Name: SugarAndSpice reviewed
Everything's So Blurry on Sep 02, 2007 02:48 am
You're a great author.
(I know the statement's a bit blunt but, whatever.
Author's Response: Thanks, I appreciate it.
Name: Kaerra (still lazy) reviewed
Everything's So Blurry on Jun 23, 2004 01:34 pm
Hmmm... your characterization of Lucius is interesting. I don't think I quite agree with you that he'd be that cold towards his own son, but I can see why you'd take that approach with him. The best characterization of Lucius that I've ever read was done by our own Mynuet, in the fic whose title is presently eluding me that features Ginny visiting Lucius in Azkaban. I like it because it shows Lucius as a powerful man interested in keeping and maintaining that power, but not a totally heartless, EVIL person. I sometimes think the evilness can be carried too far. Even Tom Riddle has his weaknesses that are open to some sympathy (not that I approve of his reaction to them, heh). But even though I'm not on the same page with you in terms of the elder Malfoys, you keep Draco believable enough that I'm willing to suspend disbelief and accept your version of them for this story. The overall pace of this story has picked up immensely. I see what you mean when you said that people have commented on a massive change in your writing from the start. If there were one thing I'd suggest to you to keep in mind, it's "show and don't tell". I'm not too good at that one myself, either. The best example of it I can give is when the prefects led the first year Slytherins back to the common room in the dungeons. The whole transition there took up a few sentences, when you could have used that action to fill in other interesting tidbits for the reader, like Draco's observation of his classmates, and the first years, of the school itself. That sort of thing. I'd love to see more fleshed out details, although in general, the interaction between Draco and just about everyone has been fantastic. Anyway, moving on to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Yeah, this is just one of my interpretations of Lucius; I have others! ;) I enjoy writing him and have another WIP with him in it. As far as the "show don't tell," that was a bit slow in coming for me. But I think that aspect of my writing has improved in newer chapters. Thanks again.
Name: Ives reviewed
Everything's So Blurry on Jun 11, 2004 05:25 pm
I loved the Slytherins bickering at the table. That scene rocked.
I think you have set Ginny and Draco up very realistically.
Ane before I forget...this Micheal kid. Wow, am I ever curious about him! I don't normally go for transfer student fics but you've worked him in so artfully, he's gone right under my radar! There is something about him though, and I'm wondering if it has to do with the cliffhanger you've left us with!
Author's Response: Ivy - Thanks! Glad you like the story. Stay tuned, because things are really going to start happening. It's fun to write about the unknown lives of Slytherins (such as the table scene); JKR tells us so little about them, you can pretty much make it all up (within reason)! ;)