Name: Kisou reviewed
Angel on Apr 05, 2006 11:58 am
It's okay not 'ok'. Please don't use slang unless it's neccessary for the character.
I have a hard time believing they would even talk to each other so quickly let alone be good friends. You're going to need a whole lot of backstory including their hate for each other and when things changed before this is going to be at all believable.
Name: Kisou reviewed
Angel on Apr 05, 2006 11:52 am
INGREDIENTS:
1 (18.25 ounce) package devil's food cake mix
1 (3.9 ounce) package instant chocolate pudding mix
2 cups sour cream
1 cup melted butter
5 eggs
1 teaspoon almond extract
2 cups semisweet chocolate chips
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DIRECTIONS:
Preheat oven to 350 degrees F (175 degrees C). Grease a 10 inch Bundt pan.
In a large bowl, stir together cake mix and pudding mix. Make a well in the center and pour in sour cream, melted butter, eggs and almond extract. Beat on low speed until blended. Scrape bowl, and beat 4 minutes on medium speed. Blend in chocolate chips. Pour batter into prepared pan.
Bake in preheated oven for 50 to 55 minutes. Let cool in pan for 10 minutes, then turn out onto a wire rack and cool completely.
Name: flame_kitty reviewed
Angel on Mar 20, 2006 06:10 pm
A very heart-wrenching chapter, I still can't wait to see what happens between them though. It seems as though they are good friends right now, but apart from Draco "rage" there isn't much to suggest they fancy each other.
Name: MrsDanielRadcliffe reviewed
Angel on Mar 13, 2006 11:41 pm
Alright then. It's pretty good.
Name: Sophinna reviewed
Angel on Mar 12, 2006 10:58 pm
Aaah, wow that was beautiful, Dean is such a git!