In which Ginny discovers a snarky toad, curses are broken, and a happily ever after is eventually found. Almost.Category: Completed Short Stories
Er, I forgot to send the acceptance letter before I validated, so here's a review!
This was really cute. n_n I like how riled up Ginny gets and the fact that even when he's a toad, Draco is cool and dismissive. I mean, you'd think he'd try to be nice to the girl he's hoping to break his spell, but nooo. That's his confidence, I guess. He knows things will go his way no matter how he acts. And he probably has the idea that he was the best looking toad there was, so of course Ginny would kiss him. XD Really cute!
Author's Response: Lol, no worries. Reviews are much more exciting than acceptance letters, anyway. ^_~
Anyway, I'm glad you liked this. It was just meant to be cute and fun, so I'm happy that came across. And I'm quite certain Draco did think himself the best looking toad around, ahah.
"The opposite of love is not hate, it's indifference." ~Elie WieselCategory: Long and Completed
And in all of their incarnations, the one thing Draco and Ginny can never be is indifferent.
(A compilation of one-shots.)
"She's fallen under the strongest magic there is; she's fallen in love."
Super sweet! This actually got me wanting to write something about Draco because I wonder how he became so sweet. ;_; I mean, I can see him being capable of it, once he stops thinking about what everyone else thinks about him. The third to last paragraph was really beautiful and struck a chord with me. I would love to see how they arrived at this point in a prequel!
Author's Response: Haha, yeah - he definitely is sweet here, possibly too much so, but at the same time like you said, with the back story I had in mind, I could see how he and Ginny got to this point. I have two chapters of a prequel to this written that will hopefully someday see the light of day. Thanks for the review!
Working for the Department of Mysteries teaches Draco Malfoy many things: Play the man. Everyone lies. Collateral damage is inevitable. But when he's the man being played and Ginny Weasley becomes collateral damage - well, you know what they say. All's fair in love, war, and hard and dirty politics.Category: Works in Progress
I haven't been so intrigued by a story in a very long time. (And when I say very, I *mean* very.) I love Draco's characterization in this. In a way, it reminds me of fandom Snape in Snape/Hermione stories. Just kind of rich and dark and sarcastic and sneering. If the comparison is strange, I hope you'll at least take it as a compliment. :) I can't wait to see how this story goes.
Author's Response: Though context and meaning doesn't travel very well over the interwebs, I know you meant it as a compliment. Can't say I've ever read that pairing nor that characterisation but it sounds complex - which is what I wanted for Draco. Multiplous, never fixed. Thank you thank you thank you for reading and loving and reviewing and I really hope the upcoming chapters measure up to your expectations ><
Ginevra Weasley has woken up in an alternate reality, but no one else seems to have noticed - not even her fiance. Now she has to travel to the past to get her future back.Category: Works in Progress
This gorgeous artwork was created by Hannah Askance.
Another great chapter. I just love how you don't try too hard with the characters. There's a sexiness in Draco that doesn't feel overdone, even though the bed situation is one you could see in any story. I don't know if that's coming across right. It didn't feel like a cliche, because you didn't go too far. You put D and G in an uncomfortable situation in order to get them to SEE each other, but you didn't go too far with that or make them see too much too soon. If that makes sense? And I love the mystery that's just building with every chapter. Narcissa is such an intriguing chapter for knowing about both universes, and her confusion over Harry/remembrance of the prophesy is intriguing as well. You're such a tease in this chapter!
Author's Response: I get what you mean, and I'm glad you didn't think it was too OTT. Ginevra's in a difficult position because she's hugely in denial - and it's the worst kind, because she knows she's attracted to Draco, since they've technically been in a relationship for so long - so that was a tough one to write from her POV. And of course Draco isn't afraid of using his wiles to get the advantage, lol.
And of course Draco and Ginevra are technically strangers, so I felt like I couldn't push this scene too far... at least until they'd had a little more time getting to know and understand each other. ;)
I haven't written too much Narcissa or Lucius (or any) so I hope I'm not butchering them, particularly in the next chapter. And chapter eight should hopefully give you some more clues and what Narcissa is remembering here. :P Thanks again for reviewing, I think you give the best feedback so far lol.
