The summer was built on the smells of her past, of distant memories long since forgotten, of her home that she could no longer remember. A not-quite-Muggle!AU.Category: Works in Progress
Pam!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I see chapter 16 sitting in the submission queue awaiting approval and I am so excited!! If someone else doesn't get to it first, I'll go through the submissions tomorrow! Can't wait to read!!!!!!!!!!!! (Is that enough exclamation points for you, or nah...? 6_6)
Author's Response: Yess! I am so glad to see you are still active. I am planning to catch up on TDC very soon!!
Ginny Weasley wants nothing more than to focus on her Quidditch career and have a fun time doing it - but between the Ministry of Magic's plans to implement new marriage regulations, slanderous news articles by Rita Skeeter and a pair of irritating Slytherins, she just can't catch a break.Category: Works in Progress
A feminist take on the Marriage Law trope, with DG for good measure.
**Previously titled Of Marriage Laws and Liberal Feminism**
This AMAZING banner was created by my friend idreamofdraco. :)
So my absolute favorite thing about this chapter is Draco's reaction to standing up for Ginny. How he gets all cold and aloof (and yet still admits that Ginny has an effect on him, so not *really* cold or aloof). You can really see him conflicting with his blossoming feelings, and you don't even need to explain that conflict. It's so obvious without paragraphs of him agonizing over it or Ginny coming to the realization that that's what he's agonizing over. And he doesn't take out his frustration/confusion concerning his feelings on Ginny - no, instead, he admits to her, given the time to gather his thoughts and formulate his words - that she is the reason he is so unsettled. And I just love that.
And as you have probably guessed, Draco's line to Selwyn about the Weasleys (and his insistence that Selwyn use the proper title!!) is my favorite quip/one-liner in the whole chapter, only tied with Draco and Ginny's conversation on the dance floor for favorite piece of dialogue.
You can really see that Draco's lessons have paid off, too. So proud of my girl, G!! :')
I really, really enjoyed this chapter. Looking forward to the next!
Author's Response: Thank you! It's super difficult to develop other characters when you're writing first person, as you know, so I'm glad I managed to pull it off lol.
Draco's comment to Selwyn is also my favourite - who knew he had a sassy steak to rival Ginny, hah!
Thanks so much for reviewing (and betaing and everything else because you are amazing)
When Ginny and Draco are talking to Arthur and Molly before everyone else shows up, and Ginny says that pretending to date Draco is the fastest way to get the press to stop discrediting everything she says, I suddenly got this image of what their situation could possibly look like to her parents. Like... how sly would it be of Draco to say, "Hey, if you want this favorable outcome, the only solution available to you is to date me." I mean, of course he doesn't say that exactly, but just imagine if his ONLY motivation was to get Ginny to date him, and he kinda tricks her into it. XD So I'm imagining Molly and Arthur listening to Ginny explain why they're putting on this charade, but behind Ginny's back, they're looking into the camera, The Office-style, because they suspect there's more going on. Ahahaha.
Anyway... I was giggling throughout this chapter, especially when more Weasleys rolled into the Burrow. Hermione and Draco's exchange in front of Ron, Percy's "She is not!" interjection when George says Ginny is the smartest of the lot, George insinuating that Ginny was hot for Draco back at Hogwarts, Draco and Ginny's "you're so bad" "no, you are" quips and Ron's reaction to them.... Soooo many great lines and interactions in this chapter. Even now, scanning through the chapter and writing this review, I'm trying not to smile my mouth off at work because I know I look like a loon grinning at my computer.
Fabulous job with this chapter. :D
Author's Response: That is the best visual, hahaha. I now want to write a spin off where Arthur and Molly just deal with their children getting themselves into ludicrous situations, and they're just looking at the camera like 'did we seriously bring this blight upon the earth?'
I'm so glad you enjoyed - as you know, your opinion means alot! :3 Thanks for reviewing (and betaing!)!
Poor Ginny! Why is everyone pushing Draco Malfoy at her?? Why can't they see that she wants to hate him from afar! And that, you know, he was awful several years ago, when he was a kid living in a very strained sort of environment.
One thing that I love about Ginny in this so far, is that she is one of the rational people campaigning against this marriage law, and yet she's seen as (and sometimes even acts) really irrational! Like, I think it's her hot head making her rush in to grab the bull by the horns without thinking about where the horns are or how they'll stab her in the process. Unfortunately, Draco doesn't have that luxury, to just do as he pleases. He has a carefully crafted image to maintain. And as you said in your email, he's in a position of trust. He can't lose that or he'll lose his own credibility.
I wonder how he's going to help Ginny out. Will he bring up her reputation, or will she pull his down? I can see it going either way, honestly. Will he act more like an adviser? Crunching numbers, helping her with her image, I don't even know, etc?
I've come to a point in my fan fic writing career (?) where I'm really ambivalent to Hermione, leaning on the side of dislike. Or, well, I guess I don't dislike her, but I see how she's really judgmental and obnoxious, and I kind of like writing that. I think a lot of people make Hermione and Ginny BFFs, but they had their moments where they didn't get along in the books, too, so they're not perfect BFFs. What I like about Hermione in this story is that she and Ginny aren't the cliche/stereotypical girl best friends. They're more like partners in crime, where Hermione is reasonable and Ginny is the infamous one. It's a nice dynamic, and I love seeing them get along while still being themselves. I've always thought Ron and Hermione would learn how to handle each other better as they matured and fight less, and I could totally see Hermione relaxing a bit and maturing in her relationship with Ginny, too. And I just love that Hermione is going on these rampages against unjust laws while pregnant. Like, if that's not Hermione, what is, right? I dig it.
