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The Revisionist by Mourning Broken Angel    (Reviews - 33)

They say the road to Hell is paved with the best of intentions. [Winner of Persephone33's excellent Time Turner '09 contest]
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: D/G Offspring, Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Lucius Malfoy, Narcissa Malfoy, Other Characters, Pansy Parkinson
Compliant with: Fully compliant
Era: Future AU, Next Generation, Past AU, Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: Character Death
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 2 | Word count: 9909 | Read count: 7564 | Published: Jan 06, 2010 | Updated: Jan 08, 2010
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Date: Jan 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Oooh, I love your little introduction at the top. For a second, I thought he was going to say it was all Ginny's fault! Lol!

I really really like this and cannot wait for you to update (tomorrow is so far away). I will properly review the fic when you have fully posted it. I am very excited to see what happens next. ^^

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Date: Jan 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Narcissa! Wow. I love how you portrayed Narcissa here. That woman is awesome!

Okay, I really really liked this. I see why it won first place. I feel so sorry for Draco, but he deserved it (Scorpius, however, did not). Hopefully, he will have a beautiful son and daughter with Ginny? Pretty please? I will imagine it anyway. ^_~

Needless to say, I was somewhat frightened by Ginny. Ginny married to Harry seems to equate 'bitch'. However, she was so very real. When her son is alive, she doesn’t want to change the past; when he son is dead, she does. It's ery hypocritical and very human. So, excellent characterisation of both her and Draco.

I like how when he went further back in time, he was drawn to Ginny and she to him. In the future, they are drawn over the issue of their sons and their hatred towards one another. In the past, it is over looks, feistiness, and arrogance. Lol. Ah, youth.

I am very happy you put in the Dumbledore bit. I love seeing him as a mediatory or guide in fics. While Snape often appears to be the most appropriate for this role in DG fics, in this one Dumbledore fits perfectly.

“I believe, if I am correct –and I usually am- that smashing your Time Turner here, in my Present, will render your timeline null and void.” -- So Dumbledore. I giggled.

All-in-all, you did an excellent job, especially with the explanation of your title. I do love adages. ^_~ And I loved this story. Very well done. (And yay for the happy ending!)

Omega-13 by gidge_8    (Reviews - 27)

Every teenager has a moment that is so horrible and embarrassing that they wish it had never happened. Usually, they simply have to learn to live with the consequences. But, she is no ordinary teenager. She's a witch with access to a Time-Turner

[Second place winner in persephone33's Great D/G Time-Turner Contest 2009]

Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: GoF and below
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 2 | Word count: 99 | Read count: 8222 | Published: Jan 08, 2010 | Updated: Jan 21, 2011
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Date: Jan 08, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Oh, the Trauma

SQUEE! Heheh, this was so adorable. I loved it. It so reminds me of something Kim (Boogum) would write -- not to detract or take away from your wonderful writing. I just really really liked this!!

He smirked at her. “Was it everything you expected, Weaselette?” -- Best line, ever!

You did a great job like this. You should write more one-shots. I demand it. ^_^

Author's Response: *blushes* I don't mind being compared to Boogum/Moogle at all! She's one of my favorite authors, and way back I thought that my style was similar to hers. It's quite a compliment that you thought so too! I may be forced into more one-shots. The long ones are very, very time-consuming to put together, since I tend to do complex plots. Thank you so much!!!!

Last Chance by Ginny Malfoy    (Reviews - 6)

Draco and Ginny are secretly dating, up until he makes a big mistake and she leaves. Once he realizes what a huge mistake he's made he becomes determined to do anything to win her back.

Excerpt: “But…I love you and I can’t live without you. I will do anything.”
“If what? If I take you back?”
“I blew it, I know, but if you could just give me a second chance…”
“A second chance?! You don’t get it do you? Yes, you blew it. That means it's over. You had your chance. I gave you everything. I gave you the chance I never should have in the first place because for some reason I thought...that you were different. I gave you everything...
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 4718 | Read count: 1507 | Published: Jan 11, 2010 | Updated: Jan 11, 2010
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Date: Jan 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Here Goes Nothing

My critical side tells me that this could have use a little SPaG check, but my sentimental side appreciates the emotion in this. It is raw and real and how a conversation based on trust and 'chances' would turn out. I would have been satisfied with a good or bad ending. I empathise with both Draco and Ginny.

