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Primrose Path by Adelagia    (Reviews - 196)

Ginny, Draco, Quidditch, and entirely too close quarters. Being forced to train, play, and live with Draco for a season gives Ginny a whole new understanding of and appreciation for the amazing bouncing ferret. Ginny's POV.
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Drama, Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 6 | Word count: 18937 | Read count: 44930 | Published: Apr 19, 2005 | Updated: May 23, 2007
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Date: Jan 15, 2006 Title: Chapter 5: Chapter Five

Oh, poor Ginny! A rival on two fronts. Or maybe Draco is just trying to make her jeaslous? Anyway, the sex dream and Ginny's reaction were really funny. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Heh, I was pretty happy with the sex dream scene myself. Thanks for reviewing; all shall be revealed in due time! :)

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: May 24, 2007 Title: Chapter 6: Chapter Six

I had almost given up hope that you'd finish this, so I am absolutely delighted to see that you did. And it really is a cute ending. I love the stupid fight at the end. Thank you for posting!

Quidditch by fallenwitch    (Reviews - 160)

Draco Malfoy inadvertently comes to Ginny Weasley's assistance during a game of Quidditch. The reverberations from his actions will rock his world for some time to come. Snarky Humor and Romance.
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: Draco Malfoy, Ginny Weasley, Harry Potter, Pansy Parkinson, Ron Weasley
Compliant with: None
Era: Hogwarts-era
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 9 | Word count: 16487 | Read count: 55106 | Published: May 03, 2005 | Updated: Jun 07, 2005
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Date: Jun 10, 2005 Title: Chapter 9: Never, Ever, Do Anything Like That Again

I really enjoyed this story. You do a great job with the first-person narrative--Draco has so much character! I especially like how he is so reluctant, but can't help himself. Thank you very much!

The Band Must Go On by ronlover    (Reviews - 23)

Ginny Weasley is about to start her 6th year at Hogwarts. Little does she now that it will be filled with many surprises. Hogwarts School has decided to start a program called 'Community School Hours'. Ginny Weasley is excited about her choice...that is until Draco Malfoy came along.
Category: Works in Progress
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: No
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Chapters: 3 | Word count: 4705 | Read count: 7516 | Published: May 22, 2005 | Updated: Jun 26, 2005
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Date: May 26, 2005 Title: Chapter 1: Community Service Hours

This is a good start. I can definitely see Ron overreacting to the idea of having to do community service. I like that Ginny and Hermione seem to have a good relationship. From the title, I assume that Ginny is going to join the band. It will be interesting to see where else you go from here. Nice job!

Author's Response: Hey, Thanks for the review. I appreciate it. I am currently writing the next chapter. lol. That was how my friend was when I told him that we had to community hours, though at my school its only 40 hours.

Irritations by Mynuet    (Reviews - 99)

An essay written by your Site Mommy on the topic of things that those of us who read through and approve your fics wish you wouldn't do.
Category: Essays
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: None
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Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
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Chapters: 1 | Word count: 3554 | Read count: 8772 | Published: May 30, 2005 | Updated: May 30, 2005
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Date: May 30, 2005 Title: Chapter 1: Irritations

Thank you very much for writing this piece. I am also irritated by everything you mentioned, to a greater or lesser degree. The way I see things, avoiding these issues is a matter of respect--respect an author has for him or herself, for his or her readers, and ultimately for JKR herself.



I consider writing to be means of self expression. What would I be saying about myself if I didn't look for errors in my writing before I post it for the world to see? We all make mistakes, but I make every effort to correct mine before I post. If I didn't, I would be presenting myself as less than I am. But it also shows respect for the people who bother to read what I write. I assume that my readers are intelligent and do my best to give them as polished a finished product as I can. As a reader, it is hard for me to take seriously an author who doesn't do the same thing.



As to canon-related errors and plots that diverge radically from canon, I would go a step farther than you and say that they border on disrespecting JKR. She has spent years creating the wonderful world in which her stories take place. This is a large part of what drew me to the books to begin with. When I read (and write) fanfiction, I do so to be able to spend more time in that world. If an author doesn't take the time to check the details or writes something completely different without any sort of context tying the story to the books, it seems a little like an affront against Rowling's work and world. (I sometimes read these stories anyway, but it is usually good writing that draws me in.)



This has turned into much more of a rant than I had originally intended, so I think I will stop. Thank you again for putting into words all of these irritations. You are definitely not alone. I suggest that you link to this essay from the page with the site rules. They might act as guidelines for some authors, at least. (But if you already have trouble with people following the actual rules, that might be too much to hope for!)

