Name: tinamarie reviewed Separation on Feb 21, 2010 06:37 pm
I've already read Lady of the House and to be honest I did wonder about the back story to it. After this chapter I don't see how Ginny could forgive him. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response: Thanks for reading and reviewing! Draco did kidnap Ginny and marry her unethically, but chapter 3 (which is updated) explains why he did it. I think he was trying to save her from her imminent fate, and he did what he felt like he had to do. They do end up reconciling and smoothing over their rockiness eventually. I'm glad that you took the time to read this, though. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed First meeting on Feb 21, 2010 02:43 pm
definitely more fitting :) we r hereby re-christened twinsies :D. i immediately searched for the scubarang story so i'm gonna read it 2nite [i guess law gets put off again :S]. i have never felt your fear by echo is definitely my fave pervy B/L story but i havnt read the scubarang story yet... so the jury is still out. i want new D/G updates... :(

Author's Response: Hehe, okay. We can even call ourselves DGTs if we're feeling too lazy to type out that whole thing. And I think I've read half of I have never felt your fear by echo, and then I think I went on vacation and forgot to finish it. Pervy B/L, you say? I'll have to check it out, then. :) And I really want some updates too! I have a whole bunch that I'm waiting for like Time for Plan B, Look at Me, Three Thousand Days of Innocence, Buttercup, a whole bunch of CCC's stuff, Die with a "T", and of course, Vineyard Summer. It'll be fun reading that one because now we can talk about it and analyze and such. :)
Name: choravenclaw reviewed First meeting on Feb 21, 2010 12:10 pm
Oh hush now.
I still have to read the other chapter!
plus i'm not content until i've given a great big review.
especially for such a sweatheart like you!
I'm almost done with my paper and then i have toread a 248 pages book and then i'll be done for the day.
I'll take a great big shower after half an hour pilates then i'll read and review as many fics as possible.
Starting with yours, of course!


Author's Response: *brushes sweat away from forehead). My goodness, choravenclaw, you are one busy woman! Good luck on your paper! I know that those can be really frustrating and time-consuming. And then add on 248 pages of a book, and pilates class! It's a wonder you're still alive! I think I would've keeled over dead by now from exhaustion. Well, best of luck to you, dead choravenclaw. I wish you the best of luck in juggling your busy schedule!
Name: choravenclaw reviewed First meeting on Feb 21, 2010 12:03 pm
oh JT this little thing was no review.
I'm working on a bunch of college projects right no, but i'll send you an actual review as soon as i'm done.


Author's Response: Hehe, it's okay Manu. College is more important than any fanfiction. Fanfic's just more fun. :) I'm just glad that you took the time to read it with your busy schedule, anyway. :)
Name: emenem10 reviewed Captive on Feb 21, 2010 11:40 am
First, there was a lot of glorious diction and alliteration that totally made the emotion in this chapter work, “feel free to freeze.” You can hear his irritation with the situation, soo great! However, I am a smidge confused. First, should it have been “you shouldn’t have killed him MacNair.” That would’ve been enough to get me to stop fighting. Did Ginny dream watching them beat Draco, was it just a nightmare? You wrote something about her being awakened and then experiencing this. I think that’s why I’m confused.
Other than those lingering questions, you’ve produced yet another exemplary chapter filled with very appropriate emotion and characterization. I cannot wait for another one!! Much Love, Emily