I just generally like that Ginny has a good heart, she has the right idea, but she's going about it all so irrationally. But she's surrounded by reasonable people, which makes her look even more unreasonable as a result. I'm interested to see if there's a reason for Ginny's irrationality, though I hesitate to call her irrational. She's obviously biased and that's clouding her judgment a little, to the point where she's blind to what is actually happening to her and around her because she is so set on her campaign. She can't see how everyone else perceives her.
I am also interested to see more about this marriage law! Will they get it repealed or will it go into effect and THEN be repealed?? I'LL JUST HAVE TO WAIT AND SEE!
Great job and can't wait for the next part!
Author's Response: Because Draco Malfoy has got the Midas touch. u_u
*laughs* As you are well aware, keeping Ginny that way is a tough act. But it's for her development, I swear - she just needs to grow up a little bit. ;) Anyway, so the ramifications of how that will affect Draco will come into play later on, so you'll just have to wait and see!
FF career! I love it, it reminds me of the Hunger Games. *thumbs up* You know, I never really liked Hermione (and I still don't), but I find that she's usually a pretty convenient character to have around. Like, she's very much the Jiminy Cricket of the HP series, if that makes sense lol, and of course that fits in nicely with this story. Hermione and Ginny as BFF's annoys me, just because I feel like one - or both - of them has to be pretty OOC for that to happen? And it also annoys me because it ties in with the whole 'Harry, Hermione and Ron are friends and Ginny is kind of just there in the ether because she is neither in the group nor does she have her own life' kind of characterisation that Rowling ravished her with in the books. And that's not on. u_u Anyway, I'm glad you're enjoying what's happened with their dynamic in this!
Isn't that just the Gryff way, really? Misguided-with-good-intentions basically sums up most of Gryffindor house (okay, not "most", but "some", and by "some" I mean mostly Ron and Harry), at least! ;) But hopefully Ginny undergoes some character growth soon and she can actually sort herself out, lol.
Thank you for reviewing (and being an awesome beta)! :D
Draco and Ginny are separating after five years together... But are either of them really ready to let go?Category: Long and Completed
A tale of unrequited love, denial, and politically incorrect halloween costumes.
Written for a DG Forum fic exchange.
Falling in love with Draco Malfoy had never been her intention, and nothing could have surprised her more – bar Ron having a somewhat civil word for the man.
This line is so great considering how horrible Ron is to Draco. Yes, even a somewhat civil word from Ron would be shocking. XD
You do such a great job of unfolding/revealing Ginny's feelings without hitting people over the head with them. Her actions are even more telling than her thoughts, and even with such a complicated emotion as love, you effectively show her feelings more than tell them. That's exactly what I loved about this story in the exchange. It hurt me to read about Ginny's feelings for Draco. I felt that pang of yearning that she feels throughout the story, the conflicted feelings of wanting to be closer but protecting herself by trying to get away. Ugh. It's so wrenching, and I love it.
This chapter sets up the story so well! I love Draco's musings about women playing hard to get, and how Ginny sort of fits in with that. I couldn't tell the first time I read the story if Draco has been in love with her for long and maybe just hadn't realized it, but this feels like the moment when he starts to realize his feelings or starts to think of her differently. But it also has that feeling that he has thought about this before, maybe, so perhaps he isn't as oblivious to his feelings as I initially thought. Anyway, the relationship between D and G is so lovely. Agh! Love, love, love.
Thank you! Ginny's feelings were particularly tricky to convey here, so I'm glad it wasn't too abrasive, and the precise feelings I intended came across.
Thanks for reviewing (you give the best reviews), so glad you loved it! *onwards*
This story just makes me so happyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyyy.
That's really all I've got. I'm just a puddle of feels. A puddle with a smile stretching from ear to ear (if puddles had ears, that is).
It has been too long since I last read this story, so thank you for submitting it to the directory, giving me an excuse to read it again. n_n
Oh noooooo. I almost forgot he had planned to postpone dinner with Ginny to make room for Saskia. That's what you get for being loose, Draco!!!
And how perfect that Ginny has running commentary on his life inside his head. He's so besotted. :')
Yes, I am going to use this review to reply to your review reply. Sue me. u_u
//I hope you and Draco are enjoying rereading! XD //
The butthead started biting me so I had to kick him out of my room. He's wallowing in the living room now, but, yes, I am enjoying myself immensely in his absence. :)
//You're too kind - honestly, I don't think I put as much thought in what I write as you read into it (sorry to spoil the illusion! I think your compliments say a lot more about you, than me as a writer. ;)). //
Okay, listen here, chickorita. That's exactly what I'm talking about. The fact that you don't *have* to put much thought into those details is exactly why you're fantastic. Okay? Okay. I used the word 'seamlessly' because that's exactly how those details read. They're not forced. They're organic, they make sense, they ADD to the story, add to the setting or the characterization. They're not overdone. And you don't even have to think about them when you come up with them. Is that even a little bit fair?? I mean, if you read those details in MY stories, I more than likely agonized over them. Or, let's say I was very lucky and some brilliant description/one-liner/metaphor/detail came to me easily, I know exactly where those details are and I always hope others notice them, too. My compliments do say a lot about me, let's be real here (I mean, I was an English major in college, I'm trained to read into these things), but don't sell yourself short. My effusive and totally accurate praise is well-deserved. ;)
And now onto the real review:
Forever LOLing over Ginny feeling the need to shout "My eyes!" as she covers them.
//he had never seen Ginny cry, not once.//
Wait, didn't he see her cry at the Halloween party four years ago?
