Name: crookshanksg reviewed
Prologue: In Essence on Feb 21, 2007 11:36 am
Loved it! The humor was very cleverly written. Good job. :)
Author's Response: Thanks!
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Chapter 7: Icing on Feb 21, 2007 10:14 am
good job draco. i swear. omw. great chapter! update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! Hahah. Good job indeed.
Name: azadi reviewed
Chapter 3: Nightmarish on Feb 21, 2007 09:28 am
“His father advanced on him quickly and with more strength than he'd expected. Draco felt himself losing his slight edge and looked to his mother, silently pleading for her to leave. Lucius took advantage of his son's distraction. "Avada Kedavra!"
I take back what I said in my review for chapter two. Lucius is an evil Death Eater!
Author's Response: Yes well...in his defence (though I'm not sure why I'm really bothering) this was well after the majority of the biggest dad/son bonding things...and after Azkaban - who wouldn't be twisted after Azkaban?
Name: azadi reviewed
Chapter 1: Veritaserum on Feb 21, 2007 09:05 am
There were several lines that particular stood out so I thought I’d comment on their awesomeness :)
“and so Trelawney was tolerated - predictions of death and all” – made me chuckle for a full minute.
“as if despite having accepted that many of the things his father told him were lies, finding out that there still were more tore at him.” – The great thing about your characterizations is that you’ve managed to pick up on the subtle things in Canon and give them real depth. From this line, you really get the feeling that despite Lucius being an “evil Death Eater,” there must be something about him that Draco loved. And not just for the fact that he was his Father, but that there was a true connection between father and son that surpasses the obligatory “heir to the millions” sort of thing. Draco’s character is manipulated enough that it is still remarkably in tune with canon.
“Ginny - the spitfire he loved to hate” – though this has become a cliché over the years in this fandom the really is no other way to describe your Ginny- she is exactly that!
The plot seems to be taking shape beautifully. A great chapter :D!
Author's Response: Thank you, again, for the lovely review (though I'm shamefully behind in replying). "And so Trelawney was tolerated - predictions of death and all" might just be my favorite line in the whole thing so far. As for Draco's dad, just because he's a DE does not mean that he's a bad father, yes he might have different opinions on appropriate behavior and punishment, but don't we all? Besides, he is a human, despite his (many) flaws.
Name: azadi reviewed
Prologue: In Essence on Feb 21, 2007 08:49 am
Why I have never read this before is beyond me. Your characterisations, the flow of the language, the dialogue and the plot are all wonderfully executed. There is a naïve sharpness to Ginny that I rather liked - you’ve maintained the concept of her being a teenager, but also have hinted at the potential of her blossoming into a mature young women. As for Hermione, this is probably one of the best depictions I have read of her – she’s a know it all agreed, but one that can tolerate a joke and understand the complexities of relationships beyond the black and white canvas they are painted on. A wonderfully intriguing first chapter – I look forward to reading the rest!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the lovely review. I really do struggle with portraying the characters sometimes. Ginny in particular, because I like her bubbly and happy and innocent, but at the same time, I know there's this association and understanding of 'dark' things. And thank you for the reassurance on Hermione, I never feel like I hit the balance with her quite right. She understands, but she doesn't quite know how to go about expressing herself, I suppose.
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 7: Icing on Feb 21, 2007 04:48 am
OUCH! Could Draco be MORE clueless? Seriously. This was so incredibly well done. I am really floored. You have captured all of them characterizations just so well. Really Really great job! I am totally favouriting! ;)
Author's Response: Awesome! Thank you for reviewing all of the chapters (I think I've been following right behind you with the reviews, as every time I come back there's a new one to do, haha.)! I'm glad I've at least hit the characterizations right. If you have them mostly right, it's hard to screw everything up completely. =D
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 6: Tealeaf Trouble on Feb 21, 2007 04:38 am
Holy Crap! A prophecy. Wow! I was going to comment on the humour and the hillariously well written Trelawny -- but holy hell - a prophecy. My guess - Draco is the one marked... no? Ginny is the one being guarded -- strength is gaurding her? Ahghg... I'm all a flutter! ;)
Author's Response: Ah good. I worried I was taking far too many liberties with Trelawny. It doesn't really matter, because I was going to attribute them to lack of alcohol, as I like her this way too. lol. She's surprisingly accurate on her teacups (what, even old bats should get their day! ) as well. It must be the increased spirits in the room.