To defeat... the Huns!
I like how Ginny and Narcissa's timeline is the "correct" timeline. I think normally we would consider canon to be the right, original timeline, but here it's the wrong one. XD
“There is old magic here. Ancient magic, that I suspect may leave a mark on any who wears it.”
So the reason Narcissa is affected by time being rewritten is because the ring used to belong to her? So, unlike Ginevra, who only knows her own timeline and is protected by the ring, Narcissa knows about both of them?
“I see that you’re eager to return to your other family,” Draco’s father remarked coolly, and Draco was overcome by an overwhelming sense of sadness.
Yes, Ginevra is a stranger to Draco and Lucius, but I'm glad you brought this up as well, because suddenly Narcissa is no longer the exact same person she was to them a day before. (Or has Narcissa been aware of the dual timelines longer than Ginevra's been in the new one?) It's interesting because Narcissa's lives in both timelines are similar, even if the public's opinions of the Malfoys are different. So, for Draco and Lucius, it's not as obvious that Narcissa has suddenly lived two lives as it is that Ginny is a completely different person.
“You are the same, in this world and the next, and so is my love for you both – just as a wife and mother’s love should be.”
Is this why they haven't been been affected? I still don't really get why Narcissa has these new memories and no one else does. I mean, I get that Ginny is protected by the ring, but why did her timeline collapse and why are she and Narcissa the only ones affected? OR ARE THEY?
OH MAN stuff gets serious with the Unbreakable Vow! I feel like that's going to come back in a big way later on. Obviously they can't go back to the original timeline, not just because the timelines have merged and I'm guessing there's no going back, but also because Ginny is going to fall in love with this Draco, who is actually going to be in love with her too, unlike the Draco from her timeline.
This review was full of questions and a bit incoherent. You've introduced what I'm guessing is the confusing part of the story and I'm just trying to work it out and make sure I'm reading it right. I really appreciate Ginny's strength here too. I think that's definitely her character, and not just her Malfoy upbringing. You're doing a great job of digging into the complexities behind this situation. What the characters think about the alternate universes, and how they feel about the people affected by the timeline merge is probably even more important than the physical plot elements of the merge.
As always, loved the chapter and can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: YOU GOT THE REFERENCE! *loves*
Yes, exactly. Ginevra gets the full brunt of the magic in the ring, since she's wearing it, but Narcissa gets more of a residual effect because she wore it for so long.
This is one of the reasons this chapter took so long, editing delay aside, because I had to at least address some of these less-plot-centric things. Narcissa's timelines converge, but she's only "aware" from the time Ginevra wakes up in the alternate reality - the significance of this time should be explained later on, if I tell the story right.
Good questions! I've kind of answered the first few, but I won't answer the last. u_u
Yeah, this chapter is SRS BSNS! Obviously I'm not going to give you spoilers about the story, but I will say that her opinion of Alt Draco's feelings for her is kind of biased and based on assumption. I'll explain a little more about society in the next chapter that hopefully puts her description into a better context, but he did have feelings for her... She's really just having a pity party and feeling sorry for herself (and you know, fair enough. It's pretty shit all around at this stage).
But yes, very confusing stuff lol. I had fun dissecting Ginny's core traits and incorporating them into Ginevra's character... the point I'm trying to make is kind of a nature vs. nurture kind of thing, I suppose. Ginny will always have certain characteristics no matter how she's raised, but obviously how she was raised is going to affect how those characteristics manifest, etc. etc.
Glad you enjoyed, thanks for reviewing so thoroughly! ;) Haz
I really like what you've done with this Draco. It's funny how Ginny is kind of the typical Draco character in this story, and even though Draco isn't characterized as a typical Ginny - he very much is himself - he seems tamer and less obnoxious because Ginny is filling that role. Not that she's obnoxious as a character - I think she's wonderful proof of what growing up in Malfoy Manor does to a person - but she's definitely obnoxious as a person. What you've done with the possibilities for these characters is way more awesome than I can express. You're not only showing what growing up as a Malfoy does to someone's personality and world view - or proving it, because we have canon Draco to show it, and YOU writing Ginny the same way only supports that idea - but you're also showing how the war changed Draco. He's not the same Draco that Ginny knows from her universe and the reason is because of the war and how Draco had to adapt to his lot in life afterwards. IT'S SO GOOD. I can already see how complicated the plot is going to get, and that is only enhanced by how well you've portrayed the characters. I can't wait to see them grow more as people. I can't believe I've read so little of your writing. Yours is a talent I've truly missed out on these past few years.