I just so love Ginny's relationship with Charlie in this story. There's, what, a ten-year age difference between them? And yet they get along famously, and Charlie really, really cares for Ginny's well-being, more so than Ron, her closest brother in age and so the one she has spent the most time with her whole childhood, has displayed so far. Moreso than any of her family, who would rather see her with Harry just because he's, well, Harry. Charlie just really wants Ginny to be happy overall, and when he does something that inadvertently hurts her, he apologizes profusely because he cares about HER feelings, and I love that. :')
I am always, always astounded how you so seamlessly add these little details that really bring the story to life and really paint a picture of your character's personalities. The sort of sardonic way Draco thinks of things, like this line for instance:
//...she was struggling to unbuckle the heels that she must have dismantled half of her eldest brother’s house to Spello-tape seashells all over...//
Are just so clever and funny. And this line in particular is hilarious because Draco has almost certainly never been to Bill and Fleur's house, and yet he must have recalled Ginny telling him about it before, and he remembers it so well, he uses it to describe Ginny's shoes. Really says a lot about 1) what he thinks about Ginny attaching seashells to her shoes, and 2) how much he's paid attention to her and the things she's said. Such a simple, funny, almost throw away line tells you all you need to know about Draco's attitude and his regard for Ginny. And of course this fic (in my experience, your writing as a whole) is full of these awesome micro-details.
//"Drunk, you mean." Draco hoped she hadn't tried to kiss her brother, too.// BAHAHAHA. Like that. He's so bitter about it, honestly.
And as much as I like to read about Harry and Ginny breaking up amicably and Harry getting along with Draco, I get a lot of satisfaction out of how big of a prat Harry is in this story. u_u I mean, I feel super bad for Ginny. Even four-five years later, she's still hearing about Harry, still being asked by her family to consider Harry's feelings, but it just makes the slap in the face he'll receive when Ginny and Draco get over themselves and get together all the more satisfying. :)
Author's Response: I hope you and Draco are enjoying rereading! XD
Thanks so much for taking the time to review, especially as I'm sure you've already reviewed this story in full!
You're too kind - honestly, I don't think I put as much thought in what I write as you read into it (sorry to spoil the illusion! I think your compliments say a lot more about you, than me as a writer. ;)). There's probably some consideration for how familiar the character are with each other, but ultimately I really enjoy having characters have snarky one-liners for some comedic relief when I think they can pull them off.
It's so funny you mention that! When I skimmed this fic this morning to submit to the Directory (because I couldn't remember where all of the settings were), I actually got very disappointed in myself for my treatment of Harry. I think this is the first time I've been genuinely displeased with my treatment of a character, haha.
I love this chapter's setup! The first two sections immediately show the relationships between Draco and Ginny and their families. And it's a nice parallel that Draco meets with his mum alone because of tension with Lucius, and Ginny meets with Arthur alone because of, well, potential tension with Molly. Perhaps you didn't intend to create a parallel here like this, but it's so clever and subtle. I didn't even notice the first time I read through this.
The fact that all of Ginny's family and friends still have mean things to say about Draco is sad, but I like the way you handle it here. It definitely shows their prejudice, but, so far, it's not really about some ancient Weasley-Malfoy feud (which is actually a silly concept to me because that wasn't really canon), but about a family that did bad things during both wars. They all just want to protect Ginny from Draco, who could be a devious liar, a snake in the grass. While their intentions are honorable, it's sad that they don't see the relationship that Draco and Ginny truly have. :/
And the Weasleys are all written so well. Every time I read one of your stories, I'm amazed at how well you capture the characters. You are spot on with all of them. Molly isn't exaggerated in her distress or ire, George points out the obvious in a funny way, Arthur is the peace keeper trying to diffuse the situation, albeit somewhat ineffectually. I just love how you've dealt with the characters. I think it's a particular talent you have!
AND EVERYONE BRINGING UP HARRY. GRAAAHHHHHHHH. I'm still angry that they all have to mention him like he has any say so in Ginny's life. I love that you've kind of teased at the nature of Ginny and Harry's relationship/breakup, with more to be revealed later. You don't tell too much too soon.
Honestly, I feel like I'm saying the same things I did when I reviewed Chaos Theory. But that just goes to show how great of a writer you truly are that the same things are still done effectively and that they continue to impress/amaze me. :)
Author's Response: The parallel was intended. ;) I fell as though people often forget that Draco and Ginny's main problem (IMO) in getting together is the issues lying between their families, and in this instance it's a particular point of contention, so I tried to address it and put an emphasis on the dynamic there.
Well, I'm glad you thought the Weasleys were so well done. After I wrote that part with Arthur I made practically everyone read it to see how it sounded, and had to rewrite the whole thing a bunch of times because it was just plain weird/Arthur takes a lot of work for me, because I hate him, lol. Arthur should have died in book five. *sniffs* Really the only Weasleys I was happy with were George (even if he doesn't have a huge part) and Charlie, because, well, they're frankly quite awesome. u_u At least all of that stress paid off. ;)
I HATE HARRY (okay, I hate the Harry that I have a tendency to write. Cannon Harry is okay, sort of. I guess). Since Arthur didn't die in book five, then Harry should have died EVEN MORE in book seven. Just saying.
Haha, even if you're repeating yourself, you know I don't mind. ;) Honestly I love your reviews. Your feedback is always invaluable for me because it at least lets me know that I'm on the right track and taking my readers on an emotional journey (SUCH A CLICHE, SORRY NOT SORRY), and you always seem to pin point the parts of my writing that I'm secretly freaking out the most about, so it helps to know that I've pulled off whatever I was stressing over. And I'm so glad my consistency meets your approval. :D
Thank you for another lovely review! And sorry it's taking me so long to respond to them all, lol.