Sailing the Dark Ship by kjcp    (Reviews - 201)

COMPLETE A week of detention bring Draco and Ginny closer together, and against all odds, an unlikely friendship emerges. But what will happen when their bond is tested and they both have to face the things they fear most? COMPLETE
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Romance, Angst, Drama
Warnings: Blood, Sexual Violence, Character Death
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 16 | Word count: 122021 | Read count: 31263 | Published: Jun 21, 2005 | Updated: Oct 29, 2005
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Date: Oct 30, 2005 Title: Chapter 16: Epilogue: And What Happened Next

I'm glad the story had a happy ending. Thank you for writing this. I have really enjoyed it!

The Result of a Drinking Binge by MrsDanielRadcliffe    (Reviews - 270)

Ginny Weasley wakes to find she's in quite a bit of trouble with possible lifelong consequences. *COMPLETE*
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Extremely Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Angst, Drama, Humor, Romance, Smut
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 19 | Word count: 49503 | Read count: 58608 | Published: Jul 11, 2005 | Updated: Sep 03, 2006
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Date: Jan 22, 2006 Title: Chapter 10: New Addition

Hm. This is an unwelcome development. But I suppose Draco will figure out what he really wants before too long. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Unfortunately, most guys do need that huge thump on the head before they figure out what they want. Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Jan 29, 2006 Title: Chapter 11: Escape

I really like Narcissa helping Ginny. It is amazing what a baby can do, isn't it? And that last scene was really sweet. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Updating is exciting when you know you\'ll get reviews! Thanks again!

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Date: Feb 05, 2006 Title: Chapter 12: Foolish

The image of Draco dripping in apple sauce is priceless. It's nice to see that he is starting to see sense. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Feb 12, 2006 Title: Chapter 13: Apologies

What is it going to take for these two to realize they really are in love with each other? Do you have more evil planned? Thanks for the update! I am looking forward to seeing what will happen with this new "sleeping over" arrangement.

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Feb 26, 2006 Title: Chapter 14: Beautiful

Draco and Ginny's relationship is a bit odd. The sexual aspect seemed abrupt after the last chapter, and then to have it continue for so long without any sort of resolution seems strange. But I suppose that will come before long, likely sparked by Ginny's upcoming date. I'm looking forward to seeing how it plays out. Thanks for the update!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Aug 06, 2006 Title: Chapter 15: Raging

Draco and Ginny are both blind idiots. Sigh. I do hope that Narcissa is right and they will somehow sort everything out without *too* much more drama, fun though it may be. Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Oh, there is lots more drama because drama is what I do best. Lol. I\'m glad you enjoyed!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Aug 13, 2006 Title: Chapter 16: The Birthday Party

Boy, I hate Ginny right now. Please tell me that she is going to come to her senses soon and stop being an obnoxious bitch. Grr. Anyway, thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Everyone gets their turn on the merry bitch-go-round -- even Ginny!

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Date: Aug 20, 2006 Title: Chapter 17: Better

Hee hee. That's certainly an interesting development! I can't wait to see where you go from here. Their relationship sure is backwards, but Ginny could have everything she wants if she would just open her eyes. Grr. Yes, I seem to be getting too caught up in this! :) Thanks for the update.

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Aug 29, 2006 Title: Chapter 18: Giving Up

I really hate Draco right now. What an ass! I hope that he and Ginny figure things out soon, because I'm getting tired of hating one or the other of them. Ah well. If they did things rationally, there wouldn't be a story for me to read, right? Thanks for the update!

Author's Response: Thank You! Someone finally realizes what I\'ve been saying ALL ALONG? You\'d be amazed how many truly NASTY reviews I\'ve gotten because of the way fictional characters are acting! I\'ve explained to people over and over again that I wrote this last summer after a series of particularly difficult situations. I promise that I wasn\'t the one acting like this (I was being a moron, but I wasn\'t doing it while attempting to be a decent parent -- I\'m still allowed!), but most of these situations are at least partly based on fact. Granted, some of it is totally made up for the premise of making the story flow. You get my point.
What has gotten to me the most is that I\'ve started to hate my characters. I hate people who act like this in real life -- you know, the people who are always putting themselves and baser urges first while completely ignoring what kind of situations are best for their children. I had a particularly nasty little review over at Portkey over the issue of Draco swearing at Jayden. I got a lot of flack for that one. This person went on a tirade about how she didn\'t like my use of the \"F Word\" but \"hung in with the story.\" She went on to say it was \"mostly enjoyable\" but that Draco swearing at Jayden wasn\'t \"adding anything to my story.\" I forget sometimes that there are a lot of people reading fic that don\'t understand the sublties of characters. To me, this signaled Draco was at the end of his rope. He was fighting to stay sane and make sense of his life -- and then Ginny lets Jayden go unsupervised because she is so caught up in her own bullshit -- and he cracks. He threw a tizzy without Jayden there, and with no intention of Jayden seeing it. He is furious for all of the above mentioned facts and the demise of his semi-relationship with Ginny. I\'m sorry if I was attempting to show Draco\'s state of mind, you know?! I know more people that end up like this because of lack a maturity.

