Five years ago Ginny Weasley disappeared from Harry Potter and the Wizarding World. What happens when she is found, a hidden passion and a forbidden relationship are revealed? [On hiatus]Category: Works in Progress
I'd be willing to beta for you, but I'm really busy, so I'm not always quick at getting things done. If you don't mind that, email me at priorincantatem@gmail.com. Oh, and if you want to check if I know what I'm doing, I suggest you talk to Airmid. I'm currently betaing for her fic "Why Me?".
Author's Response: thankyou :D
Named after and based on the song "See the Sun Again" By Dido. Pansy Parkinson left Draco with no word on where she went to, just that she'd owl when she was ready. Can Ginny help her friend see that there is life after Pansy?Category: Works in Progress
I really like this, but I would like a lot more background on how they got together. The most often forgotten thing in D/G fics is the fact that, when your fic starts (or at least at some time between the books and the fic) they hated each other, or at least appeared to. They don't just kiss and make up. Ginny isn't that easy, and I really don't think Draco is either. It's fine to start your fic in a place where there is already a relationship (platonic or romantic) but don't forget how it started, and please explain it to the readers.
Author's Response: oh, I will. I haven\'t had much time lately to work on any of my stories really. I just added one that has been hanging around my computer since xmas. I\'m graduating college this semester, so hopefully I\'ll have more time. Thanks a bunch for the review! I love it.
It all started with a little boy and girl, playing and promising their love forever at the only Ministry of Magic Christmas Party. Eleven years later, war is waging, and they only barely know about that night.Category: Completed Short Stories
You have a grammar problem here:
"Their sons, all of the them, had a different suit that were proper and elegant."
Okay, what's there age here? I'd say you have to make them at least a few years older before this will be at all believable for their age. Six year olds (is that right) don't do things quite like that. Mostly I think it could have worked if they're kind of copying someone except for the "you're cure". Somehow that really didn't work for me.
But it was a cute story even though it's not really realistic.
Author's Response: Oh, the days of my youth. I wrote this -- I think -- three years ago without a spell-checker and about a year after I actually started writing anything. I look at it now and cringe a bit, so I can see why you\'re pointing out my mistakes and I completely agree with you. Thanks for being honest -- I\'m debating on whether I should rewrite this so it\'s at least a little bit plausible, but I doubt I have the patience, attention span or time to. Anyway, thank you, again.
What do you give a man who has everything?Category: Completed Short Stories
Just FYI, there is another fic on dracoandginny.com with the same name. You don't need to change your name, but you might want to.
I dreaded the next time she’d find me in a deserted corridor, and in a strange way I also looked forward to it. I hated the constant bogged-down feeling of being stalked, and yet there was a tiny fluttering of pride presiding somewhere within my stomach walls. The idea that Weasley’s little dolt of a sister was so enamored by me that she needed to see me nigh on every day would bring a smirk to my face in the strangest of instances.Category: Completed Short Stories
I love your characterization, especially Lucius and Narcissa. They were wonderfully evil without really knowing they were that way.
And the storming was great. It made me laugh out loud for quite a period of time. Hilarious, I tell you.
"He wondered what had happened. Who was dead, who was hurt, and who survived? From both sides.Category: Completed Short Stories
Tomorrow, he thought, as he looked down at her battle-ravaged face. It begins tomorrow."
A short ficlet based on a drabble I wrote a long time ago. After the final battle, Ginny seeks comfort and Draco is there for her.
"Campaigned tirelessly to anyone he thought might be able to influence the decision of the Order." This sentence in the second paragraph doesn't make sense.
I liked it, but it didn't make very much sense. Generally, in a one-shot, you have to be clearer than you do in a chaptered fic, because your readers only have one chance to get it. It isn't explained afterwords. So, it is going to be more easily confusing.
Author's Response: Would it make more sense if I said that it was implied that Draco had sought sanctuary with the OotP and had wanted to join them in the final battle but was considered too great a risk - too much of a likelihood that he might be a double agent and betray them at the crucial moment. So he was sent to a \'safe house\' until it was all over.
Ginny deals with the loss of lovers and the complications of a new relationship with Draco. But, will her love for Draco be stronger than the love that she had for a certain someone before he died? Told in Ginny's point of view.Category: Works in Progress
INGREDIENTS:
1 (18.25 ounce) package devil's food cake mix
1 (3.9 ounce) package instant chocolate pudding mix
2 cups sour cream
1 cup melted butter
5 eggs
1 teaspoon almond extract
2 cups semisweet chocolate chips
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DIRECTIONS:
Preheat oven to 350 degrees F (175 degrees C). Grease a 10 inch Bundt pan.
In a large bowl, stir together cake mix and pudding mix. Make a well in the center and pour in sour cream, melted butter, eggs and almond extract. Beat on low speed until blended. Scrape bowl, and beat 4 minutes on medium speed. Blend in chocolate chips. Pour batter into prepared pan.