Author's Response: Your critical side is probably correct. LLOL! I have some things I need to work on, I know. If it had ended bad, just out of curiosity and from one writer to another, how do you think it would have gone? I've never written a story in which it didn't work for them and it's hard for me to imagine.

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Jan 25, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Here Goes Nothing

If it had ended bad, just out of curiosity and from one writer to another, how do you think it would have gone?

Well, Ginny could have just said no and never given him a second chance. She would have been justified, and I would have still been content with the piece. Of course, I would have probably ended it (if I wrote a bad ending for the two) with either Draco dwelling on the consequences of his actions some years down the road or perhaps wrote something to the effect of how star-crossed lovers are never meant to be, or how it wasn't their time, perhaps in their next life. However, I like your ending because I, too, am a romantic at heart. ^^

Author's Response: I can totally see that. And Harry/Ginny fans, or just anyone against D/G, would've been good with that. And hey, if it had been written well, mayeb it wouldn't have been so bad. But, like you said, romantic at heart and bad endings just won't do for me. LLOL! ;D

Broken Mirrors by Cadaverous Apples    (Reviews - 55)

Sometimes, Ginny just wanted to break mirrors so she'd be certain to live for another seven years. She wondered if seeing her face splinter like Draco's mind already had would be worth it.

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Category: Works in Progress
Rating: Extremely Naughty
Characters: Blaise Zabini (boy), Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Hermione Granger, Lucius Malfoy, Luna Lovegood, Narcissa Malfoy, Other Characters, Pansy Parkinson, Ron Weasley
Compliant with: HBP and below
Era: Future AU
Genres: Action, Drama, Horror, Mystery, Romance, Smut
Warnings: Blood, Character Death, Graphic Violence
Completed: No
Series: None
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Chapters: 4 | Word count: 25887 | Read count: 4083 | Published: Feb 26, 2010 | Updated: Jan 10, 2011
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Date: May 12, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: I: Defiance is beautiful

Mmm, this is a very dark piece. I like how you have Ginny angry that the Order uses non-Dark spells, which are more effective, whereas the Death Eaters can inflict damage with a sort of impunity that she clearly envies. If I were Ginny, I'd be envious and rankled too.

Your imagery is colourful, to juxtapose against the darkness of the plot and actions themselves. Colours are very important here, as is the image of those involved--colours of spells, of bruises, and of bright lights. You also take time to describe the greasy hair, the unkempt appearances, and the numerous white scars. Nothing is grey, nor is it black and white. The colours symbolise, to me, a living, breathing tale. It signifies that this is a story of action. It is war that takes place in the here and now--war that is exploding with colour.

Then you place someone like Fred, who cannot see at all, in the middle of it. We are given an entirely different point of view: war with no sight. I wonder if he will introduce us to the taste, touch, and smells of war. And I also wonder if his lack of sight provides him with another type of sight: insight. Will he provide us with the emotionless facets of war? I can already sense that he is cold. He does not see war the way the others do. This could make him a rather good leader, if he could get over his own self-pity. To me, he’s almost like a Mad-Eye Moony now. Perhaps I am reading way too much into the twins, especially since they are not the focal point of the story. Lol. But, I like how you have Fred, so let’s leave it at that.

Out of the transformations of the Trio, I especially like how you kept Hermione the same. I never saw her as one to break unless one of the others died, particularly Harry. Since Ron is the one who is now broken, it makes sense that Hermione builds herself up to be even stronger, for him. I do hope we see more of Ron, because I am very much intrigued by him.

I shall do my analysis of Ginny and Draco as I read more. I don’t like to assess them from the get-go. I will say that Ginny does seem a little dark--in a good way. Obviously, I already know that Ginny is pregnant with Draco’s child. The question is why. I shall have to read on and find out.

Lovely premise, my dear, and very well-written and thought out. Kudos.

~Lia

Irrevocably Broken by MemoriesFade    (Reviews - 16)

Draco realizes that some things that are broken can never be fixed.
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Narcissa Malfoy
Compliant with: None
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: Blood, Graphic Violence
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 3348 | Read count: 1387 | Published: Mar 13, 2010 | Updated: Mar 14, 2010
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Date: Mar 15, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Very dark. I think I must go read fluff after this...

I like how you brought Narcissa into this. She was very much in character, and at the same time I wanted to jump up and give her a big hug. And Draco...I can't help but be a sucker for a redemptive-seeking Draco who will never find forgiveness. He deserves this pain.