Obviously, given the length of this review (especially given that it isn\'t even 7 a.m. when I\'m leaving it), I am so appreciative that someone FINALLY gets it. Thank you for that.

The last chapter goes up on Sunday.

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Sep 04, 2006 Title: Chapter 19: Scarlet

Thank you for this chapter. I have stopped hating both Draco and Ginny, at least until you begin the sequel, when I may start up again. :) I particularly liked the realism of their conversation at the beginning of the chapter--yes, they resolved some things, but it is clear that they still have a lot of work left to do. I'm looking forward to reading more from you in the future!

Author's Response: Aww, thanks, man!

PhD by twiddlekinks    (Reviews - 67)

*COMPLETED* Featuring Ginny Weasley as graduate student in training, and an icy blond Slytherin as her supervisor. Toss in a couple of science jokes or nerdy pick-up lines, and there’s the perfect protocol for passion. (Er…)
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Definitely Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 6 | Word count: 20136 | Read count: 12018 | Published: Aug 02, 2005 | Updated: Aug 16, 2005
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Date: Aug 04, 2005 Title: Chapter 1: 1: Introduction

While I find your premise completely improbable, I am sure I will read it avidly. I happen to have a Ph.D., though I am not a biologist (or lab scientist of any kind), and my advisor was absolutely nothing like Draco Malfoy. Maybe the opposite, actually. But anyway, I am looking forward to seeing your take on academic life and to how you reconcile the idea with the books. Please update sooner rather than later!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Aug 09, 2005 Title: Chapter 3: 3: Results

Another funny chapter, with action too! I particularly like the line, "She was yelling now. And she was talking in italics." Hee hee.

As for the pie/pi duality, I was once on a math team with the unofficial motto "Come for the food, stay for the pi." Sad, huh?

Author's Response: YES! That's perfect. And thus, it was incorporated. :oD

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Aug 12, 2005 Title: Chapter 4: 4: Discussion

Woo-hoo! You quoted me! I am honored. Unfortunately, I didn't make up the joke to begin with. Oh well. I like this chapter, though Draco seems a little more honest about his feelings than I would have expected. Not that I am complaining... I'm looking forward to the next chapter.

The Balin Connection by Emeral_eyes    (Reviews - 66)

Sequel to The Visible Invisible. Using a very important file of information and her own memories, Ginny Weasley tries to piece together a series of events that have left with more questions than answers, and an overwhelming feeling that an outside source is attempting to destroy the most important person in her life. [DG, Post Hogwarts]
Category: Works in Progress
Rating: Not Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Action, Mystery, Romance
Warnings: Blood
Completed: No
Series: None
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Chapters: 12 | Word count: 32596 | Read count: 38695 | Published: Aug 10, 2005 | Updated: Jun 30, 2006
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Date: Nov 16, 2005 Title: Chapter 8: Rescued

Ooh! I'm excited that things are starting to change. I am hopeful that soon we will start to get some answers instead of more and more questions!

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Date: Jan 23, 2006 Title: Chapter 10: Its Mysterious Nature

Thanks for the update! It is nice to start getting some answers, even if the result is getting more questions as well. And I didn't think the first scene was too cheesy at all!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Feb 03, 2006 Title: Chapter 11: Bonds that Cannot be Severed

This is a great chapter, a true turning point in the story. You do such a nice job of giving us information little by little--just enough to answer some questions about what happened, but to keep us guessing. And it is nice that we are starting to see that Draco isn't really evil, even if Ron would like him to be. Thanks for the update, and I am looking forward to the next one!

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Jul 01, 2006 Title: Chapter 12: A Lesson in Historical Bias

You do a great job of answering one question only to open three more in its place. I definitely feel like Ginny must. I'm looking forward to reading more! Thanks for the update.

The Broken Road by CliodnaHPFan    (Reviews - 299)

Ginny Weasley has gone through a string of men, even suffering through a stint being married to the Savior of the Wizarding World. She keeps her pain bottled up inside, until when she finally snaps, she does something drastic that changes her world forever.
Category: Long and Completed
Rating: Sorta Naughty
Characters: None
Compliant with: None
Era: None
Genres: Angst, Romance
Warnings: None
Completed: Yes
Series: None
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Chapters: 21 | Word count: 79473 | Read count: 131911 | Published: Aug 11, 2005 | Updated: Mar 03, 2006
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Date: Sep 02, 2005 Title: Chapter 10: 10 :: Adumbration

I've really enjoyed this story so far. In each chapter you seem to increase the tension. It leaves me wondering just how long you can keep it up without a resolution. And with every new chapter I think the next one will have to be the end, but it isn't. What new contortions will come next? I can't wait to find out.

Reviewer: Embellished Signed
Date: Sep 28, 2005 Title: Chapter 15: 15 :: Revivifying, Part I

I love the way you ended this chapter!