Author's Response: *jumps up and down* Thanks for the compliment. I'm really glad that you liked the diction and the alliteration and that the emotions came through, since there were so many in this chaptr . (frustration, anger, sadness, worry, love) As for your questions...that actually is not a typo. I think he meant that MacNair should've killed the husband AFTER they were all done raping her, because once they killed him, she didn't respond as they would've liked. *sighs* poor unnamed narrator. Imagine what would've happened if somebody killed Draco while raping her...As for your second question...I'm really not happy with how I did this part. I might go back and change it after chapter 4. I don't think that I fully conveyed that it was a dream/nightmare. It is definitely a nightmare, though. Draco doesn't die. her subconscious is just putting all her hidden fears into a nightmare. (hehe, I had some people ask me if Draco came back from the dead, so I think I need to go back and make it clear). I had her awake at first, but then she drifted off and then had the dream. Sorry that wasn't clear. I'm going to go fix that problem now, because you're not the first one to tell me that it was confusing. Thank you so much for all your great feedback and kind words, though. They really make my day. :)
Name: emenem10 reviewed Separation on Feb 21, 2010 11:24 am
At the end, Draco’s almost . . . Bitter. Hopefully bitter. No, that’s not the right word. Determined, maybe, but very Draco. Once Again you’ve surprised me (this is sooo refreshing after reading so much and being able to guess the ending). This isn’t how I pictured they ended up together! I thought it would be later than this but this is so very in character. Draco never waited for anything in his life, so him to wait for her to come back to him, ha! Your surprises are so fabulously unexpected but so very in character. This is an accomplishment unto itself. Lovely chapter! Much Love, Emily

Author's Response: At the end, I think that Draco was very bitter (about the H/G, if you can even call it that, scene at graduation). Not only that, but he was definitely determined to have her again. I'm really glad that I surprised you though! I try to shy away from predictability, and it is one of the nicest things to hear when people tell me that I have managed to surprise them with a twist, or something. Their relationship did start really early (she's sixteen in this chapter, I just realized. Marriage at sixteen--wow) And it amkes me really happy to know that Draco is in character and not too OOC. :) Thanks again for reading and for leaving such a great review!
Name: emenem10 reviewed First meeting on Feb 21, 2010 09:05 am
For "glossing over" you've managed to give more insight into the “what could've been” and possibilities. I agree that it would take you too long and I personally don't care what they did on January 10th, blah, blah, blah... Haha. You've managed to capture the emotion and the turmoil and the hope. This is their relationship (or how I see it?) and it's very well portrayed. Excellent work! Much Love, Emily
P.S. Oh! You've made me so happy that I have touched you in some way!!! I put a lot of time and energy into reviews and I'm SO glad that I've accomplished happiness on your part through them!

Author's Response: Yay for Emily! I kind of had to gloss over, since I'm eager to start on my real long fic. I just didn't have enough attention to give to this one, which is why it's so short. And you're right, it would've been boring to explore the day to day life of D/G, so I'm just kind of giving the main points. I'm glad that the emotion came through, as well as the rockiness of their early relationship. :) And you do make me very happy whenever you review! I think I'll always remember you as my very first FIA reviewer. And plus, when I see the same names pop up over and over again, I tend to take extra care in what they say. I'm really glad that you take the time to read and to review, though. It really means a lot to me. :) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Name: TwistedPixie reviewed Captive on Feb 21, 2010 07:13 am
God that scared me! I thought Draco had actually been killed!!....well, as much as a fictional character can be :D

But a great chapter, and a great story. It's always interesting to see how D/G's relationships are formed, as everyone has a different take on them. But really great, I cant wait (rhyming!) for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And haha, I don't know if I clarified that dream scene (where Draco "dies" but not really, since it wasn't real) enough, but Im glad that you got it. I'm glad that you liked the chapter, though. D/G had quite a rocky relationship prior to what they had in "Lady". And as for the next chapter, it'll be the last one, and then I'm done. (a big of rhyming too. :) ) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Name: openskys reviewed Captive on Feb 21, 2010 06:38 am
For this being your second fic this is awesome :) I cannot wait for more!!

Also Draco doesn't excatly explain his reasons haha but I like that Ginny got what they were supposed to mean

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Draco is kind of vague with his reasons--he never tells her outright about why he did it. I don't think he'd be very good at explaining his feelings like that. Ginny definitely got it, though. She knows what would've happened to her if he hadn't saved her, and she's working on making it work with him. Just one more chapter to go, and then we'll be done! :) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Name: scubarang reviewed Captive on Feb 21, 2010 05:56 am
This was a wonderful chapter. It felt really intense in so many ways. I loved Draco in this chapter. Wicked.