And last comment: It's funny how Draco had this nice inner dialogue about trying to get Ginny out of prison/hospital without tying himself to the crime, and yet he goes and kicks in a door and announces his presence. Yeah, no one has to know he was the one who did it... except for the Healer he knocked out when he got inside. Good going, Draco. You deserve to sit in a secret chamber inside Malfoy Manor and hide.
Author's Response: I know, I think this Draco is my favourite (and actually I think this Ginevra is my favourite too, in some ways) that I've written. The thing to remember about my Draco here is that he has a strong sense of familial loyalty, and he's willing to work hard for his family's success - so I suppose he's a tiny bit of a Puffle in that sense - but at the same time he's quite ruthless and willing to throw anyone who gets in his way under the Knight Bus. u_u I don't think any of my fics, especially my older ones, are as good as this one so far so I'll excuse you for not reading much of my stuff. ;)
Haha, thanks for the last comment - Hannah and I didn't pick this up (clearly we aren't cut out to be Aurors) so I'll have to fix that up when (if) I revise the story after I finish it.
Thanks for reviewing! Haz
I'm validating your next three chapters and figured I'd go ahead and read the first two before doing that. :) You've crafted a really intriguing story here. You don't give away too much information too soon, which makes the mystery all that more interesting. I'm really curious about this alternate reality Ginny arrived from. Is she merely jumping from one universe to another (and if so, how/why?) or is she time traveling? Or will she time travel in this universe? I think the best stories are the ones that make us constantly ask questions, and you're doing a great job of that. :)
Author's Response: Haha, you are an asset to this site. ;) I'm really glad you enjoyed what I've got so far, hopefully I don't drop the ball later (pressure's on!). There's a note in my FFN profile and in the Story Notes here sort-of explaining the alternate reality, since I've had a few questions on it, so feel free to check it out. Thanks for reviewing! Haz :)
It looked like we were photographed at gun point so I had to laugh.Category: Works in Progress
:C This is the face I'm making now. And I'm not sure if these tears are emotion or irritation from staring at a bright screen in the dark, but either way you're the cause of them! I wish I could explain how good your writing is, but all I can do is feel it. I am so with Draco and Ginny in their rollercoaster of emotions, all the anger and pining.
As you intended, I'm sure, I am now dying of curiosity over the mystery of Hermione. And I love that Molly and Draco get along (and Ginny and Lucius too! I almost forgot!). Not only is that a twist from the normal feuding families cliche, it feels so real. That Molly wants Draco and Ginny to get back together just as much as we do is wonderful! And her line at the end of that section about how she's not supposed to get attached? Ugh. Could you rip my heart out any more than you already have? I love that Henry is a cat and not a child, too! I was a little worried about Draco's abandonment of him last chapter. Oh man, there were so many things I wanted to say and love and point out, but I've forgotten the rest. I can only repeat what I said last chapter about your beautiful writing, mature plot, and real characters.
Oh yeah, I feel so bad for Astoria. She's going to get really hurt in this story, and I hate to see innocents hurt (which is one reason why I'm not a fan of typical love triangles).
And lastly, your reply to my previous review made my day as well. :)
This isn't a premise I usually enjoy because I like to think of Draco and Ginny as happy together, but in this one chapter you've shown me that just because their marriage didn't work out, that doesn't necessarily change the essence of the characters. The dislike, insults, and wit are all still there; they're just wrapped up in an underlying pain that makes me hurt on their behalf. I think it definitely takes a mature person to tackle this scenario, and on top of that, you have a mature, beautiful style of writing that I can't help but envy.
