I like your descriptions a lot. They create wonderful imagery. I would like to give one criticism though, I think they way you had them both sigh at the same time in this passage (below) is kind of cliché and cheesy.“I know.” said Ron as he wrapped his arm around her. “So much has happened since then, but I still remember everything so clearly.”
They both sighed.
“I know.” said Ron as he wrapped his arm around her. “So much has happened since then, but I still remember everything so clearly.”
They both sighed.
Lovely! I had been waiting since June to read something like this!