that was fantastic. i read a lot of fanfiction and i enjoy it, but i dont very often think its good quality-wise...this was. very well-written. congratulations!

and i dont normally enjoy non-consenual fics, but this was good.

the only thing i'd say as far as criticism goes is, and i hate to pick on spelling but i see this in so many fics, a few times you say "defiantly" when you mean "definitely" and those are very different words.

but seriously, this was probably the best-written fanfic i've ever read. keep writing more stuff!