I think this review is going to be scrawny compared to my previous ones. :P
Clearly, you hate Ron, too, because he is truly awful in this chapter especially, and you even take his girlfriend away (later, of course)! Since he cares so much about Harry's feelings, maybe he needs to be in a relationship with him. :P
Oh, and as for one of your review replies where you said I should have known you'd written DCF based off Harry's treatment alone: well, I wrote a similar sort of Harry in More Than You Think You Are, and I honestly think Ginny needs to have those kinds of interactions with him. So it didn't ring any bells for me because it's just what fanon Harry deserves. :P But seriously, what is Ron's deal in this story? He's the pushiest one of all of them!
Charlie's distraction as he watched for Draco was really suspicious, and I'm sure if Ginny hadn't been busy with Ron, Harry, and her embarrassment, she would have followed up on what he was looking at.
He’d drawn his wand, stupefying Ron before he managed to hurt himself - or Charlie - just as the other Aurors in the room had caught wind of the action and come to intercede.
Not gonna lie, with Draco dressed as a Death Eater here, I half-expected the Aurors to arrest him or take Ron's side or something.
She wanted to run, to get away as fast as she could, but her name on his lips was as compelling as the Imperius curse. It was all she could do not to turn around and throw her arms around his neck. And wasn’t it just agonising that he had that kind of pull over her?
This makes me so sad for Ginny. D:
She blinked, as though she’d been slapped; that he would even think something like that, let alone say it. She could feel her mouth twisting downward, and the words spilled out of her mouth before she could stop them. “At least people like me. People only bother with you because everyone knows your vault is the size of a bloody glacier and your Death Eater father has half the Ministry in his pocket.”
While I still continue to feel worse for Ginny than Draco, I do start to feel bad for him here, because she hits exactly where he's insecure. It feels like he's pretty much grasping at straws to hurt her (with the whole, you think you're better than me because you're a Weasley bit), because it seems to come out of nowhere. But she actually knowingly hits where it hurts. They're both at fault here, of course, for not being truthful, and I feel bad for them both while also wanting to knock them upside the head and tell them to get their acts together.
Ginny was proud of herself that she made it safely back to her empty apartment without breaking down... Then she cried hysterically until she had nothing left.
:'C :'C :'C
Ginny sat on her sofa staring at the wall, slowly decapitating chocolate frogs.
Ugh, yes, the title! I almost mentioned in my review for the last chapter that the chocolate frogs aren't decapitated if you eat their legs and leave their heads. Lol. Glad I didn't do that. I couldn't remember where the title came in. How did you decide on "Decapitated Chocolate Frogs" for the title, anyway?
How was he to know that, by being as big a pain in her arse as he might usually, he would end up ruining the nice, perfect memories of Draco she’d carefully left herself as a keepsake of their friendship?
Still more sadness. This is interesting because it suggests that Ginny has been avoiding Draco not only to prevent a confrontation about her transfer, but also to preserve said memories. :C
I also love the sibling relationship in this story, even though you really only see it with Charlie. The positive relationship, anyway. I mean, Ginny has six siblings, and I think we tend to ignore them in fan fic, for the most part, except when Ron is being a prat about her relationship with Draco. So it's nice to see that Charlie messed up completely by accident, but he still sticks around to make her feel better, even if that support consists of sitting outside her apartment apologizing forever.
Author's Response: Yeah, Ginny was a little bit downtrodden so far in this fic, so I had to make up for it in this chapter, which is terrible but whatever. Plot devices. *waves hand*
How did you decide on "Decapitated Chocolate Frogs" for the title, anyway?
Um, I couldn't think of anything else. ;_; Seriously, the whole fic was finished sans epilogue, and I still had no idea what to call it; it was either this or "Pas de Deux" or "Road to Nowhere" which are utterly shit titles, especially for this kind of story. DCF was the best anyone could come up with lol, but I'm rather fond of it now.
The sibling relationship here is kind of my favourite thing about Charlie in this fic (maybe even my favourite thing about the entire fic). I agree that it seems to be neglected in a lot of fics in order to focus on other things, which is perfectly okay, but fics that give Ginny a solid relationship with some of her brothers makes me happy, for some reason. Probably because the Weasleys are supposed to be so close as a family, so it just gives the characterisation that much more depth.
I enjoyed Ginny's musings about why Draco doesn't look at her the way he looks at all the other women he sees. The part where she wonders if his parents sneer at her like hers sneer at him was particularly thoughtful and apt. And thank you for mentioning that Ginny is absurdly short! I've been imagining her as, um, absurdly short even though I don't normally think of her that way, but since it's canon in your story, I don't have to struggle to imagine her taller. Hahaha.
HARRY!!! *shakes fist* You give someone space for a few days. Maybe some weeks. Possibly some months? But FOUR YEARS is a long time, and why he thinks they can just pick up where they left off FOUR YEARS later is beyond me. The arrogance of such an idea. This line (which is awesome) basically sums up how I feel about Harry in this: “Firstly, it’s not up to you ‘let’ me do anything, even if we were an item.” And this one! “My freedom isn’t anything that can be given to me. It’s mine.” GRAHHHH. Go Ginny! The fact that her whole family (except Charlie) is on Harry's side is irritating as well. Poor Ginny, though, having everyone barge in on her while she's trying to recover from her hangover!
So, his large glass top table had been set for three (Why do you need to seat eight people? Ginny constantly nagged him. You never have guests over, and next to no one comes for dinner except me!), his white china set out neatly at each place (China, ‘for guests’? What guests?), and candles lit strategically about the room for ambient lighting (You’re killing me, Malfoy).
