Draco's mind already had would be worth it.Category: Works in Progress
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Oh, holy frick! Ugh, please update?! I'm dying here!!! Super sad face... :"(
I love the way you're writing Draco, kinda OOC, but I can see him acting like that after a good taste of war.
Keep up the good work!!!
Author's Response: I'm so sorry the update took a MONTH to happen! (And even as I type this, it hasn't been approved yet!) D: D: D: Forgive me? :( I'm glad you like the way Draco's turned out, though. He's super fun to write! And of course he's going to be a bit OOC. They ALL are. Like you said, it's more believable in context. Thanks so much for the review!
I thought this chapter was throughly engaging! It took me three tries to finish it and I was so angry 'cause I wanted to read the end! Now I have and I lurve it! Brill, can't wait for the next one :D
All Ginny wants is to get the upper hand just once with drool-worthy hunk of man candy and callous playboy Draco Malfoy before he moves on to his next careless conquest. So how did this simple plan lead to time travel, nefarious plots involving the most infamous whorehouse in the wizarding world, and the teenaged Draco’s achingly sweet, chocolate-flavored kisses? Even Draco Malfoy was innocent once, as Ginny learns all too well…Category: Long and Completed
Chapter ONE HUNDRED EIGHTEEN Quote of the Day:
THE LAST CHAPTER
The minutes ticked by, long enough for Ginny to know that against all reason, all common sense, she still wanted impossible things from him. But she would leave. Even after today, even when her body ached from him and for him, when she could feel that he had begun to shape her to him, she would turn around and leave him. I will, I will, she thought.
“You don’t understand,” said Draco.
“Oh?” Ginny said stiffly. “At least he hadn’t touched her, she thought. She would not be able to find the strength to pull herself away from him, and she knew it.
Really, you two, just get on with it! Lol ;)
Ugh, would you two bloody get on with it! We're waiting!
On the other hand, yay! Honerable mention for me! :D Lol, seriously, let me know when you write your own novel, I wanna read it :D
Author's Response: They'll get on with SOMETHING... but maybe not what anybody expected. I don't know if you want to read the original novels that were already written, because they weren't really very good. But I'm working on another one now involving zombies. :)
You have the most excellent ways of twisting plots! I simply love reading your stories :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Oh there is SUCH a plot twist coming up... ;)
Bravo, Daphne! Takes some cajones to face Ginny Weasley! Hope she doesn't get fired :/ Great chapter, loved it!!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I really like DDD's Daphne. :)
Wow, some crazy stuff Daphne is spouting! Wonder what Draco and Astoria are up to... :D
Author's Response: I actually thought about doing D/A updates, but I think I"ll have Draco tell Ginny about some of it eventually. Let's just say that Draco is not having fun on his honeymoon.
He is stalking and murdering young redheaded women.Category: Long and Completed
Wow, that was... creepy. But I guessed it was Draco. But she didn't reject him, so I don't quite understand that bit. Not too bad, though, I suppose.
Author's Response: When she told him in that one chapter she didn't want to be with him, his brain twisted and he went slightly mad, so to speak.