Ron is the best character to use for stuff like this.
Good read, had a few laughs.
STT
okay so the beginning was really good but after he took a deep breath and revealed his secret, it went to quickly and sounded too immature. if you could draw out the ending a bit more, this would be an amazing story
ok this was trully random and ooc. not to be brutal, however i didnt find this belivable in the slightest.
make it longer. good plot, but it would be much better if you drew it out longer
Eh...Sorta went tooo fast dont ya think? That's so not like Ginny nor Draco. Ginny wont say Yes to anyone even though she would want to, she always think about what her family thinks. And Draco, yea, its nice to see his obsession on her, but really - talking so much with Ginny in PUBLIC should be really forbidden fro slyntherin.
This was great and terrible all at the same time. Way too rushed, and OOC, the last line needed way more story attached. But I still enjoyed reading it, maybe because it was so out there that it somehow worked.
Keep writing, everyone has to start somewhere (I have not had the guts to put any of my fics up because I am too critcal of them, having readers analyse your fics would be very helpful I'd imagine).
Ok... I don´t flame so I´ll say it nicely... It seems quite silly really, wich doesn´t mean it has no potential, I think you should rewrite it, elaborate it a little more making it a real fluffy shot full of humor, and that causes real laughs and not embarassed laugs!!! (that come out the absurdiness of it all) Ayway I as a reader tell you that it has to be emproved, as an author I tell you that it can be, that you can do it sooo much better, you just have to put yourself into it and spend a little more time on writing! It doesn't come quickly it takes a lot of patience and time!!! GOOD LUCK AND KEEP GOING!!!
Just a few pointers: Both characters were OOC, Draco didn't seem to be 'guarded' at all, or care about what he looked like in public. Also, 'Draco'? In the story, it seemed to me that they had never talked to each other, and had kept up the 'I hate you, etc' facade. So if that's true (if not, I'd go VERY much more into detail about that), then Ginny wouldn't call him Draco. Also, it seemed to me as if Draco went from thinking she was hot to loving her. I would also like some more explanation from this, as well as how he got to know her better. Also, the Clarissa thing needs to be explained. But also, I don't think his parents would just forget him, even though we don't know a lot about them. And even so, Draco wouldn't just pour his soul out to Ginny. And, the biggest thing I have to say, is that Harry and Ron would never just accept him as their friend. Grow to a mutual understanding perhaps, but it would take A LOT of explaining, you know? I've never read any of your works, but people have said they were good, so I'll look for you on ff.net, see if you're there.
Author's Response: Thanks for the pointers. I'm on ff.net, but my username is madabouttom. Ok.
I liked it. Please continue soon. you've got a great plot going.
I think it went a bit fast. You have really great idea's, but I don't really think Draco would do what he did, or the crowd would do that. I like it a lot, but it doesn't seem realistic. But keep up the great work.
ummm... that fic was teribly OOC and it seemed a bit cliched, im sure u can do better than that. ive read ur other works and u are a great writer, maybe how the story was presented could be improved, draco could be a bit more guarded and ginny can say 'malfoy' instead of draco and the beginning.
I feel like you should work on your character development. It's pretty one dimensional with all the characters. You're grammer and spelling seems to be in good shape but try and read some good Draco/Ginny fan fictions, or even any make points on characterization and how certain characters require to certian situations. Making the characters puppets is the worst mistake an author could possibly make in a third P.O.V story. In fan fiction the writer should create and explore a new world or conflict with the characters and use their traits as a means to develop plot. If this seems to be a flame it's not, it's just some constructive criticism. Keep on trying!
Author's Response: Thanks for the pointers. I'll try them with my next story.
That was rather interesting. Draco and Ginny were completely OOC, but I like it nontheless.