Love, love, love that Ginny is on his brain constantly. This does such a great job of showing just how much he thinks about Ginny, so much that everything he does has her nagging commentary, AND once again showing how close they are as friends. She knows him and his apartment intimately, and he knows her better than anyone.
SASKIA!!! Next chapter is going to hurt. DX
Author's Response: Okay, I secretly hate stories where Ginny is tall, or even average sized. Changing basic things about a character's appearance like that just kind of bothers me, lol.
See? I hate Harry. He can go jump, the arrogant SOB. u_u I don't really think that Ginny's whole family is on Harry's side (although Ron and Molly definitely are), but they certainly aren't on Draco's, so that doesn't really help matters. :( Anyway, I'm surprised that Ginny's commentary there didn't give away that it was me during the exchange!
*laughs* I just feel like Ginny would be such a constant nag. She keeps him grounded, you know. ;)
Thanks (again!) for the lovely review.
“Leave me alone you, stupid bloody bird!” she yelled, flinging her legs over the side of the lounge.
There was a moment of silence, then she heard a muffled voice. “Actually, it’s Charlie.”
LOL. One of the best things about this story is Charlie! I don't think I've ever read anything that made me love him so much. At least, before DCF, he was just the cool Weasley brother who worked with dragons and was never around in the HP books/movies because he lives in Romania. You've characterized him so well. He's cool and flirty (which isn't relevant to this chapter, of course, but will be later (of course)!), and he's funny the same way George is funny. Even though he doesn't have much to do or say in canon, you have effectively chracterized him as a Weasley, but as a separate one. I don't know if that makes any sense, but anyway. Ya dun good.
Exactly twelve hours in which she'd made him feel like a fool, sitting around waiting for something that clearly wasn't coming. Twelve hours of agonizing inactivity.
I thought this was interesting, because I think Ginny would say the same thing about him. For months since she realized how she felt about him, she's just waited around, being his partner at work but his buddy outside of work, waiting for something she knew wasn't going to come because he played around with other women. I don't even feel bad for Draco here. It's good that he sees how Ginny has felt, even though what Ginny is going through is a lot worse than waiting for a reply to a letter.
How dare she think badly of him after how hard he had worked to be better than society’s opinion of him?
I love this line so much. I can't remember if I mentioned it when I reviewed during the exchange (my iPad sometimes doesn't want to highlight text, so I gave up trying to mention certain lines). What I love about this part and Draco's thoughts here is how truly vulnerable he is. He acts arrogant and he has all this confidence, but he's just trying to be better than everyone's opinion of him, and of course it would hurt if it turned out his best friend's opinion was the same as everyone else's, when SHE was the one he was closest to and the one he opened up to. I just really liked reading about Draco's insecurities here, and the fact that Ginny is the one who makes him feel doubt - Ginny, out of everyone - is so telling.
...not to mention her berating the bartender for refusing her service with loud declarations that she “was a mermaid, and how could he expect her to survive on land without a drink?”...
LOL. And Ginny as a mermaid! I immediately thought of Ariel, since Ginny has red hair (though maybe not the same color red, haha).
When he returned she was struggling to unbuckle the heels that she must have dismantled half of her eldest brother’s house to Spello-tape seashells all over...
I don't even know how to say what I love about this line. It's just such a great Harry Potter way of explaining she's taped some shells to her shoes, and there's a bit of a sardonic twist in the description that's all Draco. It's just a great, in-character line.
And, wow, what an embarrassing situation Draco got himself into at the end there. I wonder if Charlie suspected what Draco was doing before he walked through the door. XD And, no, Draco, it's not that you're not yourself. It's that you are finally realizing those feelings you've kept pent up for years! Grody Saskia is not the answer. Only Ginny is.
Anyway! Great chapter. :)
Author's Response: I'm so glad. I worked hard on this Charlie, and it took me a couple of drafts to get him just right - my Charlie is still of course the cool Weasley, but he needs some personality in there or else he's going to be pretty useless as a character/plot device, lol.
I'm happy you don't feel bad for Draco, either, because this position is kind of his fault (well, okay, it's Ginny's fault too, but if he'd just keep it in his pants (HAHA) then this story wouldn't exist). Anyway, he's in need of a little bit of torture in this instance; it's good for his development. ;)
Okay, I admit that the Ginny/The Little Mermaid parallel was not intentional in the slightest, but we'll just pretend it is - my subconscious is so clever.
Thanks again for your lovely review!
"The world forgetting, by the world forgot." Ginny struggles to remember the important things in a world of darkness and uncertainty.Category: Works in Progress
Yaaayyyy! I love this story!
Even though it's been over two months since I read this on FFN, I can tell that you've added a bit more content, and I'm so excited that you are expanding the already wonderful story you've created! Everything about this story was wonderful during the exchange, but I was particularly blown away by (and particularly enjoyed u_u) the smut. Aren't you, like, twelve?? I kid, I kid. But seriously, I thought this was the best smut in the whole exchange. Maybe top two, but, you know, awesome. I am envious of this particular writing skill, haha.
I think the first time I read this story, I never picked up on Molly mentioning having six kids instead of seven in her letter. That piece of foreshadowing was excellently placed, and the surprise of Charlie's visit adds to the mystery of the whole story.
I'm flabbergasted by not just your smut-writing skills, but your writing skills in general. You have such a way with storytelling. As short as this story was during the exchange, you managed to create an entire new world, including back stories, and you just made it so intriguing. All I can say is ???.
I'm starting to not make sense anymore, but that's what this story does to me. Good job. Can't wait for everything that is to come!