This is the first line where I noticed it:
"He allowed her to drag him over for a dance and placed his hands where they ought to be quite mechanically, although not without his characteristic and effortless sort of grace."
I don't know how to describe it except with the word "expressive." You choose the perfect words (out of hundreds, thousands from which to choose!) to convey the right feeling or mood, and you seem to do it effortlessly. It doesn't come off as too much, AND you effectively paint a real picture in readers' minds. I'm in awe of the real characters you've portrayed here, and of how excellently you've crafted this story so far.
Author's Response: Jessica, in all honesty your review made me a bit teary eyed. This is such high praise, and more so coming from you, a writer whom I admire tremendously. Thank you! You totally made my night. :D
Ginny tries to help Draco cope with what has happened, but even her calming voice isn't enough to keep him from breaking.Category: Completed Fiction, Completed Short Stories
Such a sad story. :( I wish that the Weasleys had trusted Draco before Ginny dies, but I like that Draco's grief changed their minds about him. Or Arthur's mind, anyway. And the fact that he imagines Ginny before the funeral is so bittersweet and says a lot about his love for her. Or if she's been a real ghost, that says a lot about her love for him, that she wouldn't move on to an afterlife. Anyway, in such a short story and with few words saying so, you did a great job of showing the depth of love they had for each other.
Author's Response: Thank you so so much. This has been an idea in my head for sooo long. I've been wanting to write something where one of them is dead and you don't know it until later. I'm glad to finally be able to portray this. I think the vision of Ginny before the funeral shows Draco's love of her, and the portrait that stares at him during the funeral is her love of him.
The summer was built on the smells of her past, of distant memories long since forgotten, of her home that she could no longer remember. A not-quite-Muggle!AU.Category: Works in Progress
I like the idea, Pam. It reminds me of Three Thousand Days of Innocence, except both Draco and Ginny have forgotten who they are, and of course they remember more than Draco did in Three Thousand Days. I'd be interested in reading more, finding out what happened to them and where they go from here.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Jess! I know the memory loss plots have been done before, but I am going to try to put distance between mine and the others as the story progresses!
Fred and George!! Oh man, this was a HORRIBLE place to leave this chapter. How could you? I want to know what happens next!! As frustrating as the dynamic between Gwen and Drew is, it feels perfect to me, like a real couple. My parents, too, can be really snippy towards each other, especially on road trips, when everything is irritating and you're stuck in a car together for hours. And you're doing such a great job of developing the mystery and keeping people interested to find out what happens in the next chapter!
Author's Response: Sorry! haha. I am going to post the next chapter today! And I'm so glad you feel like their relationship is believable and that you're interested in reading more. :)
Whaaaat. Okay, I wonder if they're hiding from Death Eaters. Maybe DEs seeking retibution after the war? Maybe a rewrite of the war where Voldemort won? Why does Luna seem to know more? Does she have her memories back? So intriguing!
And Draco is a dick, but his reasons make sense and make the whole characterization in character. Can't wait to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks, Jess! I don't want to answer any of your questions and give away important plot details, but I will say that there is a reason why Luna knows things that D and G don't. And I'm glad you think Draco is still in character. It is actually very difficult to write a character as another character while still keeping him in character... if that makes any sense at all. ;)
Oooooh! Another child?? You're creating more questions than answers, Pam!
One of the things I love about this story is that Draco doesn't want to know anything about his former life, but he's the one who is remembering things. And his selfishness about the information he has is so in character. He wants to keep Ginny for himself, and even though he knows Harry is dead (unless he's not?? But Draco doesn't know that anyway), he still feels threatened by him, because Ginny loved him so much. He just wants to keep his family together, and it's probably wrong of him to keep his new-old memories from Ginny, since she wants to know about her former life so badly, but he's doing it because he's selfish and afraid, and that's such a Draco trait, I think.
In this chapter particularly, I really like the part where Draco muses over his and Ginny's differences and how they complement each other, Draco's rational nature vs. Ginny's irrational nature.
Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: I know I am creating more questions! Haha. But I promise some answers will be given very soon. Maybe not necessarily the answers to the biggest ones, but we'll definitely learn a little more about what has happened to the characters since they came to America in the next chapter, and there will also be a tiny glimpse into what really happened in England at the end of the war.