This is quite a good story, I'm enjoying it immensely.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad you liked it. This was an intense chapter, so intensely packed with info that I debated splitting it. I ended up keeping it as one because I felt like the memories had to be seen together. I, too, loved Draco. I like making him into a secret sweetie. :) I'm glad that you're enjoying the story. Thanks again for reading and reviewing! (P.S. I laughed quite a bit with your storry on at the scene where Luna is spanking Blaise with a tree branch. Just wanted to let you know. :) )
Name: GoldenFawkes reviewed Captive on Feb 21, 2010 12:02 am
It was really hard to tell that that was a dream. Nightmare, more like.

Did Draco really help her brothers escape?

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing! *sighs* I'm not happy with the way I did that dream scene. I don't think I clarified a lot because I assumed that people who'd read "Lady" would know that Draco didn't really die. It did seem to cause some confusion because I had some people asking if Draco was brought back from the dead. I mentioned in a line that it was a dream, but you're right, it's more like a nightmare for Gin to have to watch Draco die. And as for your's in the next chapter, but *winks significantly and whispers* he got them out of the country a day earlier, but couldn't help any of the others. So, yes, he did. :) Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Name: Lynnamae reviewed Captive on Feb 20, 2010 07:09 pm
I was so excited to see you had updated. This was such a sweet chapter. I loved how it ended!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it. They kind of had to work out some of their problems before they could progress at all. I thought the ending was cute, too. I tried to make it so that in the last line, Ginny would be the one that was possessive of Draco instead of the other way around. I'm glad you liked it. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: That Iz I reviewed Captive on Feb 20, 2010 06:42 pm
I must say, the brilliance of bringing the unknown narrator from Lady into this story is exceptional. Especially since Draco had originally called her out for being "not his type." I suppose he recognized her.

This is lovely, JT. Thank you.
-Isabel V.

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I think you are the ONLY, or one of the only, person that has mentioned the unnamed narrator in their review, and I'm getting super excited now. I was really searching for a way to bring her back from "Lady", but it wouldn't have been right if she'd appeared physically again, so I did it through a memory. And I love that you caught that! Yes, he did recognize her, but he chose not to call her out on it because it would've meant death for her. *sighs* I'm glad that you found some of the little things that correlate between this chapter and "Lady". Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! :)
Name: butterfly2008 reviewed Captive on Feb 20, 2010 05:31 pm
i'm really enjoying this story and i can't wait for the next chapter!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm glad that you're enjoying this story. It's almost over--just one more chapter to go that will wrap everything up nicely. Thanks again for reading and reviewing!
Name: choravenclaw reviewed First meeting on Feb 20, 2010 03:45 pm
OH my God!
I NEED to have your e-mail address!
I just spent the last couple of days with n internet or telephone.
Apparently some idiot thought that carnaval is all about getting drunk, seeing naked women and having no reponsablities...
anyway, some stupid drunk decided to drive a truck around here and he hit some power cables and telephone ones.
What happened?
we just spent the last couple of days with NO phone or internet access.

I started writing you an e-mail on my cell but i realzed i don't have your e-mail!!!
so please, before this accident happens again send me a message or something telling me your e-mail.

I'll start to catch up on my reading and reviewing now.

talk to you soon.


Author's Response: Hey Choravenclaw! I am so terribly sorry about your situation. *sighs* Some idiots just HAVE to ruin everything for everyone. I tried to go without telephone and internet--I couldn't do it. I was so bored and felt like crying from having nothing to do. Especially no D/G for a week. That was torture...Anyways, I'll message you on fb with my email, so that we can keep in contact even if some idiot hits all your (or my) powerlines. :) It's nice to have you back, Manu. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: Akt5us reviewed Captive on Feb 20, 2010 02:05 pm
Oh wow. That was a whirlwind. But I really liked it! I can't wait to read more! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! that was a pretty lengthy chapter to pack up all the little nuances that were getting in the way of their relationship. I debated splitting it into two chapters, but decided to keep it as one instead. I'm really glad that you liked it! Now, there's only one more chapter to go, and then I'll be done. :) Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed First meeting on Feb 20, 2010 01:59 pm
i agree... twinsies :D. my fave B/L fic where he exploits her wackiness is I Have Never Felt Your Fear. i think its amazing. B is a perv and L is nuts and its just perfect. I dont remember if thats the one where N is with P but all the other ships are cool in it. i read one where H and P are 2gether, i dont remember if its Buttercup or not. but i just remember it being believable. definitely separated at birth :D...