And yay, I've not made the prophecy entirely see-through.
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Feb 21, 2007 04:32 am
HEE HEE HEE! Really Really good.
And it was blond fringe. Yes, she was having a sex!dream about blond fringe! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you! And yes, I never said what kind of fringe... but there was definitely a smirk in there.
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 4: Ravenclaw's Wand on Feb 21, 2007 04:25 am
SO good. Well, first of all, you KNOW a chapter is going to be brilliant if Ginny is underneath Draco... but then everythig else -- Harry being slow on the uptake - the interesting developments... Really well done! I'm just hoping you will complete this before HDH comes out this summer - I've seen too many brilliant fics stopped and left uncomplete because new canon comes out and they don't want to write AU. ;)
PS. If JKR kills off Draco I am reading this as the 'proper' books 7 -- just so you know! ;)
Author's Response: Well. No pressure or anything, lol. Though it is my goal to finish before DH comes out (not likely, unfortunately), I can't quit. I've irritated far too many people with my D/G natterings to back out (and hope to live) without finishing just because the 7th book came out. Thank you again for the insightful review(s)!
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 3: Nightmarish on Feb 21, 2007 04:09 am
Totally absorbing. The cuts from his dream to reality, SO well done. Great Great chapter. Ginny's muttering was very real - paints her in exactly the picture that I think she is meant to be - my only complaint is that now Ron seems to have reverted into Harry's whipping boy -- giving Ginny dark looks instead of the supportive Ron he was a few chapters back. But yeah -- I have really really enjoyed this. Totally a classic in the making!
Author's Response: Again, thank you for the review! I'm glad you find the changes in pov well done - I was worried that they were choppy / confusing. As for Ron, I try, I just don't seem to hit that balance very often - like with Hermione. He's Ginny's brother, and yes, if she's upset he's upset and by golly, someone is going to pay - Harry or not... but when it's secret-trio-business, I suppose I feel like he feels that Ginny doesn't really have any business there anyway. Perhaps I should work on clarifying that.
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 2: The Difference on Feb 21, 2007 03:56 am
Wow. Completely blown away. Yes, I am completely blown away. Ginny's raw power... the secret room. WOW!
Author's Response: Thank you! I believe the story I got the memory wall idea from was in a one shot (that might have been expanded to be a trilogy? I never followed up...) by OriginalDarkAngel. She was all for sharing, as what I had in mind was different (and hopefully, at some point or another, more involved) than her mentioning the wall as part of a location. Of course, there was no such room... soo it was time to play. =D
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Chapter 1: Veritaserum on Feb 21, 2007 03:45 am
Really Really fantastic chapter. From beginning to end I was on the edge of my seat. I loved that all Ron had to do was see the twins and their ire towards Harry to join in (I get really sick of the stories that have Clueless!Overprotective!Ron and make himthicker than a post - you did well with him here.
And then Malfoy. You have dissected his psyche and done it well.
"Mummified human body parts do not make good conversational art pieces, nor will they ever... " No no they don't but I can completely see Draco saying it in his wry tone.
Great Great chapter! ;)
Author's Response: Again, thank you! Malfoy's psyche is confusing business sometimes, quite often he brings up inventive strings of curses I would never have thought to put together on my own.
And the mummified line is one of my very, very favorites - if I do say so myself. I fancy myself witty sometimes. But really, the Blacks were twisted folk, some artifacts would've had to been missed, or horded by F&G. How else would he react?