AND I FORGOT TO SAY, I enjoyed reading a little more about how Drew and Gwen came to be together. Their marriage from the beginning has sounded kind of... sad and more practical than loving, and their history together would explain why. Even if Drew is scared of the things he doesn't know, scared to lose Gwen to a past that they don't remember, he has to see after this chapter that all these events are making them a closer, stronger couple. Or they will be. He might see it as him losing her, but he also has to realize that the woman he married was not who she really was, at least not completely. You've just got so many interesting things going on in this story. :D
Author's Response: I am so glad you're enjoying that aspect because I am going to go more in depth with how they met and got together as the story continues. As I said from the beginning, this wasn't necessarily a conventional marriage, but they do fall in love rather quickly. More than anything, there was an attraction between them and then Jeremy happened ;). But I will say this - their marriage, their meeting in the USA was not coincidental!
Another great chapter! I think you're doing a good job not only building the mystery, but dropping in hints that are leading towards more answers. You're approach is interesting because while it seems like the problem/conflict of the story is Draco and Ginny's memory loss, the ACTUAL conflict, I think, is whatever they are running from, whatever happened after the war. You're just using their memory loss to bring them together and explore their characters in a new way.
As I mentioned in one of my previous reviews, you're doing an awesome job of keeping Draco and Ginny in character, even though you would think D and G living a muggle life (on a farm!) might make them out of character, especially Draco. Instead, you've just highlighted their characters in any situation, so that when they do get their memories back and face whatever it is they are running from, it won't be Drew and Gwen suddenly turning into Draco and Ginny. It will be the exact same characters with complete knowledge of two different lives. And that will be really interesting to read about, too, because they have a decade together as "muggles" that they and all of their friends and family will have to reconcile with their wizarding lives.
On that same idea, it bothered me a bit in previous chapters the way Drew controlled Gwen, shut her down when she did or said something he didn't like, and whatnot. I never said anything because I figured it was intentional and I hoped it would be addressed later, because Ginny never would have let Draco get away with it, but Gwen would. So I am so happy to see that addressed in this chapter, with Gwen taking back her control and confronting the fact that he thinks so much more of himself than her (still a very Draco trait! I think even if they hadn't lost their memories, if they were married, Draco and Ginny would butt heads concerning Draco's superscillious attitude.).
The last line of the chapter is almost chilling, because when Gwen takes back her control, she becomes Ginny again. Maybe it's unlikely, but I wonder, does Draco remember everything now? Has her actions triggered more of his memory? The last line almost seems to suggest that he has enough memory back to remember who she is and regret that she doesn't remember who he is. Just a few paragraphs ago he was completely content being Drew, and now it seems like he knows he's Draco and wishes she knew, too. I guess I'll see next chapter!
Anyway, you're doing a fabulous job, as always! I can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Yay for super long and detailed reviews!
Oooh. I wonder who else Ginny and/or Draco is going to run into! Maybe this is a curse affecting everyone involved in the war? Or the good side? Interested to see where this goes!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Jess! I can't really answer your question, but I promise that if you keep reading you will definitely find out who was affected by whatever has affected Draco and Ginny. :)
DRACO RETURNS! YES. What an interesting way for him to regain his memories. It's literally like he's lived two different lives, Draco and Drew, and instead of regaining all of his memories as Draco on top of his Drew memories, he actually just "woke up." Definitely wasn't a turn I thought this was going to take, which is awesome. KEEPIN' ME ON MY TOES. His confusion and disgust is so perfect and so Draco. I've said this before, probably more than once, but your characters are so on point. Like, there is a clear difference between Drew and Draco, which is a lot easier to see now because Draco has been Drew since the beginning of the story. But he never feels out of character, even with this identity crises. And I can't imagine how weird it must be for Draco to suddenly be ten years older than he remembers being, having sex with Ginny Weasley against the wall of a Waffle House in the United States. Like, I'm surprised he didn't instantly go insane. But his first reaction to run away seems appropriate, given the situation.