You should really write more one-shots like this, Ann. I am very impressed. ~Lia

Author's Response: You're such an ego feeder. But thank you. It's funny because everyone keeps telling me this was so dark, and you know that was the one thing I was really worried about. Narcissa was a last minute addition but I'm thankful for it because it gave Draco that final push to admit his wrongs, and then he doesn't get forgiveness. It's lovely really. I'll have to go read the fluff that I think you put up on the Review Society thread and review it. Thanks for the review. -Ann

Dirty Blond Little Secret by shmeilia    (Reviews - 23)

Draco's deepest, darkest secret is accidentally revealed to the world. A hissy fit ensues.
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Future AU
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 1127 | Read count: 3758 | Published: Apr 02, 2010 | Updated: Apr 02, 2010
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Date: Apr 03, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Dirty Blond Little Secret

HAHA! Omg that was priceless. Thank you for posting this! I can't stop laughing.

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. As a general note to everyone, thank you so much for your reviews, you make me feel so... well, funny! I've got a few more I'm working on that hopefully I will post in the near future. But til then, thanks everyone for your positive feedback!

Fairytale Ending by Embellished    (Reviews - 17)

When Ginny Weasley was six years old, she freed a genie from a bottle.
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 4558 | Read count: 3867 | Published: May 27, 2010 | Updated: May 27, 2010
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Date: May 27, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Fairytale Ending

That was adorable. ^^

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it! :)

Gypsy Girl by Boogum    (Reviews - 12)

My mother told me once that she hated to see birds kept in a cage. She said that birds were not made to be trapped behind bars; they were made to fly.
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: GoF and below
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Drama, Romance
Warnings: Character Death
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 1298 | Read count: 2939 | Published: May 27, 2010 | Updated: May 27, 2010
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Date: May 28, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Gypsy Girl

Oh, I really like this Kim. It's so bitter-sweet. Ginny is so different, but in a good way, I find.

I can see that you strayed from your normal humour/romance (with fluff), and you are going for realism, which is often sad. I am left wondering what made Ginny so wild and carefree. So many little mysteries.

What I love the most about this story are your little descriptions: She was so close I could count the tiny freckles on her nose and see the different shades of brown that painted her irises. You just sprinkle them throughout the fic, and it makes it such a pleasure to read. I am reminded of licking chocolate off fingers. Delicious. ^^

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia. That's a compliment indeed. ^_^

I've had a couple of comments from my FF reviewers that they felt Ginny was more like Luna (which I knew was a danger when I first got the idea), but I like to think she still has her usual Ginny spirit. I really wanted to write a more carefree and wild Ginny -- one who doesn't have to be held back by family rivalries or even people's expectations -- and I loved the idea of creating a character who has such a deep connection with the land, wind and rain (as I do myself). I also wanted to steer well clear of the typical 'bantering' DG story that I normally write. You're right, I didn't want to write fluff, but I always knew it was going to be bittersweet in the end.

romance in the shadows by kermit    (Reviews - 6)

about draco and ginny's secret nightly sessions. :p the usual.
Category: Poetry
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: None
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 108 | Read count: 2038 | Published: Jun 03, 2010 | Updated: Jun 03, 2010
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Date: Jun 30, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Aww, this was adorable.

I really like how you kept the simple 4-line rhyming scheme (ABCB). To me, it made the poem more lyrical, like a song.

Well done.

There is Another Sky by Terra    (Reviews - 37)

Four years, five months and twenty-three days. Ginny feels the weight of every minute with no regrets because each second has dragged her that much closer to Draco Malfoy.

You know that moment when time stands still and you’re suspended above everything, catching all the angles? And somehow you know this here, this now matters?

Yes.
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 2 | Word count: 23328 | Read count: 4918 | Published: Jun 08, 2010 | Updated: Jun 17, 2010
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Date: Jun 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Brilliant.

What more can I say? Well, I can say a lot more, and I will. But to continue with the word brilliant: your prose is brilliant; your dialogue is brilliant; your characterisation is brilliant. I am truly in awe. There are very few stories that move me or excite me. Yours manages to do both.

To begin, you opening scene is magical, in a depressing way. Oh, and I say that in the nicest way possible. I mean, how do you take the compliment that you write funerals in a magical way? 'I had fun reading your descriptions about death and sorrow. Wee!' Well, needless to say that I am in love with your imagery and your description of everyone's reactions, especially George's muted anger.