Name: jandjsalmon reviewed
Prologue: In Essence on Feb 21, 2007 03:30 am
What a fabulous beginning. I love his snooty snorts and Hermione's POV is brilliant. Unique and brilliant! YAY for more chapters! ;)
Author's Response: Thank you! I must say, I'm a sucker for alliteration, though I try to keep it to a minimum. I'm always afraid I never hit quite the right balance with her... I'm glad that pov worked out well enough. It was definitely a risk. =D
Name: Mynuet reviewed
Chapter 7: Icing on Feb 21, 2007 01:41 am
As said elsewhere, I love it. :D I think Ginny's finally seeing Harry as he really is... Gee, I wonder who's responsible for her clear-headedness? As opposed to Draco - where his head is, I won't speculate, other than to say I think it's very dark due to the lack of any sunshine.
Author's Response: Haha. Thank you for the lovely review. And yes... the Harry/Ginny mess must be wound down before anything else - responsible for enlightenment or not can be wound up. Of course, the enlightener would also be well served to remove himself from this dark abyss you speak of.
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Chapter 6: Tealeaf Trouble on Jan 30, 2007 03:07 pm
omw! update now! omw!
Author's Response: Thanks, and have done. (I was going to say will do, but then it's already been updated...past tense for will do is somewhat tricky.)
Name: sweet gurl reviewed
Chapter 6: Tealeaf Trouble on Jan 29, 2007 06:13 pm
the last paragraph was hilarious!!!!! XD
i cant wait till next chpt!!!
plzplzplz update asap
Author's Response: Thank you for the review!
Name: imelda reviewed
Chapter 6: Tealeaf Trouble on Jan 29, 2007 06:05 pm
Heehee! I loved that last bit--like a 'Got Milk?' commercial. It's cute the way Ginny teases Malfoy and the way their quasi-friendship is developing.
This chapter was a bit frustrating, since not much happened up until the prophecy. But I am curious to see what they will do next, and hope you update soon!
Author's Response: Really? That's what I thought too... except I will say, Got Draco is much more appealing than 'Got Milk?' Oh. Draco in a milk mustache could be very, very nice as well. Well, that's all there is to it. Milk-mustached Draco will simply have to be worked in.
Thank you for the review! And chapter 7 (8) was added this morning!
Name: Lottie reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Jan 24, 2007 08:43 am
I love how Draco and Ginny interact! I can't wait to see them together more often!
Author's Response: Thank you... and I'm working on it. Hehe. =D
Name: temptingfate reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Jan 23, 2007 02:53 pm
This is a really good story. I can't wait to read more. Thanks so much for writing it and well sharing it with us.
Author's Response: Aww, thanks!
Name: Flipinpenname reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Jan 23, 2007 07:39 am
awwwww loving the story! update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you! ((And I will))
Name: dgloves70 reviewed
Prologue: In Essence on Jan 23, 2007 07:32 am
I loved it! I wonder if Harry also notices that Draco and Ginny are spending too much time with one another. I am glad that the rest are going to realize that Ginny is someone that will be valuable to the cause. Hooray, I was wondering when Ron and Hermione were going to express themselves with one another. I so love them and I think it was cute how Ron was with talking with Ginny and getting her input about Hermione's gift.. Absolutely cute!
Love it and look forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you very much! I just submitted Chapter 6 (and went back and made a few more edits to chapter 5). Glad to hear you're enjoying it. =D
Name: adorame reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Jan 23, 2007 02:41 am
I realy like how smothly your story is moving! I look forward to another chapter soon, I hope!
Author's Response: Thank you!
Name: aaliokulta reviewed
Chapter 5: Constant Vigilance on Jan 22, 2007 06:41 pm
I love this story. I was writing one sort of like it (Draco living at Grimmauld Place) but you do it sooo much better. I give up. :)
Author's Response: Oh, psshw. Good heavens, don't give up because of this! Work it out - keep writing. And thank you for the incredibly sweet comment. =D
Name: Blueeyedbrunette reviewed
Chapter 4: Ravenclaw's Wand on Jan 01, 2007 06:34 pm
very good..please keep going!!
Author's Response: Thank you! I plan on it. =D
Name: witty6of7 reviewed
Chapter 4: Ravenclaw's Wand on Jan 01, 2007 03:07 pm
I love This fic please keep updating
Author's Response: Thanks! I have the next two chapters at the beta's. Expect an update soon. =D