Author's Response: Yaaaayy! Thank you so much for liking it! :D I'm so flattered, seriously. Maybe this will be my one achievement in life haha... ha...
I'm not twelve! Reverse the digits... and subtract seven... and add a number of your choice, and you may have my age. :3 I'm so glad you liked the smut, lol. I remember freaking out over how to write it, because I've not really written smut before. Translating something like that into words, and then still having the emotion is really hard to do. I needed a few trips to the forum smut workshop. If you have any tips please share!
Oh, you noticed! :D Not many seemed to during the exchange, and I was wondering if I made it a little too obscure.
Oh, man. Reading this review gives me so many warm feelings. Thank you so much, Jess! For reviewing, definitely, but also for liking it so much. You have no idea how flattered I feel that someone as prolific as you gives me such nice comments. :3 I hope you like what's to come too!
Ugh, this story. I don't know how you came up with this idea or the details of it. It's just so creative, and I'm in awe of your imagination. Why aren't you writing Young Adult novels??
I can't remember if I said this in my review on FFN, but this is the kind of setup that works so well with fan fiction, because we as readers know so much about these characters and they don't know anything at all. The fact that Ginny has to meet her family all over again and they're strangers to each other is so sad, especially considering the Weasleys are a close, loving family. Just like this dystopian world, the Weasley family is sterile and unfamiliar. :( (Or at least they will be next chapter when we read their letters to each other. D: D: D:)
I love this story!
Author's Response: Jess, your review for TR at FFN all but made me cry, and your review now is much the same. I agree with the point you brought up about the premise working well with fanfic characters. That actually hadn't crossed my mind at all, but it's so true. (Also, writing Molly's letter actually made me tear up a bit. Haha.) Thank you so much, and I am so happy that you like this fic. There are minor changes/additions to the second chapter already, but I hope you'll continue to read it and like it as much as I add even more stuff to it later on.
Yaaaas, gurl yaaaaass. Since it's been over a year since I read this story, I'm already fuzzy on the details of what happens, but I'm super super excited for the expanded content!
That was a neat trick Draco pulled (and I so called it!), distracting her with declarations of love while smuggling the picture out of her pocket. But so sad that the only picture Ginny has of her whole family before the Lacuna, a relic from days she doesn't remember, had to be destroyed. I have feels.
I can't wait to see more Ginny/Charlie interaction. He's her only family who remembers them how they were, who truly loves them for who they are, and not just because they were cobbled together and told they were a family, without any memory of being one. I reread the previous chapter to refresh my memory of where we left off, and it's still so distressing to read Bill, Percy, and Molly's letters to Ginny. The lack of that warm, loving, crazy relationship is so sad, even though you did a really great job capturing each of their voices in such short letters! Like Molly still sounds like loving, caring Molly, but at the same time, she's basically talking to a stranger and hoping for a closer relationship in the future.
And this life must be sad for Charlie, too! Being alone so long. Not knowing what's happened to his siblings and parents. (He wasn't affected because he was in Romania or something, right? Which begs the question of why Britain? And how?) Knowing his siblings and parents don't remember him at all. :( I can't wait to see how the story progresses with the added content! Hopefully another year doesn't pass before the next update. :D LOVE IT AND LOVE THIS STORY BYE.
Also, if you don't have the ability to delete the spam review below, just let me know and I can delete it for you.
Author's Response: Jeeesss! :D Thank you so much for the review! (I'd be lying if I said I wasn't hoping for it haha.)
(And I managed to figure out how to delete it. Thanks though!)
Well, it's not Ginny's fault she doesn't remember enough to know what to expect from a Slytherin. I agree that it's quite sad, though - I ended up being attached to the little picture people. I wish Molly could've seen it... but, well, you know these characters, they do things the moment you turn your back on them. I don't imagine Ginny is especially happy with Draco for toying with her like that.
The Ginny/Charlie relationship is one thing I'm really excited to write about! He didn't get to appear much during the exchange, so I'd really like to expand on his development this time around. Fingers crossed.
Anyhoo, thanks sooo much! I'll get to work on the next one right away so it'll take less than a year to update, haha.
ANOTHER BRAND NEW CHAPTER, YAY!Category: Essays
Does D/G still matter? Yes! And maybe, just maybe, it matters more than ever before. Read all about the reasons why our one and only OTP is truly built to last. Are YOU ready for the shocking truth? ;)
Chapter SIX Quote of the Day: Okay, there isn't really a quote, but JJ Abrams is mentioned. Just read it. ;)
While looking on the Pottermore wiki, I found some new information from JKR written specifically for Pottermore about Draco that I thought you'd find interesting. Here's just a part of it, and maybe it's kind of obvious information (based on the books), but it's nice to have that validation from JKR, too!
"Draco’s feelings for Harry were always based, in a great part, on envy. Though he never sought fame, Harry was unquestionably the most talked-about and admired person at school, and this naturally jarred with a boy who had been brought up to believe that he occupied an almost royal position within the wizarding community. What was more, Harry was most talented at flying, the one skill at which Malfoy had been confident he would outshine all the other first-years. The fact that the Potions master, Snape, had a soft spot for Malfoy, and despised Harry, was only slight compensation."