Draco's scene is equally depressing. It’s made even gloomier with the fact that his entry is dated on his birthday. Poor lad. And while it is a horribly disheartening scene, I am captivated by his intuitiveness: There's something inescapably worth it in knowing a woman waits for you in a house the two of you can make a home. Sigh, chivalry is not dead with our Draco…or at least we hope not.

What I think I love the most about your writing, besides the fluid prose and delightful banter, is your casual commentary on certain characters--their development and their flaws: It's not enough to be the cleverest witch of her generation; [Hermione] wants tangible proof of it. Ginny wonders who she's trying to impress, these invisible critics only Hermione seems to see. Phenomenal. Spot on.

And Luna's tea party and pep talk with Draco? Fantastic! I just love how you pay attention to every detail. Your writing is such a pleasure to read. You have the ability to make me laugh, smile, and gasp--especially the scene where Draco is sleeping, and Ginny wakes him up. God, you paint such a vivid picture. I could see his confusion and fear--the animal instinct taking over.

And as the timeline progresses, you subtly and artfully demonstrate the maturity of our characters--and make them even more entertaining. Your banter just gets better and better. And the fluidity and naturalness of it? Brilliant! (I don't think I used the word 'brilliant' enough when associating it with you, wouldn't you agree?) ^_~

I cannot wait to read what happens next. I shall definitely be keeping an eye out for what you have to offer us next.

Amazing read. Amazing job.

~Lia

Author's Response: I responded over at FFN but I wanted to let you know again how much I appreciated your taking the time to write me such a fabulous review. :)

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Jun 18, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Sometimes, in stories like these, where they are broken down in parts, the last half often doesn’t read as well as the first, and you find yourself skimming to the end, to make sure that your couple get together. Your story is not one of those stories. I can’t bring myself to skim. I want to digest every word. You are that talented of a writer. And what makes you so talented is the ability to find beauty in the mundane, in every day events. Harry and Ginny’s relationship is normal and expected and--for once--Harry is not vilified! Thank you.

What I forgot to mention in my first review was that I love your little italic side-notes from Draco and Ginny. I’m having fun trying to guess who says what. I have deduced that most of the terse comments are from Draco. Am I right? Heh.

I also forgot to mention that I love your style and the little devices you employed to convey a relatively complicated and complex story into so few words. While this story could have easily become epic in length (and I still would have loved it), I must say that I appreciate your condensed version over a lengthy one. Brevity is the soul of wit after all. I forget who said that. Bah, I’m too lazy to look it up. All I know is that it’s not my quote. ^_~

Of course, as always, I love your descriptions and imagery. You always manage to choose the right words to convey a feeling or sentiment: She loves the feel of the sheer empty space around her, the same reason she loves to fly; there’s no freedom like true, untethered freefall. And I especially love when you parallel or mirror those sentiments and expressions between characters: He loves flying: the feel of being cradled by razor-cold wind and the knowledge that no matter how far he flies—flees, falls, soars—or wherever he goes, always, always there is another sky. Clever girl, you!

Oh, and don’t think I didn’t notice the UST going on with the inn room scene. *fans face* Lord have mercy! I was practically screaming at Ginny to jump his bones! Lol. You have a real knack for leading the reader on. I anticipated the ending more than I have of any story in a long time. And that ending? When Draco kisses her back, hard and warm, Ginny hopes that if she holds on long enough, they’ll never break this freefall. *swoons* Just enough fluff and just enough poetic realism to make me very, very content.

Marvellous job, my dear. Brilliant. Brilliant. Brilliant. Please do write more. I implore you. This is a favourite amongst favourites! *gives you a standing ovation* Bravo!

~Lia

Author's Response: Sigh. Your reviews are just lovely. Reading through it is a guaranteed way to make me look like a loon with a huge grin on my face. Thank you so much for your kind words, my dear! :)

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Jun 19, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I have only one negative thing to say here: WHERE ARE THE REVIEWS???

Seriously, people! This is a brilliant piece of work. It's something you can read over and over, and it makes your heart melt and do that little fluttery thing. It's real. It's raw. It's beautiful.

APPRECIATE THIS! I do. ^_^

~Lia

Not Enough by idreamofdraco    (Reviews - 30)

“I've got a proposition, for you,” Draco started. He took a sip of tea, glancing at her through his eyelashes as she eyed him warily. “And seeing how you took delicious advantage of me in my drunken and vulnerable state last night, I don't think you have any right to say no.” ABANDONED.
Category: Works in Progress
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Pansy Parkinson
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: No
Series: None
Table of Contents

Chapters: 2 | Word count: 6479 | Read count: 2992 | Published: Jun 08, 2010 | Updated: Jul 14, 2010
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Date: Jun 10, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Jessica, you potty mouth! Lol!