Bake in preheated oven for 50 to 55 minutes. Let cool in pan for 10 minutes, then turn out onto a wire rack and cool completely.
It's okay not 'ok'. Please don't use slang unless it's neccessary for the character.
I have a hard time believing they would even talk to each other so quickly let alone be good friends. You're going to need a whole lot of backstory including their hate for each other and when things changed before this is going to be at all believable.
That was a little too fairy taleish for me. But it was at least half the explanation I wanted from the last chapter. I would have one major question: Draco admitted he was a jerk/ponce during and before the war ended. So he must have at least somewhat believed the blood stuff. And why in the world would he have fallen in love with Ginny. She would have been regarded as a piece of slime. Not even worth considering as a person and therefore obviously not even a possible partner. But maybe I'm not giving Draco enough credit.
Okay, so not so much like a fairy tale any more. It's getting better. And I really do quite like this. Though I'm not big on song fics, generally. The song getts in the way and I only really like them if It's a song I know really well. Unlike these.
Okay, so not so much like a fairy tale any more. It's getting better. And I really do quite like this. Though I'm not big on song fics, generally. The song getts in the way and I only really like them if It's a song I know really well, unlike these.
Harry Potter defeats Lord Voldemort, and the wizarding world rejoices. Ginny Weasley's hopes and dreams seem to come true, at last; Draco Malfoy's end in Azkaban prison. But there is more to life than the obvious choices, and as Ginny and Draco struggle to redefine themselves in a post-war world, a chance encounter leads to more than either of them could ever have imagined...Category: Long and Completed
That is certainly an interesting approach to marriage. Not one that I would try myself, but interesting all the same. This is good stuff. I particularly liked it when you avoided the 'I love you' so wonderfully in the last chapter. There are times, though few, in a story, when characters need to say that, but, often, those times are missed and instead those words are plasterd in all the wrong places. Wonderful.
Draco certainly made a big leap. When I saw the conditions of the contract him a Arthur signed, the first thing I though was: marriage. But I bashed that line of thought immediately, and soon after, it happened. Amazing, isn't it. I wonder how long it will take him to sort out why he did that.
Well, This is very good writing. I can't wait to see the sequel.
(DH spoilers!) Some speculated that Fred and George were training her to take over someday, that she was their protégé and the heiress of Weasleys’ Wizard Wheezes. The only one Fred and George would see as worthy to take over, people said. ( 7th year, Rated Naughty just in case.)Category: Works in Progress
I just thought I'd tell you I love your voice. It's really casual and when some people try that it doesn't work all so well, but it seems like you have it naturally and it works really well. It's the kind of amusing that keeps one mildly happy for a long time but doesn't have them bursting out laughing (which is rather embarrassing when reading in a computer lab, so that's a very good thing.)
Author's Response: haha, thanks so much! that\'s a really nice thing to hear, i really appreciate it!
The Second war is over, all ended as it should. Harry Potter defeated the Dark Lord and the world rejoiced. Seven years later Draco Malfoy finds that he must deal with death, love and life all at the same time. Meanwhile Ginny Weasley has made a name for herself in the Wizarding medical career. What happens when two worlds collide with the help of a magazine and a rather determined friend? Can old enemies form bonds of friendship? Can friendship ever become more? Just exactly how well did Ginny’s brothers teach her to fight? And what say does Draco's drug of choice have in all this?Category: Works in Progress
You called Lisa's baby Amy and then once you sliped up and called her Amber. It was right after Draco asked how the Potter Project was going.
Author's Response: The Amy/Amber thing is intentional, you’ll understand it soon. Chapter 12 explains it a bit more. Thanks for the review!
I'm liking this. It's really good, though, as I've already said twice, I'm higly confused over the Amy/Amber thing. One person who happens to have two names? Two people who seem to have the exact same position as Lisa's only daughter?
Keep Writing, you're doing a good job. I look forward to your next chapter. -
Author's Response: Thank you! I see that the Amy/Amber thing has confused a lot of people. It truly was not my intention to do so but I think that Blaise clears it all up in chapter 12. If there are any questions after that then ask again and I’ll go into more detail. Chapter 12 will be up shortly! Thank you so much for the review!
Well, so I guess seeing Draco and Ginny together looking so adorable together, Blaise couldn't help it, could he. And, you know, good for him. After all, he deserves it. This is great stuff. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review! I’m glad to hear your happy for Blaise! Your right, he does deserve someone! Thanks for reading!
This is good. Draco is making me angry. Ginny is making me sympathetic. Just as it should be.
^_^ Keep it up.
One-shot. The war has finally ended, but there are still entanglements to work out, especially between Draco Malfoy and Ginny Weasley.Category: Completed Short Stories
I liked that take on Ginny. She's normally so pure and warm. I don't think she'd be after the chamber. I think I like a cold Ginny and a desperate Draco. That was very believable.