-D/G Twinsie :D

Author's Response: Definitely twinsies. :) I love when he exploits her wackiness too! I just recently read on a story by scubarang where he gets her to spank her with a tree branch by telling her that there were imaginary creatures on his butt, and she was trying to get them off for him. That definitely made me laugh a lot. Makes me wonder who popularized B/L in the first place. The earliest I can think of is Misconceptions, but I'm not sure. I can't really recall an H/P, but I'm sure that I've read something about that. *smiles* we shall have to rechristen ouselves D/G Twinsies now. It's more fitting. :)
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed First meeting on Feb 20, 2010 01:37 pm
*jumps on couch like tom cruise* i love when blaise is shipped with luna. i think they are perfect. he's so un-slytherin sometimes in fanon and then she is so loony [in a good way] that they make a nice contrast to the epic battles that get waged in D/G arguments. i love R/Hr, B/L and Pansy with either Harry or Neville. i like the way that flows. Neville treats her like the princess Draco never did or Harry is her humble and loyal servant/sex slave [i always see H/P as being unable to control their collective libidos] shagging on every surface available, or maybe i'm just a perv. that might explain y my fave fics tend to be smutfics.i see D/G like H/P except the love/lust is more balanced, but justt as explosive and epic. i think Hermione is the only person who can keep Ron in check, she's the boss.

-D/G Buddy :D

Author's Response: Oh my goodness, oh my goodness, oh my goodness! We are truly twins. Undeniable, separated-at-birth twins! I LOVE B/L (for the same reasons you do. I love it when he accepts her looniness, and sometimes takes advantage of it sexually) and R/Hr is the only ones I think Hermione should go with, since I despise D/Hr, and H/Hr was shot down by JKR sometime ago (as was D/Hr, yay!). As for Pansy, I WANT HER WITH NEVILLE TOO! That part got me really, really excited because I have almost never heard of Pansy/Neville from anybody, and it made me so, so happy that you liked that ship too. And H/P sounds really, really cool! I hardly read about this one too, but you're right. They would have really nice sex lives. Unfortunately, Harry is not paired with Pansy. He's more of part of the D/G conflict. He'll get his girl in the end, though. And as for smutfics, I love D/G smutty fics too. I like a bit of physical and emotional romance going on. :) *sighs* D/G Buddy, I think you are my long-lost twin. There's just simply no other possibility. This truly defies all reason. :)
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed First meeting on Feb 20, 2010 01:14 pm
dum-dum pops really are boss [i have a ridiculous sweet-tooth]. the memories were kind of a clean slate thing for them, letting her know that he really did care no matter how cruel it looked. im looking forward to seeing the narrator again and of course, long live little pink-haired D/G babies. i generally love blaise as draco's awesome bestfriend, so seeing him as a pervy baddie in this was hard but i see y it was necessary. hopefully in the longer chapter fic, he'll be good and witty and slytherin sexxxy rather than a scary baddie. D/G Buddy present :D

Author's Response: *sighs dreamily* I really love dum-dums, ESPECIALLY root-beer flavor, which is kinda weird. Hmm, now I want a cupcake with pink sprinkles...Haha. We are such twinsies. And Draco will always care for Gin, no matter what. I truly love D/G so much. It takes up all my free time. And I hope they have tons of pink haired babies. Maybe have one while on a trip to Tahiti would be nice. :) I really, really, really love Blaise too! I have no idea why he's such a meanie in this one. Don't worry, Blaise will be good in the next one. He's with Luna, and I don't know if you ship that or not. Ron and Hermione will be together too. But Blaise will definitely be good. No more bad Blaise. :) And D/G buddy severely appreciated and cherished. :)
Name: Nutmeg44 reviewed Captive on Feb 20, 2010 12:48 pm
seriously can i please have the lollipops and gummy bears [they happen to be my favs]. lol ok that chapter was so sad. i feel for both of them. draco having to hear what they had in store for the weasley family over and over again. and ginny for having to relive the 3 horrible memories. im just happy he didnt actually die after the voldy death sentence. great chapter. one more to go...