Seriously though, this is an excellent start to what looks to be an excellent story. It's so very raw with its imagery and characterisation, and I love that.

Besides from the obvious and delightful humour you have going on, you have some great set ups and deliveries: “I see,” she answered. Only, her “I see” was indeed meant in the gravest way imaginable…

Lovely, lovely. While I am not a fan of Harry bashing, I do like your premise. And, so far, I love your Draco is in character--especially how you expertly describe how Draco would have normally laughed at and revelled at the opportunity to ridicule Ginny. But he can't because he now knows her and wants to get to know her better, in a physical sense, of course: Besides, she'd been a damn good shag—as far as he could remember—and if he ever hoped for a repeat, it would be unwise for him to belittle her now.

And being the Slytherin that he is, he finds opportunity where others would walk away or just show pity. Sneaky Draco! ;)

Excellent start, my dear. I cannot wait to see what happens next!

~Lia

Author's Response: Laaaa. I'm not a potty mouth IRL. :x Hence my slight embarrassment with this chapter. Also, I'm trying not to bash Harry too much. He's still a good guy. He's just.... Okay. You'll see about that later. I'm glad you like it, though. ^___^ And thanks for the challenge! This was totally supposed to be a one-shot, but after Draco and Ginny woke up, they told me they wanted a full story. I was afraid of the mutiny, so I complied. I've already started planning the next chapter and Draco's wit gets away with him. So many innuendos. *dizzy* Thank you for the review!

A Question of Fairy Tales by Boogum    (Reviews - 14)

Add one fairy godmother, a randy prince, glass slippers, a conniving redhead, and a rather distressed Draco Malfoy. Mix it together and you've got one very twisted fairy tale.
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley
Compliant with: OotP and below
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 1133 | Read count: 3753 | Published: Oct 05, 2010 | Updated: Oct 05, 2010
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Date: Oct 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: A Question of Fairy Tales

Draco simply groaned and then picked up his skirts and fled from the ballroom, not even caring how undignified his retreat looked.

Lol! Brilliant, Kim. I was cackling at work. The rank and file think I've gone bonkers again. I can't believe I haven't reviewed this before on FFN.

Loved it!

Author's Response: It was hiding amongst the Through the Keyhole series. I forgot I even had it, but I realised it was over 1000 words, so I decided to upload it here. If it's not completely sad to say, I actually laughed myself when I read over it again. I don't know how I come up with these things sometimes.

Breathe In, Breathe Out, Move On by jessica k malfoy    (Reviews - 13)

Ginny blames her stubbornness for a choice that ends up costing everyone.

The nurse hurried away, and they sat quietly for a long time, holding hands as tears rolled down Ginny's face. Their relationship had been hanging by a thread already, and Ginny was certain that this was the beginning of the end.

**COMPLETE

Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Other Characters
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Angst, Drama
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 1951 | Read count: 3369 | Published: Oct 24, 2010 | Updated: Oct 24, 2010
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Date: Nov 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Breathe In, Breathe Out, Move On

Gah, this is so very sad and poignant. Originally, I was upset that Ginny was playing Quidditch, but she's a stubborn girl and I can't fault her one of her qualities that I also respect.

“I'm... I'm pregnant.”

Madam Pomfrey tucked her wand away slowly, straightened Ginny's bedsheets, wrote a few notes on her clipboard, and then finally picked up Ginny's hand, holding it tightly between hers. Her face was drawn and weary. “No love. Not anymore. I'm so sorry.”


This part was so gutting and yet so real. I really felt like I was in the moment with Ginny and Pomfrey.

The part with Ginny's burying her unnamed unborn child is really what did me in, though. And while the ending was sad, there was a small measure of hope shared in their mutual grief.

Well done, m'dear.

