Ginny and Draco have been in a secret relationship since the end of the war and the stakes have just got higher...Category: Works in Progress
Great story. Please keep going. The beginning of the story really helped to capture my attention. I applaud you. Only thing that I think needs a little work is the dialouge, some of it seems a little forced and predictable. I know that it always helps me to write a scene and then read over it again, and if something is not up to your standards (can you tell I'm a perfectionist lol) then you rewrite it. Usually, at least for me, it comes out sounding better. Just wanted to let you know. But really, you are a very talented writer. Keep going!
Author's Response: As a perfectionist myself, I do tend to re-read exhaustively. I\'m sorry you find my dialogue lacking, however I wonder if it might be a nationality thing? I dont know if you are american/canadian or English, but the cadances of different accents may play a large part in changing the interpretation of a sentance. As a brit, I am happy with most aspects of the dialogue. there are a couple of sentances I couldn\'t manage to express more eloquently, however I write as I speak - the sentance you\'re reading? Its the way I would say it. Also, please note that it is /implied/ in your review that I have been careless and sloppy in my chapter construction and have not re-read or corrected poor sentances - this is not the case, I am prone to edit entire chapters just to correct a symbology error in the webpage coding, so I feel it a little patronising to be told that perhaps I should re-read my scenes while I am writing them... o.O\r\n\r\nBut thank you for your review.
With the defeat of the Order of the Phoenix and the capture and unknown fate of her family, Ginny Weasley does what she has to to survive until events catapult her into the safe keeping of a Death-Eater-in-Disgrace whose agenda is his own and whereupon she learns that not everything is as it seems and that she is not the only one with hidden demons. Warnings for attempted Rape, violence and very, super-mild HBP spoilers.Category: Works in Progress
Love it. It is different than the others and that makes me happy. Keep going.
Two and a half years after his failure to kill Albus Dumbledore, Draco has long been accepted back into the ranks of the Death Eaters. He is still obsessively searching for the rebel Ginny Weasley, but he hides that secret well. When she is found one snowy December night, he smuggles her onto the Death Eaters? train with him. And he begins to learn that nothing will ever be the same again?Category: Works in Progress
I love this story and I think you are doing a wonderful job with it. Although sometimes some of the things you write about are a bit over the top fantastical, your method of writing about them and your writing style do make it work. I just had one nit-picky thing that I wanted you to be aware of. Sorry, I know I'm a dork. A chapter or two ago, you mentioned Avalon sinking beneath the seas. But, in myth, Avalon never sunk beneath the seas, that was Atlantis. Avalon, on the other hand, was hidden behind a veil of mist. IDK, sorry, I just wanted to let you know. But keep going and I am very much looking forward to the ending of this story!
Author's Response: That was not clear and did get kind of confused (my fault! :) Avalon was hidden behind mists. The secret inner kingdom of Stonehenge sank beneath the seas; Muggles (that would be us) understand this as the Neolithic-era British Isles civilization that actually did end up under the North Sea. Nobody yet knows how advanced this civilization was, but it\'s considered one of the most exciting finds of all time in underseas anthropology. :)
Cliffhangers torture me. Please update soon.... I love this story!!!
Ginny Weasley was Draco's ticket out - his way of reaching Dumbledore, getting the Malfoy fortune that he deserved, and leaving the war firmly behind him. Unfortunately, fate had other plans for both of them.Category: Works in Progress
This story is really good. I love all of the things you write. Keep going!
Draco could probably concentrate better on his psychology class if it weren’t for two things: he’s hiding out at Hogwarts from a murderous Voldemort, and Ginny Weasley is his tutor. It’s a sunny Saturday afternoon at the library, and Draco and Ginny are all alone. Will the primordial sexual drives of the id win out? Was Carl Rogers right about the power of unconditional positive regard? And why does existential angst have to keep rearing its ugly head? AU, set during Draco’s seventh year.Category: Works in Progress
Love it. Your writing reminds me of my favorite fic from a WHILE ago that was taken off the interwebs... but yeah. I love your stories. I love the random bits of humor you throw in, and I like how things are a bit different from the rest of your writing. I am really excited to see where things go.
And watch out for those fuckers with the nets, they'll do all manner of things to try and catch you. I think you can outwit them though, no worries.
Love the different style.... lots of fun to be had. HAHA. Can't wait to see what happens... and I think Ginny and Draco should hook up soon. I am dying for all this sexual tension, I can't imagine how they must feel!