(I feel like I'm rambling... sorry. :P)
Anyway, I REALLY enjoyed this chapter. I want to know where Draco and the twins went! Why do Fred and George (and Luna?) seem to know what's going on, but Draco and Ginny don't? Or did they just "wake up" first and they don't have any idea either? And most importantly, did Fred and George's noses bleed because of ~magic~ or were they popping Nosebleed Nougats??
Can't WAIT until the next update! (And I hope Gwen punches Draco for ditching her like that.)
I was so excited to see an update today! But you're killing me, Smalls!
So here is my prediction: that baby that Ginny was pregnant with when Harry died? Draco's. That's why she's avoiding Harry, because she slept with Draco. I don't know what Draco's plan is (for her to miss him so much while he's away that she remembers everything? For her to recall her memories in dreams?), but woooow that was really awful of him. Like, it's one thing to abandon Gwen (especially without any money), but he left his two children, too, and when they're all back together again, they're not going to fully understand why he left. They're just going to remember that he was gone, that their mother cried about it often, that they were struggling and he wasn't there to help them. So he may be trying to help her get her memories back, but it was a low blow. Maybe he's going to come back, and she'll be so angry (like in her dream!) that she'll blow up at him and remember everything??
Love, love, love Fred and George. ;_; Their finding each other triggering their memories makes me want to cry forever. But then I want to cry even harder when I think about how they spent eight years apart. Their memory-dreams must have been super confusing out of context. XD
"I have a theory," Draco announced. "Can the two of you skive off?"
The twins grinned simultaneously. "Can we ever," they proclaimed unanimously.
!!!! SO GREAT. I knew they were using their Skiving Snackboxes!
It seems like this story is really rolling now, which makes waits for updates almost unbearable. But I can be patient. Can't wait to see how Ginny gets her memories back! And what she does to Draco when he returns....
Author's Response: I have been seriously slacking on responding to reviews lately, but I just had to comment on yours because you made me laugh. :P I am not going to confirm or deny your prediction because then that would ruin the mystery, but I will say that I /love/ that you didn't forget about Ginny's other baby... because you shouldn't! But your theory is very interesting, and I love that my story is making you think. That is the whole point of a mystery after all, right?
YAAY! Reunion! What was Draco doing?? I'm going to guess he was trying to get money somehow (maybe Fred and George were helping him? Because they couldn't leave their sister destitute, not while she is still unaware of who she is), or trying to get them real lodging of some sort? (But that seems unlikely if they are in danger. Maybe they need to keep moving.) The way Draco said "Everything I did, I did to help you" makes me think he was trying to help her get her memory back, but I can't see how he could do that. Unless he was looking for her missing child?? If the child is still alive, that is. If Fred and George could get their memories back after finding each other, then I can imagine Ginny getting hers back after seeing her oldest son/daughter.
I wonder if Draco will be upfront with Gwen about where he was. She's relieved now, but I feel like that anger is going to simmer there for a while, at least until she can understand what happened.
Can't wait for the next part!
AHHHHHHH!! I was so excited to see you'd uploaded a new chapter!
I really hope Ginny (and the readers!) get more answers soon! It looks like she can't take much more. ;o;
As I've said multiple times while reading this story, you've done such a great job differentiating between Drew, Draco, Gwen, and Ginny, and the paragraph where Draco observes how Gwen and Ginny are two different people is definitely testament to that. Ginny comes off a little crazy sometimes, but that's completely understandable, not just because she's under a lot of stress because of her lost memories, but also because two people, two personalities, are fighting for dominance in her body. The person she used to be, and the frightening memories that come to her in her dreams, and the person she thought she was for ten years, including the life and family she built during that time. And now she knows she's got a child from her past that she doesn't really remember, and a new child not even born yet! How confusing for her (and her current children!).
Also, dang that Prewett fertility!
I can't wait for more!
Ooooooh! I knew the baby (child now) would be the key to Ginny's memories! But it looks like I was completely wrong about the idea that the child is Draco's. I'm guessing he's the true child of Harry's prophecy? Or perhaps he has to take over Harry's role now that he's dead? I feel so bad for Draco. D: I wonder what he'll tell Ginny, or if he'll allow her to leave with his kids until she and her other child are ready to learn the truth.