Author's Response: yes, ginny is super stubborn. in our rpg i've tried to keep her true to character.

thanks so much for reviewing. it was hard to write, really. i've put in a few good years with her character and this is the worst thing she's gone through. *sniffles*

Wizard, Sorcerer…or Skill Monkey? by Alyra Black    (Reviews - 16)

When Draco comes across a group of students playing a Muggle game whilst on prefect duty, what will he do?
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: Blaise Zabini (boy), Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Luna Lovegood, Other Characters
Compliant with: OotP and below
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: Dungeons and Draco
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 2544 | Read count: 2965 | Published: Nov 05, 2010 | Updated: Nov 05, 2010
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Date: Nov 06, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Wizard, Sorcerer…or Skill Monkey?

This is brilliant. Lol!

“Well, Draco, you see we’re playing a role playing game,” Blaise said slowly.

“All of you?” Draco looked incredulous. “Isn't that a little polygamous and public? And with -”


*cackles* Oh dear Lord! Lololol! I was highly entertained. Great characterisation, great plot - very original. My inner geek loved it! ^^

The Joke's On Us by idreamofdraco    (Reviews - 12)

Ginny fills in for a sick George delivering Weasleys' Wizarding Wheezes products, but becomes suspicious of one customer in particular...
Category: Completed Short Stories
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Other Characters
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 3618 | Read count: 3440 | Published: Dec 01, 2010 | Updated: Dec 01, 2010
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Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Dec 01, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Joke's On Us

Lol. This was adorable, Jessica.

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia! Glad you thought so. n_n

The Cottage by idreamofdraco    (Reviews - 33)

“Welcome to The Cottage,” Lucy said. “You are here to work out your issues in order to integrate back into society.”

On top of the tallest hill of an endless field of flowers, Draco receives a second chance and a taste of freedom.

Written for elle_blessing in the 2010 Draco/Ginny Fic Exchange on LiveJournal, and winner of Best Story Overall.

REVISED ENDING AS OF 2/20/2018.

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Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Other Characters
Compliant with: All but epilogue
Era: Post-Hogwarts
Genres: Drama
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 6 | Word count: 15094 | Read count: 18178 | Published: Dec 15, 2010 | Updated: May 20, 2011
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Date: Dec 16, 2010 Title: Chapter 1: Unnatural Selection

Don't you love how I say "I'll review this on the weekend when I have more time", yet here I am? *sheepish grin*

What I like about this prologue, is that we actually see Draco being punished for his crimes. In canon (or at least what we suspect of canon) is that Draco was never punished - thanks to Harry. It's nice to know that Draco would be punished. It allows for a softer side of Draco to be revealed - and to be considered plausible.

It's also interesting how you work in the atmosphere of the new Azkaban, juxtaposing Draco's 'new' demeanour, mood. He is a man who has almost lost hope, who has made himself deaf not just to the world that surrounds and threatens to engulf him but to his own guilty conscience. Even now, after seven years have passed, he still seems to be in denial, having Fate shoulder the blame. That is not to say that Fate has no blame, but it is interesting to see how he psychologically represses things.

Yet there is hope. And you show that glimmer of hope through your analogy of a caged bird. It's quite lovely imagery - both uplifting and depressing. And the reader is left wondering where Draco will fly off to. Will he be able to fly, or will he be caught in the storm of inevitability?

Good job, as usual, Jessica. ^_^

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia. n_n I like how you can catch all that. In the beginning, I think I was just writing to be writing (I had such a hard time with this story because of RL things upsetting me, so nothing would come out), but I did want to do something different. I always TRY to do that, anyway. I like to think that Draco would have gotten off without punishment if Harry would have spoken for him, but I wanted to change that for this story. We also normally see Draco as a kind of fighting spirit, in some ways. But I think Half-Blood Prince showed us that he isn't that strong on the inside, though he tries to act like he is. I wanted that to come back out after the war. What else could he do? He messed up, whether he admits it or not. His life is the way it is now because of his decisions, so why should he make decisions anymore? Maybe he'd be better off if someone else made his decisions for him. I really like the imagery of the bird too. In a cage. Like his rib cage. X)

Anyway, thanks a lot for the review. You're very eloquent, aren't you? I think you put into words what I was going for much better than I could have. n_n

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Dec 22, 2010 Title: Chapter 2: The Smallprint

I really do like the premise for this, the idea of a rehabilitation cottage...with evil flowers. Speaking of evil...okay, not evil but crotchety, I do like Mr White. I think, however, that I like Lucy more - just 'cause she is somehow sweet while ordering everyone around. She's the one you need to be worried about - the one with the real power.

As for Draco, I like him here. He's vulnerable, confused, yet so very Draco. The part with the teddy bear was adorable. I can just picture Draco clutching it. Hehe.

