okay I liked your story but your french is a bit off...
First:
"Le troisième étage” he replied in a gruff voice."
then you say she got off at the thrid floor but actually it would be the fourth because in france the first floor is the "rez-de-chaussée" then the second floor is the "premier étage"
third floor is acutally the "deuxième étage" and then the fourth is the "troisième étage"

Second: when you say "Excusez-moi, oú est les peintures de Marie Dubois?” you're asking where is the painting of Marie Dubois not by her. You should us "par" instead of de.
And third: When she orders in the cafe, in France you wouldn't be served if you just demanded something. You have to use "Je voudrais"

And again, all french mistakes aside, I rly did like the story.
-lainie

brilliant story...I adored it. I think wine is so interesting and then combining it with D/G? totally brill

Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m glad you liked the idea.