And I agree with what Fred and George said in the previous chapter, I like this Draco better than before-memory-loss Draco AND more than Drew. He's a nice mix of both, I think. And I like how Ginny is becoming more and more Ginny-like, less and less Gwen-like, because of the circumstances she finds herself in. If she didn't fight back and stand up for herself, she and her children would be lost. It's very Ginny of her to demand answers and take action. It actually reminds me a lot of Ginny's canon growth, from a timid, shy child (at least around Harry) who went through this traumatic event, to a woman who rises above that event to become stronger and more self-assured. Gwen was also the timid sort of wallflower who couldn't bring herself to stand up to her own husband, but now this strange thing is happening that she doesn't understand, and if she can't get some control of her family life, then what CAN she control? I love how the more I read, the more I see into these characterizations and how they work. You've done such a great job with them!
Love the update! Can't wait for more!
Author's Response: Yes, yes - the baby is so very important, but that is all I can say! And YES again to you understanding the Gwen-To-Ginny transformation and understanding Draco's growth into a decent human being. :)
//“Drew never knew how to dance like this,” she commented. “It’s nice.”
“So maybe there are some benefits to having Draco Malfoy around?” he quipped.
“Eh,” she answered, feigning nonchalance. “I don’t know that I’d go that far…”//
Loooved this interaction. Ginny is now treating Draco and Drew like two different people, and she's already grown so accustomed to the idea that she can joke with Draco about it! Meanwhile, she's being called Ginny, and she knows she's Ginny, but until she gets all her memories back, she's still partly Gwen, too.
But Draco forgets that Ginny is still mostly Gwen, which is why he slips when she asks if he remembers how they met, which is another thing I love about this chapter!
//Out of the corner of his eye, he could see his children looking on at him. His son had the smallest smile on the corner of his lips, and his daughter’s eyes were wide with wonder. It occurred to Draco then that this was probably the first sign of affection towards their mother that they had witnessed since he had come back to them.//
I actually interpreted the smile and the look of wonder as referring to Draco showing Ginny some affection at all. Maybe I'm remembering incorrectly, but I assumed that Gwen and Drew weren't overly affectionate with one another, partly because they were pragmatic people, and Drew especially seemed to be a hard person, but also because of Drew's affair tainting their relationship. So when I read this part, I saw it as the kids seeing their father doing something chivalrous/polite/respectful for their mother, which maybe they hadn't seen much of before. It's still sad that such a small thing could capture them so much, especially because just a little while ago, they were wary around Draco and a little cold to him because of his abandonment. But it was good for them, too, because they could see that Draco really does care for Ginny, and if he cares for her, then maybe he cares for the kids, too. Maybe that's what they've been worried about this whole time, that Draco doesn't really love any of them anymore. Otherwise, why would he hurt all of them and abandon them?
I don't really know where I was going with that, but I appreciated the small gesture (Draco's opening the door for Ginny AND the children's awe over that) in this chapter. It's tiny things like that that may be easy to read over that really flesh out this story. And you utilize those small details so fabulously!
Another great chapter. Can't wait for the next one!
Yay!! A new chapter!!
Hmmmmm, Lucius's actions make me doubt Draco's assertion that everything is going to be okay. Standing in the road all ominous-like, ripping a door off the car, grabbing Draco by the collar of his shirt and yanking him out of the car with a choking grip... what in this situation is reassuring to Draco?? Either he was just saying that to calm Ginny down, or he knows something about Lucius that we don't. Can't wait to see what Lucius has to say!
Author's Response: Well, to be fair, he said it would be all right BEFORE his father ripped off the door, but yes, mostly he said it to be reassuring. That being said, there is something that Draco knows. :)
Pam!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I see chapter 16 sitting in the submission queue awaiting approval and I am so excited!! If someone else doesn't get to it first, I'll go through the submissions tomorrow! Can't wait to read!!!!!!!!!!!! (Is that enough exclamation points for you, or nah...? 6_6)
Author's Response: Yess! I am so glad to see you are still active. I am planning to catch up on TDC very soon!!