Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Oct 25, 2006 Title: Chapter 19: 18. Truth be told

Wow.

Yes I am perfectly aware that that’s a rather crude response for such a brilliant chapter but I am left quite speechless to say anything of particular coherence. The revelation of her identity was wonderfully written. This line:

“Her hand was on the door-handle when one of the table knives whizzed a few millimeters from her face and buried itself into the door. She felt the blade trembling against her cheek, closer to her skin than her own hair.

"I suggest you come back to the table, Ginevra," came Draco's voice.”

left me chilled to the core, it was that evocative. I loved the entire setup particular the part where Ginny doesn’t realise what she answered to Draco’s last question. The monotony and repetitive nature of the question and answer sequence is beautifully staged. An amazing chapter – I look forward to see how the rest unfolds :D.

Author's Response: This is definitely not a crude review!! :) Thanks for the elaborate response! I\'m glad you enjoyed the confrontation. I wanted it to go smoothly, because it fits more with Draco\'s character than a temper tantrum would--at least in front of Ginny. I\'m delighted to see you like my story :D

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Feb 12, 2007 Title: Chapter 24: 23. The terrible doings of Draco Malfoy

Stunning portrayal of him confronting Ginny. I was chilled to the bone by your description of his countenance and idea of retribution. It was staggeringly accurate of how Draco would aim for an opponents weak points. My favourite line had to be this one: “They were burning with an anger so ravaging that his irises were of a pale, platinum gray, nearing the white of metal when it has been heated in the forge.” This chapter had me on tenterhooks from the very beginning, and the way you write tension is magnificent! Despite the illusion of calmness you can really feel it rippling under your words. Whilst I don’t think a happy ending is looming for these two I do look forward to the next chapter :D!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Jul 10, 2006 Title: Chapter 1: The Chronicles of Weasley: the handcuffs, the bubbles, and an odd sock.

"Bill and Fred let go of Charlie, who jetted over to Malfoy, who ducked behind Ginny, who swung her fists at Bill, who slightly missed it and hit Percy, who had just flooed in and accepted an unexpected punch in the face." - this line had me in stitches. And the caveman speech demonstrated by Ron was just too funny! A delightful read although I am a tad confused by the sock thing but other than it was brilliant!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Mar 05, 2007 Title: Chapter 17: Chapter 17

This chapter made my heart soar. It was exquisitely written; Draco’s character was splendidly performed from the slow realisation of him appreciating Ginny, to his rather scandalous pinch of her arse. Narcissa and Ginny’s interaction was delightful to read as well, and I love how you have fleshed out Pansy, but all the while maintaining her grudge of all that is Weasley. My favourite line had to be this one: “Follow where I go. And if you stumble, don’t stop, just go on,” because it really is entirely appropriate for these two in general, but I love how you managed to make it fit with the context of the ball. A really amazing chapter, I look forward to the next update :D!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much for reviewing, and telling me what you liked in detail! :) I appreciate it. I'm glad you feel Draco's development is both believable and enjoyable too. After the issues in the previous chapters, I enjoy writing the D/G dynamic and their growing familiarity. I love them together! Happy you liked this!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Oct 10, 2006 Title: Chapter 5: Railroads

“normally it was more of a “shut up, ferret boy” type of thing rather than a logical and somewhat scathing analysis of the situation.” I loved this line – it’s a very accurate assessment of what some other writers do in their fics (although I hardly think you meant it as a barb at other people) but nonetheless very well said! This chapter almost seems like the calm before the storm; you’re slowly building the tension and I look forward to seeing it unfold. Good luck with the next chapter :D.

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Sep 24, 2006 Title: Chapter 3: A Spot of Trouble - Chapter 3

“Well, isn’t this just a bit unpleasant,” Thornbury observed pithily – very amusing!

“Honestly, how was he supposed to know she was about to be married if she didn’t tell him?” – Bill’s quite the playboy isn’t he :D!

I’m so intrigued by this story – you’ve done a wonderful job of portraying the characters – particularly Bills (considering that in your main story arc - Tangled Web - we never get to see his reaction to Draco and Ginny’s relationship). In short a refreshing and unique fic that leaves me wanting more. I look forward to the next chapter :D!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I thought I\'d do something for Bill since I killed him off in the other fic. I\'m so glad you like what I\'m doing!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Oct 25, 2006 Title: Chapter 1: Harry Gets a Bit of a Crush

A wonderfully amusing fic that looks very promising. I look forward to seeing more :D

Author's Response: ;)

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Feb 21, 2007 Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 1: Veritaserum

There were several lines that particular stood out so I thought I’d comment on their awesomeness :)

“and so Trelawney was tolerated - predictions of death and all” – made me chuckle for a full minute.