I was a little confused about the whole "I could be with Harry" thing and why it was a mistake for Ginny to say that. I can see that as being reassuring just as quickly as I can see it insulting Draco. (Though maybe it’s just Draco being stupid over Harry.) But then again, it makes it obvious before that there's some definite tension when he reacts that way to something that doesn’t seem like such a big deal. So I don't really think you should take that out, but I'd love another sentence or two clarifying in some way or another why that's angering for Draco even though it might be obvious to really obsessive fans. Don't make the mistake of thinking all of your audience is brilliant. It just doesn't happen that way.
Oh, and I loved this sentence:
"Ginny let her arms drop and Draco felt the cold air wrap around him instead."
Keep it up. And I hope the next chapter of Common Cure is well on it's way. I like that story.
Author's Response: Thank you for the constructive criticism. It\'s very helpful and I do consider it when I write. I try not to be too ambiguous when I write (haha, I sound like I have done this more than twice! but I suppose every chapter is like a blank page) or if I am, I do so with the intention of tying up loose ends. But once in awhile, I guess I like to shake things up a bit. And thanks for pinpointing specific parts! I really appreciate that!!
Starting in HBP from Ginny's point of view.Category: Works in Progress
Draco Malfoy was certainly of no interest to a Weasley unless it was for hexing practice. Ginny, however, finds that even if he's unwilling to accept it, he's definitely earned some sympathy.
Other pairings are Lupin/Tonks, Neville/Luna, and Harry/Hermione. Rating might have to change later.
That's a rather twisted Ginny you've got here. I like it. Keep writing. I'd interested to see what you're doing as I sure as hell can't figure it out on my own. >_
"Will I join the fight? What is my fate?” A world of uncertainty tumbles into chaos. Ginny's sixth year may not continue if Hogwarts doesn't re-open. Draco's life may not continue at all: "If one really is affected by their environment shouldn’t I have been able to do it? After growing up the way I did, why couldn't I kill? What happens now? What is my fate?”Category: Works in Progress
You're a good writer, but I want to see the beginings of an original plot. I can see a very cliche plot coming out of here that wouldn't be very interesting. On the same note, I can see something very good and very much unique coming out of here. Just make sure you're ready to make the second. Good writing shouldn't be wasted.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. I hope that I come up with something unique so that I surprise you and don\'t pull a cliche plotline.
Seven years after the Second Wizard War, a mother tells her daughter the story of the man she loves, who disappeared after the war ended to save his and his lover’s life. The Wizarding World has settled down again, peace returning to them after the defeat of Lord Voldemort. Written in first person, present tense, from the point of view of a seven year old girl. Pre-book seven.Category: Works in Progress
I think this is good. Interesting, certainly. I keep stopping and trying to figure out if it's believable that she's seven. And most of the time, I'm not sure. She seems a little more intelligent then some seven year olds but not all of them. Some kids are naturally brilliant, and she certainly has good genes for such. Keep checking yourself, because it's so easy to slip in to your normal voice, but you seem to be doing a wonderful job of it currently.
I liked Luna. She's highly amusing. And she's my favorite character in the books. (Draco second and Ginny third, of course.)
Author's Response: Those are my favourite three characters. Along with Sirius Black and the other Marauders. ^^ Thanks, I will check -- I\'ve read all my chapters a million times. xP
"a hint of friendliness that I can’t help but admire." How old is Rose again?
I liked the wall though.
Author's Response: I guess I\'m not perfect. I thought I had gotten a hang of this \'young girl\' thing, but I guess I still stick things in that don\'t quite fit. That should be taken out, but I don\'t like editing stories after they\'ve been posted (unless it\'s spelling). Thanks for pointing that out -- you\'re totally right, it\'s definately not good. I\'ll keep an eye out for that -- or things like that -- in the future. Thanks!!
I was reading the other reviews, and even though I kind of said this already, I just wanted you to know you're not that far off. I have a younger brother who's seven right now and he reads astronomy books (The kind you'd get at a planitarium for adults who don't know anything much about the subject.) for fun as bed time reading. He actually reads better than my sister who's two years older than him. Some kids really are just intelligent.
Author's Response: Wow, that\'s impressive. Good for him! So look at Cissa that way.
Ginny Weasley and Draco Malfoy have always been enemies. What will happen when they end up in a place where no one knows of their family rivalry?Category: Long and Completed
I like how you wrote this. It was a little confusing at first, but it's kind of fun to see what both of them are thinking, and how both of them are seeing the situation.
You're making Draco awful decent though. So, you're going to need a good reason for the facade (insecurities or the like).
Author's Response: Oh gosh, I know. The whole story is actually already written, because I\'ve posted this on two other fanfiction-things. Everyone always said the same thing \"Draco\'s too nice.\" Then they hit later chapters and were like \"Okay, never mind.\"
I find your writing style very interesting. Sometimes it's very confusing, but other times it's wonderful. Just make sure you have a beta tell you if it makes sense; I've had to read a couple things many times to make sense out of them.
Author's Response: Ooh, can you give me an example from the text that you found confusing? I\'ll fix it right up.