After frighteningly realistic dreams lead Ginny to France, she finds herself thrust into the middle of a war no one knows about, led by a man no one would have ever suspected. Can she save him from an unimaginable fate? Will she make it out of France alive?Category: Works in Progress
Another great chapter. This story really should have more reads and reviews. I think its really very, very good. It started a little slow which may have put off some readers.
I only ever give contructive criticism to stories I really, really like (can't be bothered with those I am not so keen on) so I hope you will take my musings as feedback with the best intentions.
1. I think this story would work better if they were adults. There is no obvious reason why they have to be Hogwarts age and it just feels like they wouldn't be this mature if Ginny is really 16. I just think you could do more if they were just a little bit older.
2. Looking back now (8 chapters in) I wonder if the visions in the first few chapters should be shorter - less detailed than when the events really happen. When I read those sections (like when she first meets Draco), it felt like an exact repeat of the vision. If the visions were a little less detailed, it would add to the mystery of it all and make the real life sections a bit more interesting. Although, with the latest vision/action - that worked REALLY well as the vision was vague and then when it really happened we got all the action.
Overall - I really do like this. I get a little thrill when I see you've updated!! I look forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: First of all, thank you so much for the review, and the constructive criticism. I have taken it as you meant it. \r\n\r\nFor your first point, Ginny\'s actually seventeen in my fic (making Draco eighteen), and while one year may not make a huge difference in the real world, I\'ve tried to show how much the war has affected both Ginny and Draco and how it has forced them mature more quickly than they would have done in a warless wizarding society. I\'ve also tried to balance the cast, if you\'ll allow the terminology. Fiona and Maurice both are more youthful in their demeanour and reactions, and I think (though I may be wrong) that they temper out not only the gravity of the situation but also Draco and Ginny\'s tendency to lean toward the serious end of the spectrum. And then there\'s Adrienne, who is just plain grumpy :)\r\n\r\nAs for your second point, I agree. If I had the time to go back and rewrite the first three or four chapters I would definitely make some alterations to the length and detail of the original visions. When I began, my intentions were to give readers a little bit of action to tide them over until she made it to France. Also, Ginny\'s the development of Ginny\'s \'inner eye\' has rushed off in a totally different direction than I had planned, as will be demonstrated in the next chapter, so I am now regretting how I handled earlier visions. If I ever get around to a revision, I will most definitely change that.\r\n\r\nAgain, thank you so much, not only for reading the story, but taking the time to leave such a detailed and constructive review! You\'re every author\'s dream reviewer. I think I mentioned it in my author\'s note, but chapter nine is almost finished and I\'m hoping *crosses fingers* to submit it this weekend.\r\n\r\n
Eeeeeek! So much action.....cannot read fast enough....must slow down.
You're going to kill me girl. Cannot wait for the next chapter. Am dying for the romance!
Author's Response: *Squeals girlishly* Thank you! The end of the chapter was supposed to be a little romantic, but it was too long. I\'m posting it today, so you should have it in no time!
Ginny finds herself waking up in a most unusual location, and ponders how she got there.Category: Completed Short Stories
Oh this was great. Based on a fabulous story and what I really liked is that you captured the same tone to Draco and Ginny as Emeral_eyes did in her story. I thought it was great and I really enjoyed it.
Ahhhhhh - love this. Just re-read it again. Shame it only has 5 reviews - its so, so good and well written.
Author's Response: Thanks! So glad you like it so much. But I don't mind that it doesn't get many reads. It was my first post in fanfic, so really, it's just a tribute to Emeral_Eyes' incredible tale. Her work inspired me so very much. But thank you so much for the compliment, and I'm so happy that it stands up to a re-read.
Hugs!
G
Twelve days can be a lifetime, yet Epiphany must always come.Category: Completed Short Stories
Oh wow. That was so sad, i actually have tears in my eyes. Really well written. I loved that you layered it and told us the story gently and gradually.