“as if despite having accepted that many of the things his father told him were lies, finding out that there still were more tore at him.” – The great thing about your characterizations is that you’ve managed to pick up on the subtle things in Canon and give them real depth. From this line, you really get the feeling that despite Lucius being an “evil Death Eater,” there must be something about him that Draco loved. And not just for the fact that he was his Father, but that there was a true connection between father and son that surpasses the obligatory “heir to the millions” sort of thing. Draco’s character is manipulated enough that it is still remarkably in tune with canon.

“Ginny - the spitfire he loved to hate” – though this has become a cliché over the years in this fandom the really is no other way to describe your Ginny- she is exactly that!

The plot seems to be taking shape beautifully. A great chapter :D!

Author's Response: Thank you, again, for the lovely review (though I'm shamefully behind in replying). "And so Trelawney was tolerated - predictions of death and all" might just be my favorite line in the whole thing so far. As for Draco's dad, just because he's a DE does not mean that he's a bad father, yes he might have different opinions on appropriate behavior and punishment, but don't we all? Besides, he is a human, despite his (many) flaws.

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Nov 10, 2006 Title: Chapter 1: It's Hard to be a Monster

“they were going to have a polite child if it killed her” --> I don’t think she’d fancy meting a 16 year old Liam then *chuckles*

“talking softly to his duck, while his parents got their act together.” --> I can now totally understand why in later fics Ginny bemoans the loss of her sweet baby boy *sigh*

A wonderful fic that gives a lovely insight on the Malfoy family before Gareth’s birth; amazing stuff :D!!

Author's Response: Ginny would be appalled if she knew how her child turns out - she\'d be far more strict if she knew then what she knows when Li Li is 16! Thank you for the wonderful review!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Jan 02, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1 - Here take mine

“now the ‘rules of cool’ required he say as little as possible to his family members and mumble the few responses he did give” – ah the joys of being a teenager. I loved the interaction between Wynn and Mirabelle (it reminded me a lot of how my own brother acts lol). The story seems very interesting and I like the thought process behind it. I look forward to seeing how you correlate their past events with the present. Great work so far, I look forward to an update :D!

p.s) also the formatting seems to have gone a little a bit awry, it was initially fine in the beginning but something seems to have messed it up. Slightly irrelevant but I thought I’d mention it nonetheless :D!

Author's Response: No, no - THANK YOU for mentioning the formatting. It looked fine in the preview and in the text entry. It drives me batty when authors leave out paragraph breaks.
Glad you enjoyed Wynn and Mirabelle torturing each other the way siblings so love to do. Thanks so much for taking time to review and I am glad it rings true so far! ~Ves

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Jan 03, 2007 Title: Chapter 2: Snippets

I think that the whole purpose of making Ginny slightly timid and naïve in Before The Storm was a setup to show how she has matured and changed in The Storm. Don’t get me wrong I loved Ginny’s portrayal in that, but this Ginny is stronger and more mature. The growth is clearly evident in her and slightly less so in Draco – like the tables have turned. Though it would be amazingly amazing to have a full version, I think to a certain extent it works equally as well just as it is. The little snippets of their relationship give us enough information that we ca piece the puzzle as to what happened ourselves. Yet again this another breathtaking piece of work I look forward to see how you conclude this :D!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Mar 10, 2007 Title: Chapter 1: Timestamp 1 - Gareth Unbound

*pats*

Bless, at least he learnt early on that it's better to cater to the whims of his little sister than to resist and face her wrath. A lovely snippet :)

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: azadi Signed
Date: Mar 28, 2007 Title: Chapter 3: A Civilized Wizard

Dear Draco,

If you exit that bed, the hammer that has currently been used to bludgeon my heart on numerable instances before this, shall be put to other (more creative and unpleasant) uses.

No Love

Azadi

As for you fallenwitch: your writing is yet again superb. This line made my heart clench with despair: “He was instantly transported back to a girl he once knew, to a boy who no longer existed, to a place long since destroyed. It was this lost world that he dreamed about and longed for.” Why does he long for it when it so very clearly there? Why is that place destroyed? Why? Why? WHY? I guess we shall just have to wait and see. Fantastic chapter, I look forward to your next update :D!