So it looks like Draco's jealousy of Harry is spot on! I mean, it only follows that if he's envious of Harry's popularity and skills, he'd also be envious of his girlfriend. u_u
I still need to catch up on chapters 3 and 4, so I'll get around to them as soon as I can! I just thought you'd like to see this. ;)
Author's Response: Thanks! :) Sorry that I didn't see this until now... (Does the Happy Psychic Dance) Okay, I don't think that really counts as being psychic. ;) For me to figure out that Draco's feelings were going to be based on envy, that is. But I do think that it supports the argument that OF COURSE Draco would be jealous of Ginny, even if the ONLY reason were that she "belonged" to Harry. It really makes no sense at all that this jealousy wasn't shown. (spins tangled webs of theories...) Anyway, thanks so much for posting this!! You'll get lots of credit in the next chapter. Because the experts WILL be able to rescue it from the drive. Oh yes, oh yes they will. You know, after the exchange is over, I really think I'm going to just put it together anyway.
I have always, always, always thought that JKR had set Draco up to follow a certain path and then backpedaled on it in order to continue making him a bad guy. It is one of the things that I cannot forgive about Deathly Hallows. I understand she wanted to paint Draco as a cowardly character. Maybe it was solely his cowardice that prevented him from naming Harry at Malfoy Manor in DH, but that doesn't make any sense. He spent the entire sixth book trying to KILL Dumbledore for the glory it would bring him (and, we assume, to help redeem his family to Voldemort). So how hard could it have been to say, "Yes, this is Potter" when presented with another opportunity to redeem his family in Voldemort's eyes? That seemed like such a good sign. Guilt! Draco is feeling guilt! He doesn't want to condemn an innocent man to Voldemort's cruel torture (or DEATH). He's lived in the manor with Voldemort and Death Eaters long enough to know what would happen to Harry, so maybe he couldn't bring himself to condemn him that way. This was such a great thing, and I was so excited about it!
And THEN the Battle of Hogwarts happened, and suddenly Draco is the villain again, trying to earn some glory by capturing Harry for Voldemort. It just didn't seem like him. Not after everything he went through in his sixth and seventh years. Not after the horrors he saw and went through. All JKR was doing was turning him into someone who couldn't be sympathized with. And why? Because Slytherin characters are supposed to be Bad. They don't have individual circumstances and stories that carried them throughout the series to where they are. They are all evil and need to be dismissed from the castle because not a single one of them would fight for what's right. Never mind that fighting for what's right meant fighting against their friends and families! The Slytherins definitely deserved empathy, not derision.
I just wanted to say that because you touched on it slightly, and I agree wholeheartedly that JKR treated Draco badly. I don't know if you've ever seen Avatar: the Last Airbender, but I've always said that the mini-villain, Zuko, was the character that Draco should have been. So much character development! And I thought we were going to get some development for Draco in DH, but, sadly no. Sigh.
You've brought up some interesting ideas I've never thought about before, so I'm looking forward to the next chapter. The only part I'm a little dubious about so far is where you say that Draco could sense in CoS that Ginny and Harry's relationship would develop more one day. I don't know if he actually would have that much insight, but the idea that he bullied Harry about Ginny and not about Hermione is an interesting one. And the fact that maybe Draco was jealous of Ginny because even though Harry had rejected her too, she was still able to interact with him in ways that Draco couldn't. I'd never thought of the Harry/Draco/Ginny dynamic in this way before. The fact that Ginny AND Draco were both rejected by Harry is something to think about.
I like where you're going with this so far, and can't wait to see more!
Author's Response: I TOTALLY agree about Draco. The DH filmmakers actually understood the first plot point you bring up very well; they had Harry spell out that this was Draco's motivation in pretending not to recognize him. And it just doesn't make any sense that this hint was not followed up on... but I talk a LOT about that in the next chapter. And yes, the way that the Slytherins were treated in general was ridiculous. Pansy actually became one of my favorite characters after DH for that very reason-- she was the only one who showed any common sense by pointing out that handing Harry over to Voldy would save everyone else. I never saw Avatar! But I've always meant to, so someday... but I think I have a pretty good idea of the kind of thing you're talking about. Now, the CoS thing is another one where I can see how everybody won't have the same opinion about what Draco thought or didn't think re: the budding H/G relationship. But for me, the most significant thing is that Draco's first words to Harry in Ginny's presence were "Potter, you've got yourself a girlfriend." I really think that he saw something in Ginny that Harry didn't see (and really didn't bother to care about.) Anyway, more soon! :)
Tensions boil over at Christmas time when Ginny is unable to resolve a long standing argument with her boyfriend.Category: Completed Short Stories
This fic was written for Kim for the 2013 Christmas exchange at the DG Forum.
Draco's stubbornness about the situation, which he doesn't understand because of his power and doesn't WANT to understand because of his class, is so, soooo in character, I love it. Also the fact that he won't just repair broken furniture with magic.
The way Ginny broke up with Draco was perfect. Your dialogue is awesome. And there were some really clever, funny things that I can't find anymore but were awesome nonetheless.
Everything about it reminded him of Ginny, which would explain why Draco still had a crick in his neck after falling asleep on the plush sofa where she preferred to sit. Again.
;_; Poor, Draco. It's a good thing he doesn't let his stubbornness ruin a perfectly good relationship!
That I've read (which, admittedly, isn't a whole, whooole lot), I think you write the most in-character Draco and Ginny ever. Or maybe your Draco and/or Ginny most resemble mine, or what I want mine to look like. (Def what I want mine to look like.)
So, you know, good job and stuff. I like it. :D
Author's Response: For the record, reviews from idod will always be my favourite. u_u
I want to know all the really clever, funny things! Your homework is to find them all and tell me in great detail about how awesome I am. Haha!
Anyway, great minds think alike and all that. I am intensely flattered that you think my characterisation is so accurate (though sometimes I really do think those two are terrible at slotting into canon. C'est la vie!).
Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Auror Ginny Weasley is given a task that she isn't exactly happy about – to find and bring in Draco Malfoy. When Ginny locates him, however, her world slowly collides with his own, and her life gets a little more complicated.Category: Long and Completed
Draco is absolutely wonderful in this. Such a smooth talker! As I've said before, you have a way about dialogue that feels very real and genuine. It doesn't feel like you just use dialogue to move the plot along. I mean, you do do that, but you do more than that, because when I read your dialogue it sounds like real people having a conversation and talking and reacting.
I liked the mystery aspect of the story, but besides Draco, what I like most is how everyone sort of protects Draco. Everyone knows that he's a wanted man, but it seems like there are a lot of people, a lot of strangers, who are willing to hide him from the Ministry. I don't know if that's out of fear of what Draco will do or money or what, but the fact that people seem to know that he's innocent, despite the rumors, and want to protect him from an unjust fate, that's pretty cool. The Malfoys have come a long way if there are people actively trying to keep him out of Azkaban. And maybe that's kind of telling, because Draco isn't his father, and society seems to realize that.
Anyway, thank you so much for the story!! I loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review, and you're very welcome :]
It has been almost a year since Ginny has run into anyone she'd previously known. Not even her family knew where she was these days, but Draco Malfoy manages to show up in her bedroom anyway.Category: Completed Short Stories
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Beautiful story, Sunny! It had such a nice, refreshing feel, and the emotions were so poignant. Ginny's fear was agonizingly relevant and clear, even if muted because she was trying to push it away, and I love that Draco was the optimistic/hopeful one of the two. I just love redeemtpion stories for Draco so much, and this baby would be his redemption. ;___; Ginny's too, maybe. I love that he recognizes that and still has room to hope for more with Ginny. I really enjoyed the story. Thanks so much for sharing!
Author's Response: Thanks, Jess! I too love redemption stories for Draco. That theme tends to run through many of my stories for him. I didn't write this with it specifically in mind but now that you mention it, it's true that this baby could be his redemption. He'd certainly strive to do right by the kid. Thanks again for the R&R. Glad you enjoyed!
"I'm an intern for the Minister," she said indignantly, crossing her arms over her chest and tapping her foot like a petulant child. "Why are you here?" "I'm also an intern for the Minister," he snapped.Category: Completed Short Stories
Such a cute story! I loved how you incorporated the "not going to fit" line. I'll take Draco whispering innuendos in my ear any day. I *also* really enjoyed the tit line, and how it fit in at the end of the story. The last part with the confession made my heart all fluttery - clear sign of successful romance. :) Thanks for the lovely story! I enjoyed it!
Author's Response: Thanks, Jess! I'm glad the confession made you fluttery - always what I want to hear as a writer! :)
+++Category: Works in Progress
Ginny fled the wizarding world when betrayal, deception, and heartbreak tore apart her life. A year later, she lives and works as a Muggle-- and the co-owner of Athena's Saucy Shoppe of Salacious Delights. But she's about to learn that it isn't so easy to leave the past behind... especially when it comes packaged in the person of Draco Malfoy.
Chapter NINETEEN Quote of the Day:
Ginny tried again, deciding that it was time for her glowering blond companion to help her out whether he wanted to not.
“It’s so great to catch up with old friends, Draco. Don’t you think?” She jabbed Draco lightly in the ribs under cover of darkness.
He shot a sideways glance at her and made a noncommittal noise. Ginny groaned inwardly. He was apparently not going to help her at all.
Ginny turned her head to the other side. “Don’t you think so, Theo?” she asked him, her voice strained.
“Couldn’t agree more,” said Theo. “And we’ve still got a lot of catching up to do tonight.”
He sounded relaxed and jovial. But something told a different story. Maybe the rigid carriage of his back, maybe an undertone in his voice or a falseness in his smile. Or perhaps her magical instincts were so deeply bred into her bones, so ingrained through a lifetime of training, that she could never lose them. Even though she’d been forbidden to use magic in over a year, Ginny was a witch and always would be. She thought that she’d probably tried harder to forget it than anyone else possibly could have done. And so she knew that something was very wrong.
I am always amazed by how effortless your writing seems, Anise. I hope one day to be as eloquent as you. ;A;
I love the mystery involved with this story so far, and Draco and Ginny's chemistry is undeniable. :D I also really like how Draco doesn't shame Ginny for her line of work and Ginny doesn't feel any shame either!! That would have been an easy/cliche route to take in Ginny and Draco's interaction. I'm all for the sex positivity in this piece so far. Can't wait to read more! :D
Author's Response: Oh, I don't know... (blushes) but thanks. :) There's a LOT more on its way... okay, here's an eentsy cookie crumb... there's a scene in Chap 3 with Millicent that made me snicker all the way through writing it. Furniture is involved. That is all I will say. And that I don't see how I could ever post this on ffnet.
Who would’ve thought that a night of drunken passion, which Ginny couldn’t recall for the life of her, would lead to her becoming flatmates with Draco Malfoy?Category: Completed Short Stories
I loooove this. Reminds me of all the things I love about Draco and Ginny. And I know I said this in my review on FFN, but so much HIMYM in the way Draco uses Ginny to scare off his clingy paramours. I don't know if it was intentional or not, but it was a nice excuse for Draco to be so determined for Ginny to be his roommate. Loved how they gradually grew closer together, first as roommates and friends. That's exactly what I like to read in my DG. n_n Anyway, loved the story!
Author's Response: Thank you, thank you. Draco is a bit like Barney in this, isn't he? I'd have to say that Ginny's more like Robin than Lily. ;P The best stories are where they start as enemies, then acquaintances, then friends, then lovers, but only so much I can do in a one-shot. ;P