Author's Response: Hehe, sure you can have some. *throws a dum-dum to Nutmeg44* It was a sad chapter, but this is it for them, WIth a lot of things cleared up between them, they can have their happy family now. She knows that he had to save her and that he runs a risk for doing so. Now, they're free to go procreate beautiful D/G children. :) There's only one more chapter, in which the D/G narrator will make an appearance again to kind of wrap everything up. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! *smiles* You're such an awesome D/G buddy. :)
Name: WolfStar reviewed Separation on Feb 18, 2010 10:49 am
Oh gee, that is one desperate man. But you know that in Great Britain they don't have graduations unless it's from uni, right?

Author's Response: Hehe, Draco is very desperate and for a very good reason. Maybe it's even because he's kind of possessive by nature and can't really stand the idea of sharing. And yikes! I had no idea that Britian doesn't have graduation! *sighs* My Americanisms are really becoming a problem. It's too late to change the graduation scene, but I think I'm going to go back and change graduation to the End Ceremony, or something like that because that is really going to bother me. Thanks for telling me about that and for reading and reviewing! :)
Name: WolfStar reviewed First meeting on Feb 18, 2010 10:25 am
You're a really good author and I love the way this is progressing. I think my favorite part of this chapter is "But soon, she had had no choice but to come to terms that she couldn’t just explain away her feelings for him anymore."

Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! I'm really glad that you like it. This really isn't my favorite piece to write, but people who read "Lady" wanted a sort of prequel to explain the beginning of the D/G relationship, so I came up with an idea for a 3-4 chaptered thing. It's pretty short and should be wrapped up soon enough. Your favorite part is also one of my favorite parts too. :) I like to think that the D/G ichemistry is just too irresistible. Anyways, thanks again for reading and reviewing and for your kind words!
Name: noona1 reviewed Separation on Feb 17, 2010 08:22 pm
Awesome !! Please do update soon ! i hope draco and ginny work it out . when she wakes up she's gonna be pissed LOL

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Don't worry about Draco and Ginny--they'll get through their problems eventually. I don't think I could write a sad ending to D/G. Have you read "Lady of the House"? If you haven't, I strongly recommend doing so because you'll be able to better appreciate chapter 3. As for Ginny, yes, she is going to be very, very angry with Draco, but he really was just doing the best thing for her. Anyways, thanks again for reading and reviewing and for all your kind words!
Name: Lynnamae reviewed Separation on Feb 17, 2010 08:22 pm
Oh my gosh these two chapters were so good. I loved how the first showed how the relationship gradually developed. The second has such a twist- so interesting. Great job, I can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad you liked it! It's not my favorite piece I've written, but a lot of people did review "Lady of the House" and ask for a prequel, so I naturally caved. I think the next chapter's going to basically wrap everything up, and chapter 4 will just be a sort of epilogue-ish type of thing. I was going to submit it yesterday, but I decided to rewrite some parts that I wasn't too happy with. Anyways, thanks so much agan for reading and reviewing and for all your kind words!
Name: Akt5us reviewed Separation on Feb 17, 2010 02:41 pm
I really really like this! I think it's interesting how they Love each other and Draco will do anything to save her. I can't wait to read more! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was hoping that it'd come across as a sort of love relationship. I don't think he would've went through all that trouble have jsut anybody. I know you've read "Lady of the House" already, so you'll be all prepped for Chapter 3, which is the most important chapter in the story. Thanks again for reading and reviewing and for your kind words!
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