As for Ginny, she is different here. We're used to her either being the shy, tormented, stubborn redhead from the older fics or the confident, snarky chick from HBP and up. Here, she seems angry and frustrated and distant. Honestly, she seems like someone who has suffered, so - for me - her personality seems fitting. Besides, how else would she act around Draco? (And Draco does get in a few burns - no matter that those burns were made via internal dialogue).

Overall, a nice chapter to pique the reader's interest. We are left curious, wondering about Draco, Ginny, Jimmy, and The Cottage. What will happen next?

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia. n_n I agree that Lucy is a force to be reckoned with, and Mr. White is pretty harmless. Lucy is one of those people who is so nice, you can't tell when she's being threatening, or you would do what she says just because she is so nice.

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Jan 09, 2011 Title: Chapter 3: Sunburn

I love your descriptions in this chapter. I really feel him sweating, being uncomfortable and irate.

Yikes, is Ginny being quite the snarky little - I won't say bint, but I do mean bint. She has her reasons for not liking Draco, but that's some repressed rage going on up in her noggin of hers. Her taking care of Draco while seeming to be Lucy's idea, does hint at a soft edge...kinda soft. Lol.

I like how you're slowly building up the tension between Draco and Ginny - and how Draco notices her, thinks about her touch, is jealous of the delivery man, etc. Subtle hints at things to come. And I especially like that it's one-sided right now. Too often it is Ginny liking Draco, and Draco acting aloof. It's nice to see a reversal - or, in this case, having Ginny hate Draco. Lol.

Author's Response: I think Ginny felt a little guilty about Draco's condition. It certainly wasn't her idea to take care of him, but a small part of her felt responsible, and she thinks so highly of Lucy that she would do whatever she told Ginny to do anyway. Of course, she ends up unknowingly torturing poor Draco. ;D Thanks for the review, Lia. n_n

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: Mar 01, 2011 Title: Chapter 4: Escape

I don't think I'm the only one who wants to slap Ginny upside the head. I know there's a reason for her anger - or at least there will be - but right now she just comes off as an emotional twit. But, the good side to this is that you make me really sympathise as well as empathise with Draco. He's going through quite the emotional and spiritual journey, and you have to respect him for his maturity - and you still make it believable.

The conversation between Jimmy and Draco was touching. It's rare to like an OC after so short of time, but you managed that with Jimmy. I just want to hug that bundle of nerves.

Psst, just one thing. You're missing the period for the second last sentence of the chapter. Other than that, this was a great chapter, m'dear.

Author's Response: Waaaaaah. I responded to this, but it didn't send. :( Let's see if I can remember what I said.

Oh, yeah. You're definitely supposed to sympathize with Draco in this story, but I also feel that Ginny deserves some pity. She doesn't seem to make any sense. And can you imagine how Draco is feeling throughout this ordeal? He has no idea what the fudge is wrong with her, and he receives the whole of her hostility. But! You can pity her properly next chapter. :) Or not at all, if you don't want to.

Thanks for pointing out the period! I fixed it.

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: May 25, 2011 Title: Chapter 5: Undisclosed Desires

Everything really starts to come together when you reveal that Ginny is a patient, too. Now her vitriolic remarks and behaviour toward Draco seem reasonable - including the unexpected kiss (so cute, Draco's reaction).

The little meeting with Harry at the end was perfect. I love the fact that you don't villainise him. I'm so sick of that in D/G stories. And Draco returns home and is greeted by his mum! So sweet. A nice little open ended ending. ;)

Author's Response: Thanks, Lia! XD It wouldn't have felt right to make Harry a villain since this story is about forgiveness, and the real villain is his past and inability to forgive himself. Harry's a good guy. Draco's just going to have to get over that. XD

Reviewer: Incognito Signed
Date: May 25, 2011 Title: Chapter 6: Falling Away With You

Sorry if these reviews are short. I'm typing them on my mobile.

The epilogue here is just great. It's so cute and wonderful and leaves the story open to continue with a sequel. Hint, hint. ;) And Draco's suggestion and kiss at the end? A PERFECT way to end it.

Wonderful job, love. I thoroughly enjoyed this story, as you already know. n_n

Author's Response: Thanks again! I did get a lot of comments in the exchange mentioning a sequel. I don't know if I could write one, but I do have a couple really short drabbles that take place in this universe that I'd like to post later. I'm so glad you enjoyed the story! n_n