Author's Response: Thank you! It just flowed to me in bits and pieces. Hopefully I didn\'t ruin any holiday cheer, though!
Draco Malfoy watched Ginny Weasley for years. Now, ten years after leaving Hogwarts, he has his chance in the world of big business.Category: Works in Progress
Woohoo! This story is so, so good. Love it. Nice pace to things and a good balance between character building and well...steamy goodness. :)
She wanted to pay him back, to make him hurt the same way she did. And so begins a game of revenge, of seduction, of lust, of pride and of love.Category: Works in Progress
Brilliant! Youv'e set up a completely plausible, believale scenario for the two of them to come together. I totally love how Ginny is characterized because I think she would be very feisty and see this as a way to get back at Draco. I also think she realizes that her beauty/attractiveness is something that she can use to draw him in. Absolutely love it!
“There’s this mirror,” she told him. “And I need to use it.”Category: Completed Short Stories
Winner of Darkest Fic and Best Interpretation of the Prompt at the 2008 D/G Fic Exchange.
Wow! That was amazing. SO interesting to reads something so different and unexpected. I had to re-read sections because it wasn't obvious. Really, really amazing and creative ideas!
The idea of "renting" her soul out to anyone - let alone a former Slytherin nemesis - did not sit well with Ginny Weasley. But circumstances always tend to go askew and when she finds herself in a dire position, Ginny has no choice but to relent, accepting the deal and the seven wishes offered as payment.Category: Long and Completed
I'm really enjoying this story. Well done! Ginny and Draco are well characterised. The situation is completely unique and original. Somehow, the fact that Draco is a wand maker is so wonderful because again it is unique and different. Just great!
Ginny's knack for getting into trouble follows her as she goes away for college, forcing her into a dangerous situation.Category: Works in Progress
Love iot so far. Your "voice" is always so good. Its a nice style and i like ginny. Very personable. But.....Glasgow! Please - at least put the uni in edinburgh! :) but a very inspired start and i love pansy so don't make her too awful.
Author's Response: Thank you! I\'m happy to hear you like my Ginny\'s narration! ^^ I know; the university\'s not in Glasgow proper, more like on the outskirts. No, no; Pansy\'s not going to be too awful for I\'m rather fond of her myself. Ginny\'s biased at first, but she\'s not as bad as Ginny makes her out to be.
Hired by the Malfoys to manage their public relations after a bout of bad press, Ginny discovers that some relationships just aren't meant to stay strictly professional.Category: Long and Completed
Whopee!! Such quick updates. This story has been really fun. It just always leaves me with a big smile on my face. Can't wait for the epilogue!
Author's Response: Yay, I\'m glad you liked it! Thank you for reviewing!
Selling herself into a marriage contract, Ginny finds herself playing a deadly game, ultimately pitting her husband against her lover and a father against his son. Many twists and turns, depth and evil characters - and a long story of sweet and true love.Category: Long and CompletedNew! Epilogue is up! Yes, I know, the story has been "complete" for a couple of years, but this ending has been partially written for a long time and it ties up some loose ends.
Loving this story! That was so disturbing. Thank you for having Draco actually use the word rape as this is exactly what Lucius is doing to her. Am curious how they will get Ginny out of this horrible situation.
Author's Response: Well the good news is that the chapter is already written, the bad news is that it's quite a few chapters away... Thank you!
The fallout of a magical clandestine war is difficult to wade through, and reconstructing society takes work to be done right. Unfortunately, too many old prejudices remain. Ginny sees the world for what it is and is determined to fix it properly. This leads to all sorts of unlikely allies.Category: Works in Progress
Am LOVING this story. I can't believe more people haven't reviewed. Thing I love about your smutty scenes is that they are always very sexy but real. And there is a background that is real too - I could see the politics of post-war Wizarding Britain being like this. Just love it!
Author's Response: I\'m a storyporn kinda girl. I work in the smut, but there needs to be a point to it and a plot to the overall story. I\'m glad you\'re the same way. :) The original drabble really drew me in because of the difficulties in Post-war Britain. JKR glossed over all that, but I really wanted to see it. That\'s what made this story fun for me, and also writing aspects of the characters in ways that are a little different from what I\'m used to was great.
"The day began just like any other for Astoria Malfoy, but it didn’t stay that way for long."Category: Works in Progress
Ten years after the DH Epilogue, Harry Potter dies and everyone else is left to pick up the pieces.
Great start! I like the fact that you told us through Astoria's eyes. A very different device but effective. I look forward to more.
Draco brings out thirteen darn good excuses, but none of them seem to be working. Inspired by this site's "blanket" skin.Category: Completed Short Stories
That was so sweet! I really liked it. Its the fanfic equivalent of a cup of hot chocolate - yum!
Author's Response: Ooh, I write hot chocolate? That's like a dream come true! Thanks. :)
Convicted and incarcerated after the war, Draco is unexpectedly given a new lease on life.Category: Works in Progress
Ooooh, this is great. I like reasonable Harry and feel bad for Draco. 20 years!! I look forward to more
Author's Response: Thank you! I figured Harry's had a few years to get some perspective and would still be addicted to doing the right thing anyway. :)
Love, love, love! Although I want more DG interaction, I'm really enjoying getting to know Draco and the development.
Author's Response: Yay! I'm glad you are liking it so far. More D/G interaction in the next chapter! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment!
Fresh-faced Ministry employee meets her... nemesis?Category: Works in Progress
Written by Mynuet and Persephone33.
Love it! I've been following the RPG and its nice to see a bit more of the back story. Love their bantering but at the same time just want to scream - "oh kiss her already!".
He chanced upon it much like the others did. By simply wandering about the streets of Dublin; somewhat safe from the bloody awful mess he created back home. A portal that led to a place where every dream became reality.Category: Works in Progress
Very intriguing! You've got me interested. Am looking forward to the next installment.
Author's Response: Thanks! :D
A story of falling.Category: Long and Completed
Oh I LOVE this story. I read it like 3 times on LJ over Christmas. Its just so good - lovely plot, chracterisation, sex. It just flows so nicely. And this line - "she knew deep down into her most secret places that she wanted him in the forever kind of way", just makes me squeal. Fantastic job!!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. I actually questioned that line's relative cheesiness, but decided it was okay after I realized how it felt like it was influenced by some of my favorite literature.
A chubby Draco and the physical trainer from hell. What more can I say? A D/G twist on dieting and an ending sweeter than candy floss. Enjoy. :)Category: Long and Completed
i just looooooove this story. I wish I could explain why but its the great characterisation, lovely Draco, its funny, its engaging, exciting. Sigh. I just can't get enough! More please.
Author's Response: Oh, you are so sweet. Thank you! next chap is almost ready to go. They need "soak" time, however. I tend to re-read them a lot to get them right.
Oh its great! Such a completely unique idea. Hee hee - I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: Thank you! I love being unique! Glad it gave you a smile and I'm sure future chapters will too. :)
Thrilled with the update. I'd just been craving another dose of this great story. I think it was brilliant. Really brought home Draco's hard work and committment and i like how ginny gained respect for him. Loved it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Wanted to keep the story light, but I guess I needed a bit of a villain. Greatly appreciate the feedback!!!
Ginny is shocked to discover just how different Muggles are when it comes to sex.Category: Works in Progress
Love it! Very creative idea and well written. Oooh, the possibilities are endless....
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you for reading and reviewing :)
Draco tries to take advantage of a situation he finds himself in, but he’s not really in any fit state to follow through.Category: Completed Short Stories
Thats quite funny. I like the juxtaposition (eeek - such a pretentious word) of stuffy Draco and wild Ginny. Great characterisation for such a short story
Author's Response: Thank you :) Well, he's stuffy until he realizes his pants are off and there's a girl present ;)